for The Jailer: the Awakening2/15/2019 c17 xSean
His rightful name is not Namikaze, get your fucking head canon outta here. While this fic was shit it was a somewhat entertaining read, even if they don't seem to have done ANYTHING. Has totally went tits up now, no reaaon to bring Minato or Kushina into this.
His rightful name is not Namikaze, get your fucking head canon outta here. While this fic was shit it was a somewhat entertaining read, even if they don't seem to have done ANYTHING. Has totally went tits up now, no reaaon to bring Minato or Kushina into this.
2/15/2019 c15 xSean
If this truly Minato and Kushina thats one truly awesome way of putting your fic right down the shitter, congratz!
If this truly Minato and Kushina thats one truly awesome way of putting your fic right down the shitter, congratz!
2/15/2019 c15 xSean
How does that even make any sense? He is afraid of losing everything he has ever gained so he fights for it tooth and nail... So that makes him a coward? Wtf are you on about.
How does that even make any sense? He is afraid of losing everything he has ever gained so he fights for it tooth and nail... So that makes him a coward? Wtf are you on about.
2/15/2019 c13 xSean
His name isn't Namikaze and who the hell runs around with 2 surnames... It is stupid.
His name isn't Namikaze and who the hell runs around with 2 surnames... It is stupid.
2/14/2019 c12 xSean
How fucking lame, Naruto by this point is still losing control to the darkness inside him? Jealous of Victor? You fucking kidding me? If you want a rage scene actually making something happen, not this bullshit excuse.
How fucking lame, Naruto by this point is still losing control to the darkness inside him? Jealous of Victor? You fucking kidding me? If you want a rage scene actually making something happen, not this bullshit excuse.
2/14/2019 c7 xSean
So while grammar and motives of characters seem to suck I was right about this being entertaining. The interactions between Naruto and Alice especially. Only good for a casual read with no real thought.
So while grammar and motives of characters seem to suck I was right about this being entertaining. The interactions between Naruto and Alice especially. Only good for a casual read with no real thought.
2/14/2019 c2 xSean
Why would a meteor shower care what time of the day it is? It's space rocks flying by the planets yes?
Alice has some subconcious control over Naruto? Why would she even want Penelope knocked out? Why does Naruto's Necklace impart knowledge? Why are they putting up this charade as though the first meeting was a dream? Wtf...
Why does Naruro have amnesia? Is this some sort of indirect nerf? Have him forget all his skills so he can't wreck cunts?
Oh great, it's gonna be one of those stories. Naruto is a knock out to every chick in sight.
Why would they even toy with Penelope like that? Naruto and Alice are pretending he has Amnesia? Why? Just why? What is the point?
The control she has over him already isn't even funny. There is no explanation to it at all...
Why the fuck does Alice want to keep him around and have him be the fucking gardener? Motives, what is the fucking motive for it? What the actual fuck... She is still lying to her sister about him having Amnesia too, why?!
I thought this whole Gardening thing was partly due to Naruto's Hobby of taking care of plants, yes he does actually do that by the way. But you have it so he doesn't even know what a weed is compared to a Rose? For real?
You mean Naruto has to state he is from another world? After flying in via Meteor? They couldn't clue that in themselves after Alice's trip to Wonderland? Woah, how daft can you get.
Why does she want him there? You haven't explained ANYTHING in regards to motives here. He looks like her Father yes? Is that why? So why the lies to Penelope and having him be the gardener and why isn't he outta there already by himself? He wakes in another world and there was no definitive ending to his world but he is playing gardener? What?!
Don't worry about the holes in the story? Yeah, easy to do when the whole thing is one big hole. Like what the fuck is even happening, seriously...
It honestly looks like an entertaining read, you have a few funny moments and what not but everything that has happened so far makes 0 sense. It really bugs me... Naruto is so chill, the needless lies and this shitty control ability. Just why?
Why would a meteor shower care what time of the day it is? It's space rocks flying by the planets yes?
Alice has some subconcious control over Naruto? Why would she even want Penelope knocked out? Why does Naruto's Necklace impart knowledge? Why are they putting up this charade as though the first meeting was a dream? Wtf...
Why does Naruro have amnesia? Is this some sort of indirect nerf? Have him forget all his skills so he can't wreck cunts?
Oh great, it's gonna be one of those stories. Naruto is a knock out to every chick in sight.
Why would they even toy with Penelope like that? Naruto and Alice are pretending he has Amnesia? Why? Just why? What is the point?
The control she has over him already isn't even funny. There is no explanation to it at all...
Why the fuck does Alice want to keep him around and have him be the fucking gardener? Motives, what is the fucking motive for it? What the actual fuck... She is still lying to her sister about him having Amnesia too, why?!
I thought this whole Gardening thing was partly due to Naruto's Hobby of taking care of plants, yes he does actually do that by the way. But you have it so he doesn't even know what a weed is compared to a Rose? For real?
You mean Naruto has to state he is from another world? After flying in via Meteor? They couldn't clue that in themselves after Alice's trip to Wonderland? Woah, how daft can you get.
Why does she want him there? You haven't explained ANYTHING in regards to motives here. He looks like her Father yes? Is that why? So why the lies to Penelope and having him be the gardener and why isn't he outta there already by himself? He wakes in another world and there was no definitive ending to his world but he is playing gardener? What?!
Don't worry about the holes in the story? Yeah, easy to do when the whole thing is one big hole. Like what the fuck is even happening, seriously...
It honestly looks like an entertaining read, you have a few funny moments and what not but everything that has happened so far makes 0 sense. It really bugs me... Naruto is so chill, the needless lies and this shitty control ability. Just why?
2/14/2019 c1 xSean
So while I am very disappointed in how Naruto was beaten by Madara that was the way Ametarasu originally was supposed to work. Flames appeared instantly where you look, doesn't sound as though you can dodge it but you can lol.
Shinobi are murderers, while they do it for money and their village there is no doubt that they murder people for a living.
Wtf is with the tutorial like beggining? I get it's a part of the game but wtf, we are talking an actual crossover here not a tutorial for chosen paths and fighting styles...
Why have they beat Kyuubi already and she all of a sudden whaps one on him?
So while I am very disappointed in how Naruto was beaten by Madara that was the way Ametarasu originally was supposed to work. Flames appeared instantly where you look, doesn't sound as though you can dodge it but you can lol.
Shinobi are murderers, while they do it for money and their village there is no doubt that they murder people for a living.
Wtf is with the tutorial like beggining? I get it's a part of the game but wtf, we are talking an actual crossover here not a tutorial for chosen paths and fighting styles...
Why have they beat Kyuubi already and she all of a sudden whaps one on him?
2/2/2019 c19 
1Edmonton58
good so far just needs to be updated more often because its been almost 7 years since you last updated.
1Edmonton58good so far just needs to be updated more often because its been almost 7 years since you last updated.
3/26/2018 c9 22Winged Seer Wolf
I've noticed minor spelling mistakes or wrong words used in several sentences while reading chapters 1-9. Please spell check and review your chapters before posting.
22Winged Seer WolfI've noticed minor spelling mistakes or wrong words used in several sentences while reading chapters 1-9. Please spell check and review your chapters before posting.
5/29/2017 c19 Guest
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7/27/2016 c12 9sd74
I would just go with Ero-Sennin' intro as they all line up to get an autograph for an omake. ( Scarecrow is an good example of an heartless for the omake to work and Obito is an example of nobody).
9sd74I would just go with Ero-Sennin' intro as they all line up to get an autograph for an omake. ( Scarecrow is an good example of an heartless for the omake to work and Obito is an example of nobody).
8/16/2015 c19 ARSLOTHES
I hope this will be updated soon, this is one of the few really good Naruto x kingdom hearts crossovers
I hope this will be updated soon, this is one of the few really good Naruto x kingdom hearts crossovers