for Taking The Leap
22/16/2009 c1 afkg
Well, this in an interesting concept. I like it so far, even though it seems to be a bit harsh to Ice Girl.
The main problem with this is that you have massive great chunks of writing without any space. It's extremely difficult on the eyes and I nearly stopped reading. So imagine how many actually did.
Every time someone new starts talking, press the enter key and start a new line. Every time you start talking about something different, start a new line.
That will make it much easier to read and will let the story shine through rather than have it pushed to the side by a little thing like typography.
Well, this in an interesting concept. I like it so far, even though it seems to be a bit harsh to Ice Girl.
The main problem with this is that you have massive great chunks of writing without any space. It's extremely difficult on the eyes and I nearly stopped reading. So imagine how many actually did.
Every time someone new starts talking, press the enter key and start a new line. Every time you start talking about something different, start a new line.
That will make it much easier to read and will let the story shine through rather than have it pushed to the side by a little thing like typography.