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9/11/2010 c1 one.twilight.sun
Aw man! I don't even know who these people are and I can feel it! Thanks for reviewing my "Gone" :)
5/30/2009 c1 5SamManson14
Me: SO SAD! *goes ghosts* (flash of purple light: brown hair, blue eyes, and green night-gown turn to purple hair, alabster eyes |alabaster means transuculent which means it i nearly the same color as the eyes itself|, and mostly black but with purpe trimings like danny's only purple instead of white) DIE VLAD!

Vlad: OH COME FLIPPING ON! DANIEL ALREADY BEAT ME UP!

Danny: ITS MOTHER FLIPPING DANNY YOU BASTARD! *goes ghost too)

Me and Danny: Body slam Vlad*

Vlad: *iz dead*

Me: yah we killed him!

Danny: I wish sam was hear to celebrate with us...

Me: me too...

(de end)
5/23/2009 c1 20Obiwan456
Wow, how come all your stories are so sad? I love it.
5/10/2009 c1 153candelight
Oh...so very sad...:( Fantastic job, however.

Ah..you like Percy Jackson and the Olympians? ;) I seriously love that series...and the last book-well, kind of-just came out...

Ah...RachelxPercy? AnnabethxPercy? The two fanfic couples in an epic clash...;)
4/3/2009 c1 26at-a-glance
Hello, I got your message and decided to help a fellow author out.

Torture fics are always fun and its always nice to explore the drama from different points of view and this seems to get the point. For more reviews give the readers a better understanding of how Sam and Danny got into this situation and why Vlad decided to beat Sam to death, obviously you portrayed the element of torture for Danny, but I feel this could be so much richer if you added more to it. Always remember descriptors are your friends, like talk about the time, the weather, the place, the physical pain in detail, the sights. For a deeper understanding explore the pyschological aspects for all three characters, the more human your characters are the more impact you'll have on the readers. Clarify, beautify, justify, think of those three things when writing and wondering if you got your point across.

This isn't terrible, you dig? This is just my advice for you so that you may have writing success. Also remember reviews aren't always the most important thing, if you find something worth writing then it really wasn't a waste and someone will apperciate it whether or not they tell you. I for one think this is good and you're on a good path.

Happy writing good luck.
3/7/2009 c1 3EmoGurl 301
Hi i loved it and i want you to write more like this
3/7/2009 c1 4Deruptus Ac Fragmentum
That was...sad and depressing, but, it was really good! keep writing!
3/5/2009 c1 kagome184
AW:(that is so sad...
2/26/2009 c1 XSuperXStarX
Good oneshot, just a few things: During Danny's POV, in some parts you switched from his POV to narrator POV. Just maybe reread it and fix what you can. Otherwise, really good!

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