12/16/2009 c1 2Tbn Skywriter
lol this is a lil funny! i wonder who dare sasuke must be kiba or sumone else...other than that job well done!
lol this is a lil funny! i wonder who dare sasuke must be kiba or sumone else...other than that job well done!
2/24/2009 c1 hrgggggggggh
Hah, that was a pretty clever pun. :)
I have a suggestion. I think your writing could be much improved by a little more editing. You may want to just double-check yourself a few times, or maybe find a beta to back you up with grammar and easily-confused words (we all mess them up).
You actually have a really nice style. I especially liked "the sun [was] shining its blinding rays [into] the window and overflowing onto his face and bed and [wherever] else it could reach with its golden claws." (with a few corrections.) You obviously have a way with words; your writing just needs to be polished a bit. :)
Good luck!
Hah, that was a pretty clever pun. :)
I have a suggestion. I think your writing could be much improved by a little more editing. You may want to just double-check yourself a few times, or maybe find a beta to back you up with grammar and easily-confused words (we all mess them up).
You actually have a really nice style. I especially liked "the sun [was] shining its blinding rays [into] the window and overflowing onto his face and bed and [wherever] else it could reach with its golden claws." (with a few corrections.) You obviously have a way with words; your writing just needs to be polished a bit. :)
Good luck!