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11/23/2014 c1 4bazzpop00
lol that was good XD thx for the read.
3/13/2010 c1 MangaArtFan
GO SASUKE!
12/16/2009 c1 2Tbn Skywriter
lol this is a lil funny! i wonder who dare sasuke must be kiba or sumone else...other than that job well done!
7/4/2009 c1 8AlisaLovesYou-O.o
Cute! This is a really funny and cute fic, i love it, great job. ^w^
2/24/2009 c1 Serenityofthematrix
this was funny...
2/24/2009 c1 hrgggggggggh
Hah, that was a pretty clever pun. :)

I have a suggestion. I think your writing could be much improved by a little more editing. You may want to just double-check yourself a few times, or maybe find a beta to back you up with grammar and easily-confused words (we all mess them up).

You actually have a really nice style. I especially liked "the sun [was] shining its blinding rays [into] the window and overflowing onto his face and bed and [wherever] else it could reach with its golden claws." (with a few corrections.) You obviously have a way with words; your writing just needs to be polished a bit. :)

Good luck!

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