for Book 1: Loves, Lies and Promises
16/22/2017 c1 Guest
Stupid ass story. Naruto is to weak
Stupid ass story. Naruto is to weak
11/13/2015 c20 Meirai
Nicely done.
Another that belongs in pictures and movies to be seen by all and to famed and loved.
Nicely done.
Another that belongs in pictures and movies to be seen by all and to famed and loved.
8/24/2014 c20 Gabyviolet
só vou te dizer isso uma unica vez não sou de fazer comentários mas dessa vez eu acho plausível.
A sua história é boa pra Cara*%&$ bem você me entendeu kkkkkk
to seguindo e indicando.
só vou te dizer isso uma unica vez não sou de fazer comentários mas dessa vez eu acho plausível.
A sua história é boa pra Cara*%&$ bem você me entendeu kkkkkk
to seguindo e indicando.
5/21/2014 c20 Deanna4Prezzy
Ahhhh classic. I remember when I first read this on deviantart! Love this fic, I hope it always stays up!
Ahhhh classic. I remember when I first read this on deviantart! Love this fic, I hope it always stays up!
6/27/2013 c1 RinnyTheOrange
I like your story, but... where are the "..."? I mean when you use '...' the character is usually thinking NOT speaking -_-
I like your story, but... where are the "..."? I mean when you use '...' the character is usually thinking NOT speaking -_-
3/2/2013 c14 Thule
I don't entirely know what it is, but when a girl gets desperate with me like this, it tugs at my heartstrings. Hard to resist at the point, hah, so I really enjoyed this chapter and it's lemon.
I don't entirely know what it is, but when a girl gets desperate with me like this, it tugs at my heartstrings. Hard to resist at the point, hah, so I really enjoyed this chapter and it's lemon.
1/25/2013 c20 Thule
Well done. I always enjoy an author who can write worth a damn. But really, you have a bit of an issue with keeping the reader up to date on the state of your enviroments.
On more than one occasion I read an update to the surroundings and was taken completely off guard by it and was forced to reimagine a bunch of scenes with the update, breaking the immersion.
Just a bit of constructive criticism to help you improve, but other than that, well done. I wish I could really enjoy these kinds of stories, but mild sociopaths like me are doomed to only luke-warm feelings.
Well done. I always enjoy an author who can write worth a damn. But really, you have a bit of an issue with keeping the reader up to date on the state of your enviroments.
On more than one occasion I read an update to the surroundings and was taken completely off guard by it and was forced to reimagine a bunch of scenes with the update, breaking the immersion.
Just a bit of constructive criticism to help you improve, but other than that, well done. I wish I could really enjoy these kinds of stories, but mild sociopaths like me are doomed to only luke-warm feelings.
1/17/2013 c10 Guest
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1/17/2013 c6 Guest
no problem
no problem