for Three Under Par4/6/2009 c7 
2Karol Wolfe
I honestly didn't know the lyrics. They did remind me of of another song, but it would have been more appropriate for Frank's phone.
So far I like the story. Keep it up.
2Karol WolfeI honestly didn't know the lyrics. They did remind me of of another song, but it would have been more appropriate for Frank's phone.
So far I like the story. Keep it up.
4/4/2009 c6 13Roswalyn
I didn't think this chapter was boring at all! It seemed pretty significant in terms of further developing the mystery. We now have Warning #2, a possible elimination of a suspect, and a very mysterious disappearing caddy. All in all, a very intriguing chapter, and I can't wait for more!
13RoswalynI didn't think this chapter was boring at all! It seemed pretty significant in terms of further developing the mystery. We now have Warning #2, a possible elimination of a suspect, and a very mysterious disappearing caddy. All in all, a very intriguing chapter, and I can't wait for more!
4/4/2009 c5 Roswalyn
Wow, Nick sure is taking this pretty casually. It was nice to see that brief interaction between him and Madison, though. Definitely makes their relationship pretty solid, especially in comparison to our two detectives that have both recently gotten out of relationships. I really liked the clue about the slashed tire - cleverly written on your part, and cleverly discovered on Nancy's part. And I suspect that the appointment card might just come in handy later on!
Steven Ryan is an interesting guy. I have a feeling we have our first red herring on the case. :) At least the detectives recognize that the evidence against him is all circumstantial. Again, great job giving substance to an OC. And I'm really glad Bess could see the arrogance as well, rather than just falling for an attractive guy as is her MO!
Wow, Nick sure is taking this pretty casually. It was nice to see that brief interaction between him and Madison, though. Definitely makes their relationship pretty solid, especially in comparison to our two detectives that have both recently gotten out of relationships. I really liked the clue about the slashed tire - cleverly written on your part, and cleverly discovered on Nancy's part. And I suspect that the appointment card might just come in handy later on!
Steven Ryan is an interesting guy. I have a feeling we have our first red herring on the case. :) At least the detectives recognize that the evidence against him is all circumstantial. Again, great job giving substance to an OC. And I'm really glad Bess could see the arrogance as well, rather than just falling for an attractive guy as is her MO!
4/4/2009 c4 Roswalyn
Evil cliffhanger! Guess the bad guy's threats weren't so hollow after all. But let's discuss the more...ahem...important part of this chapter, shall we? Frank and Nancy! Can I just say that I absolutely LOVED Frank getting angry at the thought of Ned cheating on Nancy? Frank's usually so even-tempered that it's especially gratifying to see that side of him come out on occasion. Especially when it shows how much he truly cares about Nancy. And I'm glad you got it out in the open that they've both broken up with their significant others. Now us readers can sit back and watch the tension build! And LOL at Joe interrupting them - it's always someone, isn't it? First Pete Dawson, then Bess - I guess Joe was due for a turn. :)
Great chapter!
Evil cliffhanger! Guess the bad guy's threats weren't so hollow after all. But let's discuss the more...ahem...important part of this chapter, shall we? Frank and Nancy! Can I just say that I absolutely LOVED Frank getting angry at the thought of Ned cheating on Nancy? Frank's usually so even-tempered that it's especially gratifying to see that side of him come out on occasion. Especially when it shows how much he truly cares about Nancy. And I'm glad you got it out in the open that they've both broken up with their significant others. Now us readers can sit back and watch the tension build! And LOL at Joe interrupting them - it's always someone, isn't it? First Pete Dawson, then Bess - I guess Joe was due for a turn. :)
Great chapter!
4/4/2009 c3 Roswalyn
I absolutely LOVED Joe teasing Nancy about her girly side! He's right - we don't get to see it too often. In the books, there would be brief references to Nancy paying attention to her outfits, her makeup, etc., but when she was with the Hardys, she rarely discussed such things in front of them. It was mostly work, work, work (except, of course, when she was flirting with Frank!) Speaking of which, I loved the second slightly-longer-than-necessary hug as much as the first!
I'm glad we finally got to meet Nick and his fiancee. I think OCs are one of the hardest things to write in fanfiction, because you're finally stepping outside of the realm of the world that the books have set up for you. But here, you've done a great job of giving us background about them and giving the characters substance. I look forward to learning more about them!
I absolutely LOVED Joe teasing Nancy about her girly side! He's right - we don't get to see it too often. In the books, there would be brief references to Nancy paying attention to her outfits, her makeup, etc., but when she was with the Hardys, she rarely discussed such things in front of them. It was mostly work, work, work (except, of course, when she was flirting with Frank!) Speaking of which, I loved the second slightly-longer-than-necessary hug as much as the first!
I'm glad we finally got to meet Nick and his fiancee. I think OCs are one of the hardest things to write in fanfiction, because you're finally stepping outside of the realm of the world that the books have set up for you. But here, you've done a great job of giving us background about them and giving the characters substance. I look forward to learning more about them!
4/4/2009 c2 Roswalyn
Ah, the hugs that last a little longer than necessary - I love those! Glad to see one in this chapter. :) And Bess and Joe teasing Nancy and Frank, respectively, about one another just never gets old. In addition to all this great character interaction, you also gave us some important details about the case. All in all, a wonderful, well-balanced chapter!
Ah, the hugs that last a little longer than necessary - I love those! Glad to see one in this chapter. :) And Bess and Joe teasing Nancy and Frank, respectively, about one another just never gets old. In addition to all this great character interaction, you also gave us some important details about the case. All in all, a wonderful, well-balanced chapter!
4/4/2009 c1 Roswalyn
Since I just discovered this story and absolutely love it, I'll be flooding your inbox with multiple reviews, as I plan on reviewing each chapter separately. :) So here goes the first one! As intros go, this was great. I LOVE stories that are in the old SuperMystery format, with the chance meeting between Nancy and the Hardys as they just happen to be in the same place at the same time. Plus, in a short chapter, you gave us a lot of detail that sets the stage very well - Frank's breakup with Callie, the golf tournament, and the familiar banter between Nancy/Bess and Frank/Joe. This was definitely a chapter that made me eager to get to the next one, so kudos on that!
With that said, on to the next chapter I go!
Since I just discovered this story and absolutely love it, I'll be flooding your inbox with multiple reviews, as I plan on reviewing each chapter separately. :) So here goes the first one! As intros go, this was great. I LOVE stories that are in the old SuperMystery format, with the chance meeting between Nancy and the Hardys as they just happen to be in the same place at the same time. Plus, in a short chapter, you gave us a lot of detail that sets the stage very well - Frank's breakup with Callie, the golf tournament, and the familiar banter between Nancy/Bess and Frank/Joe. This was definitely a chapter that made me eager to get to the next one, so kudos on that!
With that said, on to the next chapter I go!
4/4/2009 c6 Dayssoapfan1984
Another great chapter, even though, no cliffie's.
I wonder if along with Steven, Nick's best friend, Jake will be a suspect?
Can't wait till the next update.
Another great chapter, even though, no cliffie's.
I wonder if along with Steven, Nick's best friend, Jake will be a suspect?
Can't wait till the next update.
4/3/2009 c6 19niver
Poor Joe. I should have known that the moment he was left alone he would end up knocked unconcious. Poor baby.
19niverPoor Joe. I should have known that the moment he was left alone he would end up knocked unconcious. Poor baby.
4/3/2009 c6 5Grey Fool
I didn't think it was a little dry. How else were you going to introduce the next warning? great job.
5Grey FoolI didn't think it was a little dry. How else were you going to introduce the next warning? great job.
4/3/2009 c6 11Silver Scorpion
hey awesome chap although bit dry but make it up on the next chp with some frank and nancy.u're biggest fan
silver scorpion
11Silver Scorpionhey awesome chap although bit dry but make it up on the next chp with some frank and nancy.u're biggest fan
silver scorpion
4/2/2009 c6 83Lady Emily
Don't worry, it wasn't boring. Poor Joe- I love how worried Bess got when she saw his bruise. Still nothing in the way of concrete evidence yet- shame they can't rule out Steven as a suspect because he may have had an accomplice, but hopefully they will be able to get some prints from the warning note... I also wonder if the "missing" caddy has anything to do with it. Was the breakdown just an accident or sabotage? Or maybe Jake's not as trustworthy as Nick thinks...?
Anyway, as usual, you're doing a great job and I can't wait for the next update!
83Lady EmilyDon't worry, it wasn't boring. Poor Joe- I love how worried Bess got when she saw his bruise. Still nothing in the way of concrete evidence yet- shame they can't rule out Steven as a suspect because he may have had an accomplice, but hopefully they will be able to get some prints from the warning note... I also wonder if the "missing" caddy has anything to do with it. Was the breakdown just an accident or sabotage? Or maybe Jake's not as trustworthy as Nick thinks...?
Anyway, as usual, you're doing a great job and I can't wait for the next update!