for Fenoglio's Inkheart10/20/2012 c2 
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Oh no! Poor Dustfinger! I think you're doing a great job keeping him in character, and even the black jackets. They are every bit as creepy now as I imagined them. Thank you for posting this! Reading on...
Bookworm
32bkwrmnlvnitOh no! Poor Dustfinger! I think you're doing a great job keeping him in character, and even the black jackets. They are every bit as creepy now as I imagined them. Thank you for posting this! Reading on...
Bookworm
7/26/2012 c11 Christopher
I love this, I have been looking for this story everywhere and i found it because of you. I hope you do not mind but i saved the story to my computer so i could read it when ever i wanted. I do not know when you made this or when you posted any of these chapters but if you still have that Inkheart Rpg going on then I would love to check it out.
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I love this, I have been looking for this story everywhere and i found it because of you. I hope you do not mind but i saved the story to my computer so i could read it when ever i wanted. I do not know when you made this or when you posted any of these chapters but if you still have that Inkheart Rpg going on then I would love to check it out.
Please Email me At
7/1/2012 c2 Guest
It is pretty good, but I have one question. Was flat nose actualy from inkheart by fenoglio it was he read out from a different book by Capricorn''s other reader who stuttered?
It is pretty good, but I have one question. Was flat nose actualy from inkheart by fenoglio it was he read out from a different book by Capricorn''s other reader who stuttered?
8/23/2011 c11 1Gyp Dark
Argh it ends! I was thoroughly enjoying this! I was actually looking for a Basta-centred fic but this looked interesting enough to read, and it certainly was! I particularly liked the Prince, he really caught me (as in the book) but all the fire-raisers were good too, and of course Dustfinger. Loved your version of how he came upon Gwin! All of the characters were good. At times, I felt scenes were a little rushed, and you could improve upon them with a touch more detail, a bit more on feelings. Instead of saying "He was afraid", describe the fear; "His head spun with fear; his knees were weak and hands shaking". Just helps the reader get deeper in touch with the character's feelings, enhances the relationship. Good plotline and nicely paced. Really good job and thanks for writing it! Blessed be =)
1Gyp DarkArgh it ends! I was thoroughly enjoying this! I was actually looking for a Basta-centred fic but this looked interesting enough to read, and it certainly was! I particularly liked the Prince, he really caught me (as in the book) but all the fire-raisers were good too, and of course Dustfinger. Loved your version of how he came upon Gwin! All of the characters were good. At times, I felt scenes were a little rushed, and you could improve upon them with a touch more detail, a bit more on feelings. Instead of saying "He was afraid", describe the fear; "His head spun with fear; his knees were weak and hands shaking". Just helps the reader get deeper in touch with the character's feelings, enhances the relationship. Good plotline and nicely paced. Really good job and thanks for writing it! Blessed be =)
8/8/2011 c11 claytone13
This story is Great! You did put Chapter 8 where chapter 11 should be. Anyway great story! Your a very gifted writer. Keep the updates coming.
This story is Great! You did put Chapter 8 where chapter 11 should be. Anyway great story! Your a very gifted writer. Keep the updates coming.
3/24/2011 c11 67Sauron Gorthaur
Yeah, not only an update, but a seriously exciting one! Way to go! This was a great chapter. Not only was it exciting and well-written, but it also portrayed Dustfinger perfectly. You've been doing a great job with all the characterizations with all the characters so far, but you really did a fantastic job in this chapter.
One of those Dustfinger characteristics that you got perfect in this chapter was his cautious nature. When he and the Prince were talking at the beginning, it was so in-character for him to be holding back and thinking through to the consequences. It was also in-character that the thing that would most worry him is death, and he can't imagine someone not being afraid of dying. In addition to that, showing his distaste for weapons, his fear, and then his shame and guilt at having run away was spot on for his character.
The Prince was also perfectly in character. His nobleness combined with his rashness is just right, as was his friendship with Dustfinger. I thought the part where he told the strolling player off for taunting Dustfinger was great. I also liked how this chapter foreshadowed Inkdeath and the way the Prince and the Bluejay sneak out at night for skirmishes in the same manner.
And, of course, Roxane's distaste of Gwin and knowledge of healing plants was in-character, as well as the way she stubbornly juts out her chin.
For constructive criticism, all I have to say is that there were a lot of small errors in this chapter, mostly typos here and there like mispelling or leaving out a word. However, it always makes me sad to see an otherwise fantastic story that has a lot of typos. If you are too busy to proof-read it, I'm sure there are plenty of beta readers who would do it for you. That would make this story perfect.
I hope your busy schedule allows you to update again soon, because you've got a hooked reader who wants to know what's going to happen next in this wonderful story. Keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
67Sauron GorthaurYeah, not only an update, but a seriously exciting one! Way to go! This was a great chapter. Not only was it exciting and well-written, but it also portrayed Dustfinger perfectly. You've been doing a great job with all the characterizations with all the characters so far, but you really did a fantastic job in this chapter.
One of those Dustfinger characteristics that you got perfect in this chapter was his cautious nature. When he and the Prince were talking at the beginning, it was so in-character for him to be holding back and thinking through to the consequences. It was also in-character that the thing that would most worry him is death, and he can't imagine someone not being afraid of dying. In addition to that, showing his distaste for weapons, his fear, and then his shame and guilt at having run away was spot on for his character.
The Prince was also perfectly in character. His nobleness combined with his rashness is just right, as was his friendship with Dustfinger. I thought the part where he told the strolling player off for taunting Dustfinger was great. I also liked how this chapter foreshadowed Inkdeath and the way the Prince and the Bluejay sneak out at night for skirmishes in the same manner.
And, of course, Roxane's distaste of Gwin and knowledge of healing plants was in-character, as well as the way she stubbornly juts out her chin.
For constructive criticism, all I have to say is that there were a lot of small errors in this chapter, mostly typos here and there like mispelling or leaving out a word. However, it always makes me sad to see an otherwise fantastic story that has a lot of typos. If you are too busy to proof-read it, I'm sure there are plenty of beta readers who would do it for you. That would make this story perfect.
I hope your busy schedule allows you to update again soon, because you've got a hooked reader who wants to know what's going to happen next in this wonderful story. Keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
3/2/2011 c11 12radha24-Dusty's apprentice
Wow! Wow! Wow!
You don't know HOW long I've been waiting for SOMEONE to write Fenoglio's Inkheart. Thank you so much for this wonderful masterpiece. In fact, I know many people on CFF (corneliafunkefans.com) that would LOVE to know what happens in the "real" Inkheart. It's so wonderful taht Roxane and Dustfinger (Dusty!) finally kiss in this chapter! Your whole story seems so realistic. Please, update soon!
~radha25 :D
12radha24-Dusty's apprenticeWow! Wow! Wow!
You don't know HOW long I've been waiting for SOMEONE to write Fenoglio's Inkheart. Thank you so much for this wonderful masterpiece. In fact, I know many people on CFF (corneliafunkefans.com) that would LOVE to know what happens in the "real" Inkheart. It's so wonderful taht Roxane and Dustfinger (Dusty!) finally kiss in this chapter! Your whole story seems so realistic. Please, update soon!
~radha25 :D
2/18/2011 c10 19Arait
Over? What happened to that long chapter you planned on posting? This is definitely not what I expected the story to be like, but I'm hooked, and I want it to keep going!
19AraitOver? What happened to that long chapter you planned on posting? This is definitely not what I expected the story to be like, but I'm hooked, and I want it to keep going!
7/26/2010 c10 67Sauron Gorthaur
I enjoyed reading this chapter from the Black Prince's POV, and seeing his thoughts about the Fire-Raisers. This story really is well done - it sounds very much like Fenoglio, except that perhaps it could be a bit more flowery, since Fenoglio seems to like using lots of words and descriptions from what we get to see of his writing in the trilogy. I particularly liked this sentence:
"In stories you always heard about a person or group of people standing up to the injustices in the world, but never see it happen in real life."
Very ironic that you would bring this in, when this is actually a story, not real life, but the Black Prince and everyone else thinks it's real life. It was a nice touch.
Please update soon. If you do, I will certainly continue to read. Keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
67Sauron GorthaurI enjoyed reading this chapter from the Black Prince's POV, and seeing his thoughts about the Fire-Raisers. This story really is well done - it sounds very much like Fenoglio, except that perhaps it could be a bit more flowery, since Fenoglio seems to like using lots of words and descriptions from what we get to see of his writing in the trilogy. I particularly liked this sentence:
"In stories you always heard about a person or group of people standing up to the injustices in the world, but never see it happen in real life."
Very ironic that you would bring this in, when this is actually a story, not real life, but the Black Prince and everyone else thinks it's real life. It was a nice touch.
Please update soon. If you do, I will certainly continue to read. Keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
7/10/2010 c10 2Bane of Princes
Thank you for returning!
Brian Adams? Good choice of songs dude.
I love the chapter, even if it is short! Please try your best to update (I don't do well with my stories :3 guilty as charged)
- Bane
2Bane of PrincesThank you for returning!
Brian Adams? Good choice of songs dude.
I love the chapter, even if it is short! Please try your best to update (I don't do well with my stories :3 guilty as charged)
- Bane
5/4/2010 c9 67Sauron Gorthaur
Wow, I'd always thought it would be cool if someone wrote Fenoglio's Inkheart. I think you're doing a great job with it. I like how you brought in the quotes from Inkspell about the Prince. It would have been neat, however, if you had put in the quote from Inkdeath about Dustfinger and Roxane's meeting.
I really like how the Prince and Dustfinger interact with each other, how they tease each other back and forth. They both seem to be very much in character. And the Dustfinger/Roxane relationship is also very well done (and very cute)!
I'm eager to see how you make the story unfold. Please update soon and keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
67Sauron GorthaurWow, I'd always thought it would be cool if someone wrote Fenoglio's Inkheart. I think you're doing a great job with it. I like how you brought in the quotes from Inkspell about the Prince. It would have been neat, however, if you had put in the quote from Inkdeath about Dustfinger and Roxane's meeting.
I really like how the Prince and Dustfinger interact with each other, how they tease each other back and forth. They both seem to be very much in character. And the Dustfinger/Roxane relationship is also very well done (and very cute)!
I'm eager to see how you make the story unfold. Please update soon and keep on writing!
-Sauron Gorthaur
3/30/2010 c9 2Bane of Princes
aw roxane and dustfinger :3 i love that couple! please keep updating! this story is awesome!
peaceloveandthedove
2Bane of Princesaw roxane and dustfinger :3 i love that couple! please keep updating! this story is awesome!
peaceloveandthedove