
5/17/2010 c2
1RuneDeer
Glad Hatsumomo is "toast." Burnt toast would be better. I'm about 3/4 through the book. Her downfall was most enjoyable.

Glad Hatsumomo is "toast." Burnt toast would be better. I'm about 3/4 through the book. Her downfall was most enjoyable.
8/6/2009 c2
180Thorn In Your Side
E, I like it~
But I need to point out something about your writing style; while it is similar to the author's own prose, it lacks the similies and things that make it an interesting read. This reads almost like a report; I think it'd be nice to see a little more emotion from a first person Chiyo.

E, I like it~
But I need to point out something about your writing style; while it is similar to the author's own prose, it lacks the similies and things that make it an interesting read. This reads almost like a report; I think it'd be nice to see a little more emotion from a first person Chiyo.
7/20/2009 c1 ali
that was horrible of Chiyo. I've always felt sorry for Hatsumomo, despite all her faults.
that was horrible of Chiyo. I've always felt sorry for Hatsumomo, despite all her faults.
3/26/2009 c1 Thorn In Your Side
If only little Chiyo was that smart...
It was good, but it was bland. You could've extended it to make it funny...
If only little Chiyo was that smart...
It was good, but it was bland. You could've extended it to make it funny...