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5/31/2021 c2 Guest
Oh, why did you finish this so quickly?! It's brilliant! It's the only Tina / Pierre fanfiction that I found and I beg you to continue it!
Someone from the crowd
5/2/2009 c2 162FreekyDisaster18
Awwh, yay. That's the happy ending we wanted for Pierre :) Beautifully written!
4/12/2009 c2 167scribblemyname
Like the new chapter! Normally I'm not much for potential mush, but this was really sweet anyway. I didn't have to half-close my eyes with a cringe and skip any spots (which I've been known to do). It was perfect. Keep it up!

Minor edits:

1st paragraph: You have really done a well job.

Should be "You have really done a good job."

2nd paragraph: “Well, you did pay me well for doing a well job!”

same word

Giving the necklace: “I was hers”

should be either "I was hers." or "It was hers."

Punctuation around quotes involves a comma separating the he/she said from the quotation. If the tag follows the quote, then it should be lower case. Examples:

“Do you miss her?” she asked in a low, sympathetic voice.

“Well, you did pay me well for doing a well job!” She laughed to ease the tension.

For the most part you did it right, but it got a little spotty in places, especially ending untagged quotes with periods.
4/7/2009 c1 scribblemyname
I like this piece a lot. It's sweet and interesting. But I thought she DID know dancing. I thought she was an instructor. I don't know. I could be way off on that. I liked this a lot. Very nice little journey into her head.

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