for Where is our kids?5/25/2009 c5 ferocmope
a little choppy, the writing.
it seems like you wanted to it flush out fast and you didn't take too much time on it. slow it down a little. a little more detail, between your dialogue, and you're good to go.
cool idea.
a little choppy, the writing.
it seems like you wanted to it flush out fast and you didn't take too much time on it. slow it down a little. a little more detail, between your dialogue, and you're good to go.
cool idea.
5/5/2009 c5 jayde
no offense but this is bad
no offense but this is bad
4/10/2009 c3 
5missypaige06
good start keep it coming :) i love all the paige and henry stuff - i think being the youngest its realistic that she wont cope very well
5missypaige06good start keep it coming :) i love all the paige and henry stuff - i think being the youngest its realistic that she wont cope very well
4/5/2009 c1 Jillian3
i really like it you should write more!
xxoo
Jill
i really like it you should write more!
xxoo
Jill