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11/30/2013 c1 3Bs173
Poor gokudera! But he deserves Yamamoto more than Tsuna! So sweeet I really loved it *hearts*
9/13/2009 c1 16anon azure
4/25/2009 c1 38Makayla
This is a really sweet story ^_^ there were a couple of issues with verb tenses but the biggest problem was the lack of spaces after you're commas. I think if you cleaned that up this story would be a lot more reader-friendly ^_^
4/18/2009 c1 104IDespiseTragedy
I don't quite get the humour, but the romance is good. Nice plot too, though if I may suggest: please re-check your spelling, punctuation and spacing.
4/13/2009 c1 hoshi-hime
This potentially could have been quite good, but there was a lot of grammatical errors that really took away from the reading. In future, I suggest you re-read it through a lot more to check for mistakes, or getting someone else to beta it for you.

Another thing that bugged me was the random A/Ns in the middle of the story. You shouldn't ever put A/N's in the body of your text, it REALLY detracts from the story. One more thing I'll say before shutting up, is the use of italics. It would have been fine if you'd just titled the section as '24 hours earlier...' or whatever it was. If you hadn't have used italics for the whole thing, you could have used italics for the thoughts, which would have distinguished it from the speech.

The plot was good; cute idea that could have been pretty believable. Like I said, just a lot of errors distracted me from that. Hope this review helped you and didn't sound too mean, I'm really only trying to help!

4/11/2009 c1 4heartshaped-sunglasses
aw thats was too cute ^_^

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