for Wendi Dursley, First Year Witch5/8/2009 c3 
5MrsCarlisleCullen94
omg this is such a sweet story line! i mean i would never of thought of it!i love the story! please continue soon!
5MrsCarlisleCullen94omg this is such a sweet story line! i mean i would never of thought of it!i love the story! please continue soon!
5/3/2009 c3 FriendofMolly
Oh my, oh my. Wendi is in for a wonderous site. I've a feeling she'll take to it just fine. Very good. I'll hope for an update soon.
Oh my, oh my. Wendi is in for a wonderous site. I've a feeling she'll take to it just fine. Very good. I'll hope for an update soon.
5/3/2009 c2 FriendofMolly
You did a perfect job at portraying the characters. Dudley has turned into a somewhat gentler Vernon.You'd think he'd learn. At least he went to Harry for help, but how could he give away his own child? How can his wife not like her own child? I must read more.
You did a perfect job at portraying the characters. Dudley has turned into a somewhat gentler Vernon.You'd think he'd learn. At least he went to Harry for help, but how could he give away his own child? How can his wife not like her own child? I must read more.
5/3/2009 c1 FriendofMolly
I like the premise of your story. I was hoping, that after their farewell in DH, that after the war, Duds and Harry would have had some kind of relationship. With your take, I guess not. But I LOVE the idea of his child being Magical. Also what took so long for Harry to be an Auror? McGonagall as Head Auror, now that's AU! I'll continue to read.
I like the premise of your story. I was hoping, that after their farewell in DH, that after the war, Duds and Harry would have had some kind of relationship. With your take, I guess not. But I LOVE the idea of his child being Magical. Also what took so long for Harry to be an Auror? McGonagall as Head Auror, now that's AU! I'll continue to read.
5/3/2009 c3 10DarknessShinesOn
I just feel horrible for Wendi, I wonder if she knows her parents didn't want her and just left her. I'm glad that Harry and Ginny have decided to let her live with them, she should be around magical families.
Desiree'
10DarknessShinesOnI just feel horrible for Wendi, I wonder if she knows her parents didn't want her and just left her. I'm glad that Harry and Ginny have decided to let her live with them, she should be around magical families.
Desiree'
4/21/2009 c2 4crystaltokyo9849
Aww...poor Wendi! But I'm glad she's coming to live with nice relatives who'll care for her unlike what the Dursleys did to Harry.
Nice story, I'm really enjoying it! And your writing style is really good too.
4crystaltokyo9849Aww...poor Wendi! But I'm glad she's coming to live with nice relatives who'll care for her unlike what the Dursleys did to Harry.
Nice story, I'm really enjoying it! And your writing style is really good too.
4/21/2009 c1 crystaltokyo9849
Hi! I LOVE your story so far! It's amazing and I love how you wrote about the Potters' house and everything! Dudley sounds exactly how I picture him. Good job!
Hi! I LOVE your story so far! It's amazing and I love how you wrote about the Potters' house and everything! Dudley sounds exactly how I picture him. Good job!
4/19/2009 c2 32silverbirch
Technically it was a well written story - grammar, spelling, all that kind of thing. The balance between narrative and dialogue was about right, I think, and you took the time to give us some emotions. It wasn't just she said he said, but I could sense how they were saying things.
A couple of observations, if I may?
The timeline seemed odd. If Albus is about to start at school it's nineteen years after the battle, but the way Harry and Ginny were talking it sounds much sooner than that. He sounds as if he's just finishing auror training, which he's been doing for three years. Just a bit confusing.
I didn't like Dudley, or his wife. He seems to have learned nothing, yet in the seventh book he was mellowing. Why would the mother not like her? They both sounded very cold and callous.
To answer your question in Chapter 1, a hit is the number of times a chapter is visited, a visitor is one person. If I read a chapter three times (I think in a day) that gives you one visitor and three hits.
32silverbirchTechnically it was a well written story - grammar, spelling, all that kind of thing. The balance between narrative and dialogue was about right, I think, and you took the time to give us some emotions. It wasn't just she said he said, but I could sense how they were saying things.
A couple of observations, if I may?
The timeline seemed odd. If Albus is about to start at school it's nineteen years after the battle, but the way Harry and Ginny were talking it sounds much sooner than that. He sounds as if he's just finishing auror training, which he's been doing for three years. Just a bit confusing.
I didn't like Dudley, or his wife. He seems to have learned nothing, yet in the seventh book he was mellowing. Why would the mother not like her? They both sounded very cold and callous.
To answer your question in Chapter 1, a hit is the number of times a chapter is visited, a visitor is one person. If I read a chapter three times (I think in a day) that gives you one visitor and three hits.
4/17/2009 c2 2JannaKalderash
You've got a good handle on Dudley's character, although I had hoped he'd be a LITTLE more mature about magic. But then again, this is a Dursley I'm talking about. Kevin, well, in a word...ICK! It's like Dudley was cloned or something! (Yes, that's a compliment.)
The other characters are pretty much spot on, and I like little Lily, she sounds like a cutie.
If Dudley's wife is this freaked out about magic, I can just imagine how Grandma and Grandpa will feel when they find out about it.
Harry should adopt her so that she doesn't have to go through the same crud he did.
Nice job, dude!
2JannaKalderashYou've got a good handle on Dudley's character, although I had hoped he'd be a LITTLE more mature about magic. But then again, this is a Dursley I'm talking about. Kevin, well, in a word...ICK! It's like Dudley was cloned or something! (Yes, that's a compliment.)
The other characters are pretty much spot on, and I like little Lily, she sounds like a cutie.
If Dudley's wife is this freaked out about magic, I can just imagine how Grandma and Grandpa will feel when they find out about it.
Harry should adopt her so that she doesn't have to go through the same crud he did.
Nice job, dude!
4/17/2009 c2 10DarknessShinesOn
I'm just so surprised that Dudley would want his only daughter to not live with him anymore, and I'm even more shocked that a mother wouldn't really care about her daughter, there is no way I could ever not like my daughter.
Desiree'
10DarknessShinesOnI'm just so surprised that Dudley would want his only daughter to not live with him anymore, and I'm even more shocked that a mother wouldn't really care about her daughter, there is no way I could ever not like my daughter.
Desiree'
4/17/2009 c1 DarknessShinesOn
okay you need to delete your chapters, they won't go away from your story, they just need space. Hits and visitors I think are the same thing, you really want reviews though. I like the idea for the story, I'm reading a similer one, and I want to see where you go with this story.
Desiree'
okay you need to delete your chapters, they won't go away from your story, they just need space. Hits and visitors I think are the same thing, you really want reviews though. I like the idea for the story, I'm reading a similer one, and I want to see where you go with this story.
Desiree'