for Family Vacation8/24/2009 c8 
29Ms.GrahamCracker
Poor Charlie, desperate enough to go out into the rain and carry firewood, just to have a moment of peace.
I liked Nikki offering to help Amita. It was very in character for her.
Loved the update. You're doing a great job.
How does it feel to be an author and know everyone is waiting for the next update to see what you have planned?
29Ms.GrahamCrackerPoor Charlie, desperate enough to go out into the rain and carry firewood, just to have a moment of peace.
I liked Nikki offering to help Amita. It was very in character for her.
Loved the update. You're doing a great job.
How does it feel to be an author and know everyone is waiting for the next update to see what you have planned?
8/23/2009 c8 2luvnumb3rs
I just have to say thank you again to my beta she is great and I really believe this chapter not possible without her. She is very good at what she does and kind to take the time to help other writers. THANK YOU!
2luvnumb3rsI just have to say thank you again to my beta she is great and I really believe this chapter not possible without her. She is very good at what she does and kind to take the time to help other writers. THANK YOU!
7/30/2009 c7 7Starfishyeti
OK there are a few grammar/typo issues and some of the conversations are a but stilted but at the end of the day I can read the story. This isn't bad at all considering I'm a VERY picky reader and can't read a story if there are too many mistakes!
I'm looking forward to the rest and urge you to continue.
Good luck!
7StarfishyetiOK there are a few grammar/typo issues and some of the conversations are a but stilted but at the end of the day I can read the story. This isn't bad at all considering I'm a VERY picky reader and can't read a story if there are too many mistakes!
I'm looking forward to the rest and urge you to continue.
Good luck!
7/28/2009 c7 29Ms.GrahamCracker
You are doing a great job with descriptions, narrative and conversations. Don's and Charlie's talk in the bedroom was really in character and I loved when Charlie basically told Don to mind his own business.
I was glad to see another update and hope to see another one soon.
29Ms.GrahamCrackerYou are doing a great job with descriptions, narrative and conversations. Don's and Charlie's talk in the bedroom was really in character and I loved when Charlie basically told Don to mind his own business.
I was glad to see another update and hope to see another one soon.
7/28/2009 c7 131FraidyCat
I'm glad you're continuing this story.
For the record, I was a little confused when Charlie "jumped up and started pacing"; last I knew, he had a bad ankle and knee. (I thought I'd missed a chapter, somehow.) Later, those injuries magically reappear; small details, but these kinds of differences can be jarring to consistency.
Awaiting your next update anxiously!
131FraidyCatI'm glad you're continuing this story.
For the record, I was a little confused when Charlie "jumped up and started pacing"; last I knew, he had a bad ankle and knee. (I thought I'd missed a chapter, somehow.) Later, those injuries magically reappear; small details, but these kinds of differences can be jarring to consistency.
Awaiting your next update anxiously!
7/27/2009 c6 6Anaszun
ooh suspensive dramatic cliffie, gotta love 'em and you most certainly hate them lol. i am enjoying your story, please update soon. =)
6Anaszunooh suspensive dramatic cliffie, gotta love 'em and you most certainly hate them lol. i am enjoying your story, please update soon. =)
7/25/2009 c6 91st endeavor
This was really a good chapter. The story is definitely moving along now and I'm really curious about what Don saw when he entered Charlie's room. Great job.
1st E.
91st endeavorThis was really a good chapter. The story is definitely moving along now and I'm really curious about what Don saw when he entered Charlie's room. Great job.
1st E.
7/25/2009 c6 22Serialgal
I love watching your writing progress. You are getting more descriptive, painting more detail into your scenes as you go along. Keep it up!
22SerialgalI love watching your writing progress. You are getting more descriptive, painting more detail into your scenes as you go along. Keep it up!
7/25/2009 c6 29Ms.GrahamCracker
Oh, a cliffie. What's he doing? Is he okay?
I really liked the easy-going feel of this chapter, with everyone playing games and even the short hike with a little Charlie whumping thrown in. And I really liked Don's gentle helpfullness with Charlie. As Alan said, he really is a good brother.
Can't wait to see what's up next with Charlie and the gang. Thanks for the update.
29Ms.GrahamCrackerOh, a cliffie. What's he doing? Is he okay?
I really liked the easy-going feel of this chapter, with everyone playing games and even the short hike with a little Charlie whumping thrown in. And I really liked Don's gentle helpfullness with Charlie. As Alan said, he really is a good brother.
Can't wait to see what's up next with Charlie and the gang. Thanks for the update.