for The Mark5/11/2009 c2 wlk68
Good chapter but I did notice a few spelling errors and you bounced back and forth between past and present tenses - sometimes within the same sentence - and that can be very confusing for the reader. I would gently suggest that you find yourself a good beta. A good beta can really help you turn a good story into a great one.
Good chapter but I did notice a few spelling errors and you bounced back and forth between past and present tenses - sometimes within the same sentence - and that can be very confusing for the reader. I would gently suggest that you find yourself a good beta. A good beta can really help you turn a good story into a great one.
5/11/2009 c2 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Good. :D i will always review XD but yes. Good. Can't wait till next chapter.
Good. :D i will always review XD but yes. Good. Can't wait till next chapter.
5/7/2009 c1 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Heyaz... Itz me XD anyway.. good first chapter...
I got to ask you something... I just made my first chapter and well... How do i actually put the name of the story, the name of the chapter, the summary, the disclaimer and the autors notes where they are supposed to be. Becuase i did that in a different kind of way and i would like to know how to do it the right way. If u don't know what i mean.. Ill tell you later.
Heyaz... Itz me XD anyway.. good first chapter...
I got to ask you something... I just made my first chapter and well... How do i actually put the name of the story, the name of the chapter, the summary, the disclaimer and the autors notes where they are supposed to be. Becuase i did that in a different kind of way and i would like to know how to do it the right way. If u don't know what i mean.. Ill tell you later.
5/7/2009 c1 
203BubblyShell22
Wow. This is awesome. I can't wait to see what else you have in store for Leo and the guys. You are a very good writer.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
203BubblyShell22Wow. This is awesome. I can't wait to see what else you have in store for Leo and the guys. You are a very good writer.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
5/7/2009 c1 wlk68
Well, you've certainly gotten my attention with this first chapter. I am definitely interested in seeing where this goes. More soon please.
Well, you've certainly gotten my attention with this first chapter. I am definitely interested in seeing where this goes. More soon please.