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4/7/2012 c1 Bobby
Do something when Percy throws the party and they play truth or dare spin the bottle and other party games
3/1/2010 c1 FangirlPrincess
GOOD Story !wares my s'more!
2/16/2010 c1 122Dolphingirl32173
Sarah: um... you ever gonna update this? and you forgot the disclaimer.
5/11/2009 c1 Percabethfan01
AWESOME! You should add another chapter!
5/9/2009 c1 SnowsongIsAJaypawFan
Uh- oh. dun Dun DUN!
5/9/2009 c1 2Athena's Hatchling
Horrible.

Percy and his parents were OOC... like disgustingly OOC.

And you spelled Thalia wrong. I mean What the Hell?

But at least its not cut off your hands worthy. it's delete this piece of Sh*t or get a beta-reader worthy.

Athena's Hatchling
5/9/2009 c1 16The Foreseer of Avalon
:) please continue and if you get flames, i'll be happy to throw them out.
5/9/2009 c1 1Zoe Nightshade
1. This is way too short. You should put more detail.

2. It's unrealistic. Thalia is a hunter, so she cannot come to a stupid party. Silena and Beckendorf are dead, so they can't come either. Also, Percy would not invite Annabeth or Rachel. Annabeth and Rachel are in boarding schools and can't come.

3. Why would Percy's mom want to hold a party for Annabeth? She is OOC.

4. Okay, if you are using point of view, just stop. Stop it now. Expect flame because this stinks.
5/9/2009 c1 3LittleMissUnfortunate
I guess it was ok. The plot is slightly overused and Percy is a teeny bit OOC but it's fine. The part with Sally and Paul kissing, was just kind of random. Maybe you should take it out and say she was busy or on the phone or something.

All in all, it wasn't that bad, although maybe you should look over it again.

-XxRock and Roll DollxX-
5/9/2009 c1 37Cap'NCupcake
i kind of like it. cant wait until next chapter
5/8/2009 c1 1864787
lolz keep writing!

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