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3/23 c38 
25One Lonely Marauder
Hey, Hi! Hello! I cannot believe this story continues to get updated and continues to be amazing. I absolute adore it, and now I need to go re-read from the very beginning. Please never stop writing, I need to see how this ends. Please! 3 Sending love from Minnesota!
25One Lonely MarauderHey, Hi! Hello! I cannot believe this story continues to get updated and continues to be amazing. I absolute adore it, and now I need to go re-read from the very beginning. Please never stop writing, I need to see how this ends. Please! 3 Sending love from Minnesota!
10/9/2024 c38 sevvyyy
Good plot. Though, there are some things that kinda boggles with me. It's way too long. The story, yes, should be focus on Severus and Harry. But then, the story is way toooooooooo long, focusing on explaining this and that. Honestly, to explain is longer than to speak of your characters. I just don't see the point too where you had to italic the whole conversation of Sirius, Remus and Potter. The confron, I mean. It can be written as normal and only emphasize what you wanted to emphasize because clearly as someone who's sensitive at this, it doesn't feel right. The chapters, short. The story, long. I am not complaining for that, but perhaps you should've just cut it and make the chapters up to 50-60 instead because I feel like it can reach it. Also, on the fifth chapter, I think. Harry finally saw his mother's memories on the pensive. And Lily say something like, the charm would wear off? Something like that for 15 years. I may have read it wrong, but I thought the charm was something she'd been locked on and would be released after 15 years. I had a confusion on that one, well, I was hoping after reading that there might be a second chance for Severus and Lily.
I read your story because I've been looking for a quality stories about Lily and Severus. I was hooked with your summary. Though, kinda disappointed it's not up to my expectation. But good job, I still finished it :)
Good plot. Though, there are some things that kinda boggles with me. It's way too long. The story, yes, should be focus on Severus and Harry. But then, the story is way toooooooooo long, focusing on explaining this and that. Honestly, to explain is longer than to speak of your characters. I just don't see the point too where you had to italic the whole conversation of Sirius, Remus and Potter. The confron, I mean. It can be written as normal and only emphasize what you wanted to emphasize because clearly as someone who's sensitive at this, it doesn't feel right. The chapters, short. The story, long. I am not complaining for that, but perhaps you should've just cut it and make the chapters up to 50-60 instead because I feel like it can reach it. Also, on the fifth chapter, I think. Harry finally saw his mother's memories on the pensive. And Lily say something like, the charm would wear off? Something like that for 15 years. I may have read it wrong, but I thought the charm was something she'd been locked on and would be released after 15 years. I had a confusion on that one, well, I was hoping after reading that there might be a second chance for Severus and Lily.
I read your story because I've been looking for a quality stories about Lily and Severus. I was hooked with your summary. Though, kinda disappointed it's not up to my expectation. But good job, I still finished it :)
7/10/2024 c18 3tambrathegreat
Great chapter with some character development for Snape. Sirius needs to work o things. hea such a hothead.
3tambrathegreatGreat chapter with some character development for Snape. Sirius needs to work o things. hea such a hothead.
7/6/2024 c16 tambrathegreat
That was harrowin that last bit. I know most people dont think it, but poor Lucius. he bore the brunt of Severus' feelings about the potion. Here's hopeing things will work ut for them all, well, all but Voldemort.
That was harrowin that last bit. I know most people dont think it, but poor Lucius. he bore the brunt of Severus' feelings about the potion. Here's hopeing things will work ut for them all, well, all but Voldemort.
7/5/2024 c14 tambrathegreat
i really do live your characterization of Snape. It's hard to strike that balance between cold and caring
i really do live your characterization of Snape. It's hard to strike that balance between cold and caring
7/1/2024 c38 19BlueWater5
Having every former Death Eater make a similar vow or at least a vow of neutrality would make sense.
19BlueWater5Having every former Death Eater make a similar vow or at least a vow of neutrality would make sense.