for Bare6/6/2009 c2 Jamie
I really enjoy this story so far. Tortured Edward is always fantastic. And angsty Bella is great as well.
Very well written. Kudos
I really enjoy this story so far. Tortured Edward is always fantastic. And angsty Bella is great as well.
Very well written. Kudos
6/6/2009 c2 hutchersons
this beginning is fantastic!
Your Alice and Bella are perfect. Can this be real Twilight, plz?
:)
cant wait for more.
this beginning is fantastic!
Your Alice and Bella are perfect. Can this be real Twilight, plz?
:)
cant wait for more.
6/6/2009 c2 sttm
I have to say this is one of the best Alice descriptions I've read. You make her sound the way she is meant to be: dainty, delicate, beautiful, stylish, daring and tough. I can see her so clearly. But as much as I love Alice's description, Angela is even better. For some reason, she seems much cooler here than in most other fics.
The cafeteria scene ~ oh dear. Big WTF. Can't wait for more. :)
I have to say this is one of the best Alice descriptions I've read. You make her sound the way she is meant to be: dainty, delicate, beautiful, stylish, daring and tough. I can see her so clearly. But as much as I love Alice's description, Angela is even better. For some reason, she seems much cooler here than in most other fics.
The cafeteria scene ~ oh dear. Big WTF. Can't wait for more. :)
6/6/2009 c1 sttm
Um, my "name" is the initials of my lj username. I tend to leave you reviews in PMs. If you still don't know who I am, I'll let you know in a future PM, lol. Anyway, I like this introduction a lot. Favorite line:
"But she was a Bella, a non-beautiful Bella, and that almost made her happy – she was a walking contradiction, and maybe someone, somewhere, would find that interesting."
The "I'm not chasing you" and "You couldn't catch me" bit is precious. And the way the intro ends? Aw. That's nice of him but ngl, if it was me, I'd be upset because of the breach of privacy. She DID leave her stuff out there, though...
P.S. I adore you even more for loving RHCP!
Um, my "name" is the initials of my lj username. I tend to leave you reviews in PMs. If you still don't know who I am, I'll let you know in a future PM, lol. Anyway, I like this introduction a lot. Favorite line:
"But she was a Bella, a non-beautiful Bella, and that almost made her happy – she was a walking contradiction, and maybe someone, somewhere, would find that interesting."
The "I'm not chasing you" and "You couldn't catch me" bit is precious. And the way the intro ends? Aw. That's nice of him but ngl, if it was me, I'd be upset because of the breach of privacy. She DID leave her stuff out there, though...
P.S. I adore you even more for loving RHCP!
6/6/2009 c1 rchpbabe
lindsey, this is susuietaj143 from a soul enchanted and i really love your writing.you have such grace when you write, and it's great to see you writing about bella and edward, and writing here no less!i always love to see whatever your work might be, so good luck with bare!
lindsey, this is susuietaj143 from a soul enchanted and i really love your writing.you have such grace when you write, and it's great to see you writing about bella and edward, and writing here no less!i always love to see whatever your work might be, so good luck with bare!
6/6/2009 c2 
2caitlexishop
I really like your story! I can't wait to see what happens. Angela and Alice are awesome, as always. But what was up with Edward? I can't believe you don't have more reviews, but I am a faithful reviewer and hope to help any way I can! Thank you so much for writing and I'll be waiting for the next chapter! :D
2caitlexishopI really like your story! I can't wait to see what happens. Angela and Alice are awesome, as always. But what was up with Edward? I can't believe you don't have more reviews, but I am a faithful reviewer and hope to help any way I can! Thank you so much for writing and I'll be waiting for the next chapter! :D
6/6/2009 c2 4vanilladoubleshot
I love this! I already adore your Alice - which is rare - and your characterization of Billy is just so spot-on, I finally understand why Charlie spends all of his time with the man. :) I also love the idea of an Alice/Angela friendship! They are win.
4vanilladoubleshotI love this! I already adore your Alice - which is rare - and your characterization of Billy is just so spot-on, I finally understand why Charlie spends all of his time with the man. :) I also love the idea of an Alice/Angela friendship! They are win.
6/5/2009 c1 1le moulin
This is really beautiful so far! I love the way you write the play on her name and how she doesn't see herself as a /belle/ at all.
I really want to know what's got Edward's knickers in a twist, too! I look forward to more of this. :)
1le moulinThis is really beautiful so far! I love the way you write the play on her name and how she doesn't see herself as a /belle/ at all.
I really want to know what's got Edward's knickers in a twist, too! I look forward to more of this. :)
6/5/2009 c1 4vanilladoubleshot
I am so excited about this story! I always love the idea of their relationship building through writing - sexual tension through textual tension, heck YES. And I like the way that you're employing Twilight canon; it doesn't seem cliche and ~twilight the way that you write. Eagerly awaiting more!
4vanilladoubleshotI am so excited about this story! I always love the idea of their relationship building through writing - sexual tension through textual tension, heck YES. And I like the way that you're employing Twilight canon; it doesn't seem cliche and ~twilight the way that you write. Eagerly awaiting more!