for Bare10/20/2018 c23 BadBoySuprem Super-McSizzle
this story deserves to be officially published as a book. im not even kidding. the words , the story , their relationship etc everything is just so beautiful that it causes ache in my chest.
this story deserves to be officially published as a book. im not even kidding. the words , the story , their relationship etc everything is just so beautiful that it causes ache in my chest.
9/14/2018 c23 shannon30033
Thank you for this lovely story. I'm not sure when you wrote it, but I love it. It must be weird getting folks writing you who are all fired up about something in a chapter that was created such a long time ago. Well, whatever the case, I just wanted you to know how magnificent this story is and how much I have enjoyed your writing. Thank you! Don't worry about that guest reviewer who has bug up his/ her bum about some stupid inconsequential spelling error. Pul lease. Ugh. Nit picky folks like that need to find some time and love in their life to volunteer to beta a person who is working on getting ideas out, not perfection in grammar. It's harder that it looks and sometimes stuff still gets by ya! Take care!Shannon
Thank you for this lovely story. I'm not sure when you wrote it, but I love it. It must be weird getting folks writing you who are all fired up about something in a chapter that was created such a long time ago. Well, whatever the case, I just wanted you to know how magnificent this story is and how much I have enjoyed your writing. Thank you! Don't worry about that guest reviewer who has bug up his/ her bum about some stupid inconsequential spelling error. Pul lease. Ugh. Nit picky folks like that need to find some time and love in their life to volunteer to beta a person who is working on getting ideas out, not perfection in grammar. It's harder that it looks and sometimes stuff still gets by ya! Take care!Shannon
6/4/2018 c24 guest
It's door JAMB, and Jane PEEKED.
It's door JAMB, and Jane PEEKED.
6/4/2018 c18 guest
Esme tried to REIN in her excitement (think using reins to control a horse).
Esme tried to REIN in her excitement (think using reins to control a horse).
5/23/2018 c25 Fullofpassion09
Ive been binge reading all your work this last week and I’ve loved all of them in their own ways but this one...this one broke me into a million pieces and put me back together in a completely different imperfect order leaving me looking like a crystal being struck by light. Absolutely breathtaking.
Ive been binge reading all your work this last week and I’ve loved all of them in their own ways but this one...this one broke me into a million pieces and put me back together in a completely different imperfect order leaving me looking like a crystal being struck by light. Absolutely breathtaking.
11/23/2017 c28 
44CayStar
This was a beautiful story. You clearly share your Bella’s gift for words :)
44CayStarThis was a beautiful story. You clearly share your Bella’s gift for words :)
8/7/2017 c28 ninny 1
I'm so sorry you have abandoned twilight fan fic as you are so good at it
This one was really great thank you
I'm so sorry you have abandoned twilight fan fic as you are so good at it
This one was really great thank you
5/6/2017 c28 13musicnlyrics
I love it! Paintward and Writerella make a pretty intense outing. I enjoyed the reversal of the New Moon plot line - great stuff! Thanks for sharing!
13musicnlyricsI love it! Paintward and Writerella make a pretty intense outing. I enjoyed the reversal of the New Moon plot line - great stuff! Thanks for sharing!
2/18/2017 c28 MysterySan
Well I don't have Bella's mastery in words or Edward's talent with colours but still this story made me red, pink, grey and all those colours associated with passion, love and bleakness. I loved your Edward. I agree most of the readers must have been fascinated with Bella but I wasn't. I couldn't connect with her on the level I connected with Edward. That doesn't mean that I didn't like her or that I hated her it's just that I loved Edward more. At times I felt that Edward was too forgiving and generous with her. I mean the way she made fun of his size and he wasn't even upset or offended. Such a thing requires a big heart. I mean, how she would have felt if he had made fun of her body, let's say her breast size? But he didn't. Yeah I agree that when he sketched her the first time he told her that she wasn't beautiful but he apologized to her many times for it later on. His protruding hip bones were brought up so many times in this story. I don't understand one thing, why is it that when a girl is inperfect we expect boys to accept her as she is and make her feel beautiful but when a boy is imperfect we keep pointing it out. That's not fair. I mean yes we got it when you mentioned for the first time that Edward has feminine hips but there was no need to bring it up every time he was shirtless or naked. Yeah, I have got it all out. Now on the brighter side you are an amazing writer who actually breathes life in the characters. I was hooked up from the start. I loved every single character in this story except James. Because apart from him you didn't create any villainous characters. Though it was hard at times to follow your story. I mean at one instance I was reading about Bella and Edward and suddenly Alice popped up and then I realized that at least day has passed between the previous and the current part. It was disconcerting, that's it. You'll think I came here to only gripe but that's not the case, I really loved this story. I write big reviews only when I love a story passionately.
Yellow if you feel bad about anything I have written above. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
Well I don't have Bella's mastery in words or Edward's talent with colours but still this story made me red, pink, grey and all those colours associated with passion, love and bleakness. I loved your Edward. I agree most of the readers must have been fascinated with Bella but I wasn't. I couldn't connect with her on the level I connected with Edward. That doesn't mean that I didn't like her or that I hated her it's just that I loved Edward more. At times I felt that Edward was too forgiving and generous with her. I mean the way she made fun of his size and he wasn't even upset or offended. Such a thing requires a big heart. I mean, how she would have felt if he had made fun of her body, let's say her breast size? But he didn't. Yeah I agree that when he sketched her the first time he told her that she wasn't beautiful but he apologized to her many times for it later on. His protruding hip bones were brought up so many times in this story. I don't understand one thing, why is it that when a girl is inperfect we expect boys to accept her as she is and make her feel beautiful but when a boy is imperfect we keep pointing it out. That's not fair. I mean yes we got it when you mentioned for the first time that Edward has feminine hips but there was no need to bring it up every time he was shirtless or naked. Yeah, I have got it all out. Now on the brighter side you are an amazing writer who actually breathes life in the characters. I was hooked up from the start. I loved every single character in this story except James. Because apart from him you didn't create any villainous characters. Though it was hard at times to follow your story. I mean at one instance I was reading about Bella and Edward and suddenly Alice popped up and then I realized that at least day has passed between the previous and the current part. It was disconcerting, that's it. You'll think I came here to only gripe but that's not the case, I really loved this story. I write big reviews only when I love a story passionately.
Yellow if you feel bad about anything I have written above. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
10/24/2016 c22 Guest
Edward makes a friend in a month that their not together...REALLY! He didn't have one friend all through high school but now a "beautful BFF" and she seems to know everything about him, ugh hated this chapter so much.
Edward makes a friend in a month that their not together...REALLY! He didn't have one friend all through high school but now a "beautful BFF" and she seems to know everything about him, ugh hated this chapter so much.
10/23/2016 c20 Guest
Why does Bella have to save him... his family knows his troubles why didn't they help him? I would've left too
Why does Bella have to save him... his family knows his troubles why didn't they help him? I would've left too
10/23/2016 c17 Guest
I don't understand, Edward said he's never felt anything like this, yet he spoke of love for Tanya? So confused
I don't understand, Edward said he's never felt anything like this, yet he spoke of love for Tanya? So confused