for Dreams do come true3/8/2010 c22 
10MISTALI
Oh. My. God. She killed herself. I'm glad Zelix got out of Xemnas' control. Great chapter! Looking forward to the next chapter!
10MISTALIOh. My. God. She killed herself. I'm glad Zelix got out of Xemnas' control. Great chapter! Looking forward to the next chapter!
2/14/2010 c21 1VaynexArabella4ever
Awesomeness! :D Please update whenever you can! ;)
I think they use black as 'nothingness' since black isn't actually a color...It's the absence of color 0-o Weird right?
1VaynexArabella4everAwesomeness! :D Please update whenever you can! ;)
I think they use black as 'nothingness' since black isn't actually a color...It's the absence of color 0-o Weird right?
2/14/2010 c21 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
I'm so happy that you updated! :D
And this is seriously an awesome chapter. It makes me wonder where Xemnas put her. Like where is she? O-o I wonder if he's going to leave her there or like come to fight her or something.
Please update soon! :D Because it's awesome when you update... and so I can see her beat Xemnas XD
Oh and at the bottom you said you were going to write a sequel. If you have lots of ideas for it, then you should probably make a sequel, but if it isn't too much, you could always add it onto this one
I dunno, it really depends. Just do what you wanna do, I guess XwX
Anyway, great chapter :D
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
I'm so happy that you updated! :D
And this is seriously an awesome chapter. It makes me wonder where Xemnas put her. Like where is she? O-o I wonder if he's going to leave her there or like come to fight her or something.
Please update soon! :D Because it's awesome when you update... and so I can see her beat Xemnas XD
Oh and at the bottom you said you were going to write a sequel. If you have lots of ideas for it, then you should probably make a sequel, but if it isn't too much, you could always add it onto this one
I dunno, it really depends. Just do what you wanna do, I guess XwX
Anyway, great chapter :D
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
2/14/2010 c1 2Riayna Darkheart
I think you should finish your main storyline for this one, which I am left DYING, yes DYING, to know what befalls Ria, that cliffie was just mean.
Joking. No flame intended. It's just so well done and I really like this. I'm glad your thinking of a sequal. Is it still going to be with Ria? I hope so. Well, I just got off topic. As I said before, end it the way you want, but leave evidence that your going to continue one day as a sequal. Like at the end of Kingdom Hearts 2 where everything seemed to end and then that letter from King Mickey came overseas in a bottle. That is definitly hinting at somethin. Oh, might I add your somewhat right about the boys. Where I am the boys always want to do the work for the girls. Yet I am very, how would I phrase this, headstrong and self reliant. I always help teachers and I show I don't need help myself. Heh. I laugh at how true it is. I just have to say, excellent story, great storyline, and awsome charicterization. Ria is a very well rounded character and I am always excited when I get an alert saying you have a new chapter out. I like how you made your OC, Ria, a very straight and to the point girl, and honestly, Xemnas is going to trouble. What's happening? How will Ria escape? How did...what? Can;t phrase question properly. Just how is Ria going to get herself out of this one? Oh. THE SUSPENSE! Thanks for updating, though I'm kinda sad this is going to end soon.
2Riayna DarkheartI think you should finish your main storyline for this one, which I am left DYING, yes DYING, to know what befalls Ria, that cliffie was just mean.
Joking. No flame intended. It's just so well done and I really like this. I'm glad your thinking of a sequal. Is it still going to be with Ria? I hope so. Well, I just got off topic. As I said before, end it the way you want, but leave evidence that your going to continue one day as a sequal. Like at the end of Kingdom Hearts 2 where everything seemed to end and then that letter from King Mickey came overseas in a bottle. That is definitly hinting at somethin. Oh, might I add your somewhat right about the boys. Where I am the boys always want to do the work for the girls. Yet I am very, how would I phrase this, headstrong and self reliant. I always help teachers and I show I don't need help myself. Heh. I laugh at how true it is. I just have to say, excellent story, great storyline, and awsome charicterization. Ria is a very well rounded character and I am always excited when I get an alert saying you have a new chapter out. I like how you made your OC, Ria, a very straight and to the point girl, and honestly, Xemnas is going to trouble. What's happening? How will Ria escape? How did...what? Can;t phrase question properly. Just how is Ria going to get herself out of this one? Oh. THE SUSPENSE! Thanks for updating, though I'm kinda sad this is going to end soon.
2/14/2010 c21 10MISTALI
Love this chapter. It doesn't matter if someone has a big mouth. It can show confidence. As for the sequel, I you wanted to add stuff into this story you could edit the chapters.
10MISTALILove this chapter. It doesn't matter if someone has a big mouth. It can show confidence. As for the sequel, I you wanted to add stuff into this story you could edit the chapters.
1/20/2010 c20 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Awesome chapter! :D
Omg, I couldn't help thinking Roxas was jealous or something XD
Please Update soon! ^^
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
Awesome chapter! :D
Omg, I couldn't help thinking Roxas was jealous or something XD
Please Update soon! ^^
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
1/7/2010 c20 2Riayna Darkheart
Oh my. I love this story. Zelix was an iteresting development. Wasn't expecting that. I know school might be eating at time but I appreciate the update. Thank you for keeping Zexion alive. He's my second favorite character and I can't stand to see him die. Or read. And Demyx as well. He doesn't deserve to die. Some moments before and after Ria fought were so touching. The way you described them, ex: Marluxia looking like an ordinary gardener and how you couldn't just attack him, was beautiful. i love the Organization, minus a few. Your story really reached out to me and at instances I almost cried. I don't want them to die. Well, not die, but go to Ansem the Wise's place. i guess it's better than dieing. A wonder how Zexion and Marluxia said that Axel was going to betray Ria. Hmm. Your probably just referencing from the game. After this whole fight the no-so-bad guys[at least in my opinion]is done could you do me a super special favor. Make a trip back to Hollow Bastion and revisit all the members you defeated. I really do want to hear from them again. Especialy Marluxia and Saix if he is there. Hope he doesn't try to kill you. I hope this amazing fic doesn't end. I wish the adventures would continue somehow. Maybe, but its your story. You do what you want. Thanks for posting and allowing eager readers such as myself the chance to read such a magnificent story. Oh, and I looked at your page. I'm a little late but Happy Birthday and happy holidays. It's 2010!
2Riayna DarkheartOh my. I love this story. Zelix was an iteresting development. Wasn't expecting that. I know school might be eating at time but I appreciate the update. Thank you for keeping Zexion alive. He's my second favorite character and I can't stand to see him die. Or read. And Demyx as well. He doesn't deserve to die. Some moments before and after Ria fought were so touching. The way you described them, ex: Marluxia looking like an ordinary gardener and how you couldn't just attack him, was beautiful. i love the Organization, minus a few. Your story really reached out to me and at instances I almost cried. I don't want them to die. Well, not die, but go to Ansem the Wise's place. i guess it's better than dieing. A wonder how Zexion and Marluxia said that Axel was going to betray Ria. Hmm. Your probably just referencing from the game. After this whole fight the no-so-bad guys[at least in my opinion]is done could you do me a super special favor. Make a trip back to Hollow Bastion and revisit all the members you defeated. I really do want to hear from them again. Especialy Marluxia and Saix if he is there. Hope he doesn't try to kill you. I hope this amazing fic doesn't end. I wish the adventures would continue somehow. Maybe, but its your story. You do what you want. Thanks for posting and allowing eager readers such as myself the chance to read such a magnificent story. Oh, and I looked at your page. I'm a little late but Happy Birthday and happy holidays. It's 2010!
1/7/2010 c3 7kenthel
This story's pretty plain so far like I've read it a million times before. I know that it's hard to create an original Kingdom Hearts plot, so I'll keep reading to see if it actually has a gimmick somewhere.
I don't sense your descriptions - they're very blunt.
Descriptions should set a mood for the scene.
There are spelling errors and improper grammar.
So far, no conflict. I hope the later chapters have some spice.
7kenthelThis story's pretty plain so far like I've read it a million times before. I know that it's hard to create an original Kingdom Hearts plot, so I'll keep reading to see if it actually has a gimmick somewhere.
I don't sense your descriptions - they're very blunt.
Descriptions should set a mood for the scene.
There are spelling errors and improper grammar.
So far, no conflict. I hope the later chapters have some spice.
1/7/2010 c20 10MISTALI
Zelix did add something new to the story. Something that would have a new twist in the story.
Am I mistaken, or does Axel seem a bit protective of Ria? In a like-like sort of way? I could be wrong..
10MISTALIZelix did add something new to the story. Something that would have a new twist in the story.
Am I mistaken, or does Axel seem a bit protective of Ria? In a like-like sort of way? I could be wrong..
11/9/2009 c19 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Hey Luckycookie! ^^
What a lovely chapter! :D I'm so happy you updated! :D
Some of it made me laugh, Ria's so awesome! :D
Update Soon Please! ^^
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
Hey Luckycookie! ^^
What a lovely chapter! :D I'm so happy you updated! :D
Some of it made me laugh, Ria's so awesome! :D
Update Soon Please! ^^
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
11/3/2009 c19 MISTALI
No mistakes. Was really looking forward to the chapter and wasn't disappionted. Well done! 42 reviews and all!
No mistakes. Was really looking forward to the chapter and wasn't disappionted. Well done! 42 reviews and all!
8/16/2009 c18 MISTALI
I'm glad that Roxas and Ria are friends again but it was good that they had a bit of drama too.
I'm glad that Roxas and Ria are friends again but it was good that they had a bit of drama too.
8/15/2009 c18 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Very lovely! :D
Zexion seemed more evil than I expected! Oh well! At least his in the story now! :D I'm so delighted!
And you're going to spare him right! :D Better be! ^^
I can't wait to see what happens next! Maybe Zexion could join them or go to the castle were all the other nobodies are! I'm sure they would be pleased to see them and besides, there not evil anymore! Cuz all the darkness is gone!
:D Please Update Soon! :D
From: Seeker-Of-the-Heart
Very lovely! :D
Zexion seemed more evil than I expected! Oh well! At least his in the story now! :D I'm so delighted!
And you're going to spare him right! :D Better be! ^^
I can't wait to see what happens next! Maybe Zexion could join them or go to the castle were all the other nobodies are! I'm sure they would be pleased to see them and besides, there not evil anymore! Cuz all the darkness is gone!
:D Please Update Soon! :D
From: Seeker-Of-the-Heart
8/2/2009 c17 NEVERUSINGTHISOLDTHINGAGAIN
Wow!
I luv it... come to think about it I luv all the chapters... and the story!
It's got such an awesome plot and so many amazing ideas!
I luv it!
Lovely chapter like always, so Please Update!
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
Wow!
I luv it... come to think about it I luv all the chapters... and the story!
It's got such an awesome plot and so many amazing ideas!
I luv it!
Lovely chapter like always, so Please Update!
From: Seeker-Of-The-Heart
8/1/2009 c17 MISTALI
Riddled in jealousy. Roxas, you are so dead when Ria gets her hand on you. BUSTED!
Riddled in jealousy. Roxas, you are so dead when Ria gets her hand on you. BUSTED!