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2Whale Too Bad
good chapter
i like how hashi isnt overpowered and sometimes actually has to run for his life and panic
2Whale Too Badgood chapter
i like how hashi isnt overpowered and sometimes actually has to run for his life and panic
12/29/2011 c1 2novelreader
it's been 3 years since u did absolutely nothing to this story. i think it's alright if u go a little bit out of canon and make stuff up like like theories that u think is plausable for the battles b/c i dont think kishmoto will do show what happened before the time of the villages and if he is it'll be a long time till that happens. SO PLEASE UPDATE!
2novelreaderit's been 3 years since u did absolutely nothing to this story. i think it's alright if u go a little bit out of canon and make stuff up like like theories that u think is plausable for the battles b/c i dont think kishmoto will do show what happened before the time of the villages and if he is it'll be a long time till that happens. SO PLEASE UPDATE!
9/19/2009 c1 8Sillusion
Brilliant opening chapter!
I hope you continue the story, especially considering it holds such promise. (I find it hard to believe that a fic as well written as this has less reviews than so many others which are awful.)
8SillusionBrilliant opening chapter!
I hope you continue the story, especially considering it holds such promise. (I find it hard to believe that a fic as well written as this has less reviews than so many others which are awful.)
6/13/2009 c1 3Chloeeh
First of all, THANKYOU for writing this! I'm a major Hashirama and Tobirama fan and unfortunately I'm a rare species so it was great to finally read a fic where they aren't just plot devices but main characters :)
You're brilliant at action scenes but may I suggest a little more human interaction that doesn't end in death? XD
I hope you write lots more :)
3ChloeehFirst of all, THANKYOU for writing this! I'm a major Hashirama and Tobirama fan and unfortunately I'm a rare species so it was great to finally read a fic where they aren't just plot devices but main characters :)
You're brilliant at action scenes but may I suggest a little more human interaction that doesn't end in death? XD
I hope you write lots more :)
6/12/2009 c1 2Lainana
Amazing. Simply amazing.
Full of surprises and almost un-noticeable humour. Very good.
2LainanaAmazing. Simply amazing.
Full of surprises and almost un-noticeable humour. Very good.
6/12/2009 c1 15knuckz
Thanks to a strong recommendation by good old MegaB, I gave your story a spin. And let me tell you, it's very engaging. The fight scene just pulled me in; it's descriptiveness and prose was excellent and very imaginable. The feel of the writing is very professional and novel-like; are you a successful author in disguise?
Also, I was wondering if you could tell me something: when Tobirama talked about the chirping of crickets after of genjutsu, did you come up with that by yourself, or does it really apply in the real world? Well, either way, that kind of thing is what really sets you apart, I think. Many authors on this site can write very well in their main body of text, but the small details and nice amount of descriptiveness (not too little, not too much) sets your writing apart, which is something that I've always had trouble with.
Well, keep up the awesome work, and I can't wait to read more!
knuckz
15knuckzThanks to a strong recommendation by good old MegaB, I gave your story a spin. And let me tell you, it's very engaging. The fight scene just pulled me in; it's descriptiveness and prose was excellent and very imaginable. The feel of the writing is very professional and novel-like; are you a successful author in disguise?
Also, I was wondering if you could tell me something: when Tobirama talked about the chirping of crickets after of genjutsu, did you come up with that by yourself, or does it really apply in the real world? Well, either way, that kind of thing is what really sets you apart, I think. Many authors on this site can write very well in their main body of text, but the small details and nice amount of descriptiveness (not too little, not too much) sets your writing apart, which is something that I've always had trouble with.
Well, keep up the awesome work, and I can't wait to read more!
knuckz
6/12/2009 c1 2Ageant
Really liking it! I think you did a great job catching the attiudes of Tobirama and Hashirama. Also, I wouldn't have thought of calling him a woodpecker, I will write that down for later! Anyway I like it, and I think it'll be great!
2AgeantReally liking it! I think you did a great job catching the attiudes of Tobirama and Hashirama. Also, I wouldn't have thought of calling him a woodpecker, I will write that down for later! Anyway I like it, and I think it'll be great!
6/12/2009 c1 3MegaB
YO VA!
So I'm the first reviewer, which sucks might I add. I hate being first, in anything, especially in places other people deserve the position far more than I!
Anyway, this is...few words describe what this story means to FFnet. Not only is it entirely unique, it's practically invited an entire new genre! Nobody has done anything like this before and I won't hesitate to say how awesomely awesome this can become if you handle it well. Then again, if DPDF is anything to go by, I really don't need to be saying this right now.
Tobirama's personality, as always, is a highly entertaining read. I can really get a feel on the rapport between the two brothers and it's amazing that you're already building their characters and it's only the first chapter! You've given the setting a sense of realism by inserting those little bits of information here and there; as if we've been dropped into a world we didn't know and are picking up clues that there is indeed a society beneath the hood that is civilised and inherently complex. This chapter was so many things and I don't have words to describe it fully. Hopefully the more reviews you get, the more opinions will build up and you'll get a clearer picture of why this was such an outstanding beginning.
I'll be advertising this, both in my next chapter and in my forums. So expect a few more reviews to follow! All I can say is that you should still prioritise DPDF since everyone has become enamoured with that already.
Anyway, I'll stop there. Hope this helped!
Best regards,
MegaB
3MegaBYO VA!
So I'm the first reviewer, which sucks might I add. I hate being first, in anything, especially in places other people deserve the position far more than I!
Anyway, this is...few words describe what this story means to FFnet. Not only is it entirely unique, it's practically invited an entire new genre! Nobody has done anything like this before and I won't hesitate to say how awesomely awesome this can become if you handle it well. Then again, if DPDF is anything to go by, I really don't need to be saying this right now.
Tobirama's personality, as always, is a highly entertaining read. I can really get a feel on the rapport between the two brothers and it's amazing that you're already building their characters and it's only the first chapter! You've given the setting a sense of realism by inserting those little bits of information here and there; as if we've been dropped into a world we didn't know and are picking up clues that there is indeed a society beneath the hood that is civilised and inherently complex. This chapter was so many things and I don't have words to describe it fully. Hopefully the more reviews you get, the more opinions will build up and you'll get a clearer picture of why this was such an outstanding beginning.
I'll be advertising this, both in my next chapter and in my forums. So expect a few more reviews to follow! All I can say is that you should still prioritise DPDF since everyone has become enamoured with that already.
Anyway, I'll stop there. Hope this helped!
Best regards,
MegaB