for Catalysis12/28/2016 c11 
17DarkAgea
Damn, I've always keep forgetting to review this, no matter how many times I keep reading the whole story. It was one of the worst things I experienced to know that this was the last chapter; I honestly was ready to spend any amount of free time I get reading this amazing, epic fanfiction. I mean it; it's really difficult to find such a well-written, thought-out and heavily researched fic like this. My respect for the two of you keeps increasing with every chapter I read until I think it's going to shoot through the roof.
To be more specific: I love the premise for the whole thing. It's one thing - Trisha comes back to life - but wow, it has one of the greatest ripple effects I've ever seen. The first meeting between Roy and Ed, and the rest of it, went so well that it's difficult not to classify the whole thing as canon. The way everything slowly built up - the eye stealer mystery, the Persian and Xerxes stuff, hell everything! - is done so well and there's hardly a dull moment in the whole story.
If there's one thing I appreciate in fanfiction, it is research. Whenever there are clear signs of a fanfiction having done its research, I feel my respect for it rising beyond measure. And with the amount of research you two have done, I am completely overwhelmed. The notes help explains stuff well to me; half the things Ed and Roy go on about are confusing to me, and the notes help me understand at least a bit better. I'm not lying when I say this fic is as good, or perhaps better, than many published stories that exist.
Sometimes, I find the descriptions as over-the-top, especially of everything Roy and Ed are eating, but it's impossible not to feel as if you're right there with this kind of writing. If this were any other story, it would have a great chance of turning bland, but this is Catalysis and it all fits together well. Mmm, I can just taste everything they're eating...
I love how canon!Ed and your own interpretation melds together well. There are so many moments where Ed acts so much like his canon self (example in this chapter at which I giggled: Small wonder the Bastard was such a bastard, for such things were best learned from masters.) and yet he is quite distinct.
It's hard not to fall in love with the story, as well as the many amazing moments - Ed proposing to Roy because he wants the library, the constant pervert thing with Roy, and so much else I could rant on about it.
One amazing thing I copy-pasted onto my Notepad file for quotes was the scene where Edward is completely tearing down the transmutation circle that won't work. Every dialogue he gives at that point only makes me crack up harder:
[~ standing for italics]
-"You don't even ~know~ where to look? Dear ~god~, how pathetic ~are~ you?"
-"It should be far beyond an amateur's scope of ~error~. Even an ~amateur~ shouldn't make a mistake as glaring as this."
-"For those of you who haven't, I wish to know which rock you've squished your brains under for the past century and why. For those of you who ~have~, I will assume that ~all of you ~have been in some sort of freak accident and similarly acquired severe amnesia."
- ... And far more but I'll stop here before I flood the page with quotes. Also worthy of mention is Edward's line about Roy's soul - "He might believe in it, but his possession of one is debatable." Ouch, Ed.
The dialogue flows so naturally that I feel jealous of how it all ties together. There's such difference between the characters’ dialogues. And all the amusing barbs and burns are highly appreciated, especially all of Ed's. And the Gate's. I love the Gate and its comparison to a cat; it honestly makes the Gate more of a character. I loved the part the Gate's reveal came up; Roy going completely shocked and Edward thinking himself unworthy of affection - I was so close to 'aww'ing at that scene.
Honestly, sometimes I'm surprised at how much of a manipulator Roy is. It made sense when you said you based him on the image of a perfect courtier, but it's still shocking. Like in the chapter from Roy's POV, I couldn't believe how Roy had planned everything up. It's a bit creepy, and makes me feel Roy has the greatest mind ever in Amestris for all his thoughts and scheming. Are you going to apply canon events by any chance (like Maes' death, the chimera arc with Tucker, Father)? Or will the story be more focused on the mystery of Xerxes?
BTW, just a very small thing I noticed now. Alchemy is misspelled once as 'alchemiy', and 'warmth earth' came up once (was that by chance meant to be 'warm earth'?). I know it's tough to spot minor mistakes in such a large work, but just thought I'd mention that.
Everything going on with Trisha is heart-breaking but believable. For some reason, I'm wishing more angst on Edward by more interaction with Trisha. Just to mention randomly: The moment where Edward broke down and Roy's shocked is just sweet. Like the library scene, this just made me want to go 'aww'.
I think I've covered everything by now (and wrote far more than necessary), but it's more than likely I've missed mentioning something I loved in this (yeah, that scene where Edward talks about the miracles of pregnancy and Gracia is like 'that's exactly what Roy said.'). So, overall, I simply fell in love with this. Like really really hard. I don't think any FMA fanfic could hold a candle to Catalysis' brilliance. It's just amazing.
I'm waiting to see how you two are going to make the parental relation between Roy and Ed to evolve into something romantic (I have to admit I like Parental more, but things are portrayed so well in this that I believe the romance will not be OOC) and how this is all going to turn out. The wait is killing me - I logically know it has not been abandoned (I hope it's not abandoned) but could there be faster updates? I'm willing to sacrifice the length of each chapter for more frequent updates, if only because when I keep stumbling upon this story, I pray to see a new update and when it's not there I just feel down.
~DarkAgea
17DarkAgeaDamn, I've always keep forgetting to review this, no matter how many times I keep reading the whole story. It was one of the worst things I experienced to know that this was the last chapter; I honestly was ready to spend any amount of free time I get reading this amazing, epic fanfiction. I mean it; it's really difficult to find such a well-written, thought-out and heavily researched fic like this. My respect for the two of you keeps increasing with every chapter I read until I think it's going to shoot through the roof.
To be more specific: I love the premise for the whole thing. It's one thing - Trisha comes back to life - but wow, it has one of the greatest ripple effects I've ever seen. The first meeting between Roy and Ed, and the rest of it, went so well that it's difficult not to classify the whole thing as canon. The way everything slowly built up - the eye stealer mystery, the Persian and Xerxes stuff, hell everything! - is done so well and there's hardly a dull moment in the whole story.
If there's one thing I appreciate in fanfiction, it is research. Whenever there are clear signs of a fanfiction having done its research, I feel my respect for it rising beyond measure. And with the amount of research you two have done, I am completely overwhelmed. The notes help explains stuff well to me; half the things Ed and Roy go on about are confusing to me, and the notes help me understand at least a bit better. I'm not lying when I say this fic is as good, or perhaps better, than many published stories that exist.
Sometimes, I find the descriptions as over-the-top, especially of everything Roy and Ed are eating, but it's impossible not to feel as if you're right there with this kind of writing. If this were any other story, it would have a great chance of turning bland, but this is Catalysis and it all fits together well. Mmm, I can just taste everything they're eating...
I love how canon!Ed and your own interpretation melds together well. There are so many moments where Ed acts so much like his canon self (example in this chapter at which I giggled: Small wonder the Bastard was such a bastard, for such things were best learned from masters.) and yet he is quite distinct.
It's hard not to fall in love with the story, as well as the many amazing moments - Ed proposing to Roy because he wants the library, the constant pervert thing with Roy, and so much else I could rant on about it.
One amazing thing I copy-pasted onto my Notepad file for quotes was the scene where Edward is completely tearing down the transmutation circle that won't work. Every dialogue he gives at that point only makes me crack up harder:
[~ standing for italics]
-"You don't even ~know~ where to look? Dear ~god~, how pathetic ~are~ you?"
-"It should be far beyond an amateur's scope of ~error~. Even an ~amateur~ shouldn't make a mistake as glaring as this."
-"For those of you who haven't, I wish to know which rock you've squished your brains under for the past century and why. For those of you who ~have~, I will assume that ~all of you ~have been in some sort of freak accident and similarly acquired severe amnesia."
- ... And far more but I'll stop here before I flood the page with quotes. Also worthy of mention is Edward's line about Roy's soul - "He might believe in it, but his possession of one is debatable." Ouch, Ed.
The dialogue flows so naturally that I feel jealous of how it all ties together. There's such difference between the characters’ dialogues. And all the amusing barbs and burns are highly appreciated, especially all of Ed's. And the Gate's. I love the Gate and its comparison to a cat; it honestly makes the Gate more of a character. I loved the part the Gate's reveal came up; Roy going completely shocked and Edward thinking himself unworthy of affection - I was so close to 'aww'ing at that scene.
Honestly, sometimes I'm surprised at how much of a manipulator Roy is. It made sense when you said you based him on the image of a perfect courtier, but it's still shocking. Like in the chapter from Roy's POV, I couldn't believe how Roy had planned everything up. It's a bit creepy, and makes me feel Roy has the greatest mind ever in Amestris for all his thoughts and scheming. Are you going to apply canon events by any chance (like Maes' death, the chimera arc with Tucker, Father)? Or will the story be more focused on the mystery of Xerxes?
BTW, just a very small thing I noticed now. Alchemy is misspelled once as 'alchemiy', and 'warmth earth' came up once (was that by chance meant to be 'warm earth'?). I know it's tough to spot minor mistakes in such a large work, but just thought I'd mention that.
Everything going on with Trisha is heart-breaking but believable. For some reason, I'm wishing more angst on Edward by more interaction with Trisha. Just to mention randomly: The moment where Edward broke down and Roy's shocked is just sweet. Like the library scene, this just made me want to go 'aww'.
I think I've covered everything by now (and wrote far more than necessary), but it's more than likely I've missed mentioning something I loved in this (yeah, that scene where Edward talks about the miracles of pregnancy and Gracia is like 'that's exactly what Roy said.'). So, overall, I simply fell in love with this. Like really really hard. I don't think any FMA fanfic could hold a candle to Catalysis' brilliance. It's just amazing.
I'm waiting to see how you two are going to make the parental relation between Roy and Ed to evolve into something romantic (I have to admit I like Parental more, but things are portrayed so well in this that I believe the romance will not be OOC) and how this is all going to turn out. The wait is killing me - I logically know it has not been abandoned (I hope it's not abandoned) but could there be faster updates? I'm willing to sacrifice the length of each chapter for more frequent updates, if only because when I keep stumbling upon this story, I pray to see a new update and when it's not there I just feel down.
~DarkAgea
12/12/2016 c11 1CherepMikhailov
I will bad get and bother you for New chapters. I saw your last update date. Please don't drop this fic! Life is harsh, but I believe in you
1CherepMikhailovI will bad get and bother you for New chapters. I saw your last update date. Please don't drop this fic! Life is harsh, but I believe in you
11/26/2016 c11 4aurorareality
If this is discontinued, I will cry.
It's too good. I will not be able to read another fullmetal alchemist fanfiction without thinking about this one. I mean, it's hard to find such a well written and thought provoking fanfiction on this site. I mean, the character development! Not to mention the questions I have- what's the price for Ed having the gate in his head? Will Ed's secret be discovered and who will it be discovered by?
I love the originality, and please never stop writing!
4aurorarealityIf this is discontinued, I will cry.
It's too good. I will not be able to read another fullmetal alchemist fanfiction without thinking about this one. I mean, it's hard to find such a well written and thought provoking fanfiction on this site. I mean, the character development! Not to mention the questions I have- what's the price for Ed having the gate in his head? Will Ed's secret be discovered and who will it be discovered by?
I love the originality, and please never stop writing!
10/8/2016 c11 NatheRiver
lovely work , I would like to read a new chapter ! , hope you can get your inspiration back :)
lovely work , I would like to read a new chapter ! , hope you can get your inspiration back :)
7/25/2016 c11 Guest
Please do update this fan fiction! I enjoyed reading it immensely.
Please do update this fan fiction! I enjoyed reading it immensely.
7/8/2016 c11 3HeroSeekerFrost
Yay! Great story. "Lady Mira likes to deny it but I thinks he really likes Roy," is the "thinks he" in this quote near the end of the second to last section supposed to be 'think she'? Oh! And I loved the story, considering the time it seems you put between updates, I was wondering when I can expect a new chapter? No rush or anything, I just like to be informed. I got a bit carried away reading this and finished it in a day and I can see myself rereading it when you update. Anyways, I wish you the best of luck in writing and life :D.
3HeroSeekerFrostYay! Great story. "Lady Mira likes to deny it but I thinks he really likes Roy," is the "thinks he" in this quote near the end of the second to last section supposed to be 'think she'? Oh! And I loved the story, considering the time it seems you put between updates, I was wondering when I can expect a new chapter? No rush or anything, I just like to be informed. I got a bit carried away reading this and finished it in a day and I can see myself rereading it when you update. Anyways, I wish you the best of luck in writing and life :D.
6/2/2016 c11 Shadow Keeper 35
I really like this story. I blasted through all eleven chapters in about two days (because I have no life), and I found the premis to be both intriguing and well executed, a combination that occurs all too rarely, in my opinion. You clearly have put a lot of time and effort into this, and I really appreciate the world building going on here. The character interactions are superb as well. I hope you continue this at some point, as I would really like to see where you go from here.
Also, is it weird that my favorite character is Ed's Gate Fragment? The mental images there are just too good! XD
I really like this story. I blasted through all eleven chapters in about two days (because I have no life), and I found the premis to be both intriguing and well executed, a combination that occurs all too rarely, in my opinion. You clearly have put a lot of time and effort into this, and I really appreciate the world building going on here. The character interactions are superb as well. I hope you continue this at some point, as I would really like to see where you go from here.
Also, is it weird that my favorite character is Ed's Gate Fragment? The mental images there are just too good! XD
5/24/2016 c11 Outau
Aaagh it's so good! Definitely one of the best fma stories I've read. I really hope you continue it and update soon
Aaagh it's so good! Definitely one of the best fma stories I've read. I really hope you continue it and update soon
5/22/2016 c11 lany-chan
The writing style, the plot, the emotion, the characters,... EVERYTHING is freaking perfect! And I'm really curious about how Hohenheim will react when he know about everything. Anyway keep doing your best!
The writing style, the plot, the emotion, the characters,... EVERYTHING is freaking perfect! And I'm really curious about how Hohenheim will react when he know about everything. Anyway keep doing your best!
4/22/2016 c11 11Gwntan12
So... Are you going to update again? It's been almost two years, as I've seen after checking the last updated date. Please update this again soon. It's a very intriguing story, and hardly any stories that I've ever read has gone into this particular direction. I really want to know what happens next. So once again, please update soon, before I throw a fit at how unfair the world is since all good stories haven't been updated for an extremely long time.
11Gwntan12So... Are you going to update again? It's been almost two years, as I've seen after checking the last updated date. Please update this again soon. It's a very intriguing story, and hardly any stories that I've ever read has gone into this particular direction. I really want to know what happens next. So once again, please update soon, before I throw a fit at how unfair the world is since all good stories haven't been updated for an extremely long time.
3/24/2016 c11 10alqui
This was a beautifully written fic, and certainly the longest I have ever read. I really dislike Russell for some reason, maybe because he's stealing Ed's spotlight. RoyEd is one of my most hated ships, but if written well as in this fic it is a small sacrifice to enjoy the other, more enjoyable elements.
10alquiThis was a beautifully written fic, and certainly the longest I have ever read. I really dislike Russell for some reason, maybe because he's stealing Ed's spotlight. RoyEd is one of my most hated ships, but if written well as in this fic it is a small sacrifice to enjoy the other, more enjoyable elements.