for My lover ghost10/21/2023 c7 Seon Uzumaki
Dude this story could have been fantastic but there's a lot of mistakes in this story. First Momo was a girl and now then mentioned as a boy. Who tf was Arashi? And why he was called Naruto's half brother? And also the way you write the phrase from each character,many times it's literally damn confusing to figure out that which character is exactly talking.
Use this method as my recommendation
Suppose person A wants person B to know about his chemistry exam result and person B asks it.
''Hlw B,do you want to know the result of my chemistry exam'' Person A said. '' Yeah sure,I would love to know'"person B replied.
Dude this story could have been fantastic but there's a lot of mistakes in this story. First Momo was a girl and now then mentioned as a boy. Who tf was Arashi? And why he was called Naruto's half brother? And also the way you write the phrase from each character,many times it's literally damn confusing to figure out that which character is exactly talking.
Use this method as my recommendation
Suppose person A wants person B to know about his chemistry exam result and person B asks it.
''Hlw B,do you want to know the result of my chemistry exam'' Person A said. '' Yeah sure,I would love to know'"person B replied.
2/19/2013 c9 Zuki 217
This chapter is awsome how will hinata come back alive if they try to seal her and what is going to happen to naruto and kyubi. If hinata comes back to life will her and naruto be together right away or is naruto gonna have to suffer a little bit for hinata to forgive him and then finally be together and defeat the demon eater
This chapter is awsome how will hinata come back alive if they try to seal her and what is going to happen to naruto and kyubi. If hinata comes back to life will her and naruto be together right away or is naruto gonna have to suffer a little bit for hinata to forgive him and then finally be together and defeat the demon eater
8/1/2011 c3 mardocheline
well dame if this was going to be OOC you should of given us a heads up^_^ don't get me rong its a little of,but its ok to a tence but ok(/^_^)\
well dame if this was going to be OOC you should of given us a heads up^_^ don't get me rong its a little of,but its ok to a tence but ok(/^_^)\
1/11/2011 c1 
1Soulsercher996
okay...this is awful...I am deeply sorry,but I can't read this anymore... I tried giving it a chance,but its awful...Naruto is not like that...and neither is Hinata...Or Sakura...I suppose your native language is not English...you need to study more..or I don't know but this is just horrible...the theme is not bad,but still...WAY TO MUCH MISTAKES
1Soulsercher996okay...this is awful...I am deeply sorry,but I can't read this anymore... I tried giving it a chance,but its awful...Naruto is not like that...and neither is Hinata...Or Sakura...I suppose your native language is not English...you need to study more..or I don't know but this is just horrible...the theme is not bad,but still...WAY TO MUCH MISTAKES
12/29/2010 c1 ANGELA
thats fucked up! omgg but hes still decides to be with hinata in the end right? i love it btw. xx
thats fucked up! omgg but hes still decides to be with hinata in the end right? i love it btw. xx
7/27/2010 c5 anime loca
plz make more chapters, its really good!
plz make more chapters, its really good!
6/29/2010 c2 JaMisa27
lol kyuubi making more since then naruto! and he almost destroyed a whole freakin' villiage!
lol kyuubi making more since then naruto! and he almost destroyed a whole freakin' villiage!
11/27/2009 c2 Loungyoo
Okay I understand the plot and I like it but does Hinata really needed to get raped? That's the thing that bothers me. But the story is good.
Okay I understand the plot and I like it but does Hinata really needed to get raped? That's the thing that bothers me. But the story is good.