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7/27/2010 c1 12piratechicka
Oh gosh I loved this story! Your idea wasn't "silly" it was incrediably awesome! And strawberry is pink-a lighter shade of red... like blood... Sorry, I HAD to point that out! However, this story was super great! I love it!
7/1/2009 c2 1amethyst-dreams27
This is written with a lot of insight and all, but I felt that it was kind of confusing at some points. I didn't realise all the thoughts were Rachel's until I read the A/N at the bottom after I'd finished reading the story and trying to figure out who was thinking what about who.

Also- "How Shakespeare can this get?"

I thought this line was a bit corny. I think you could've put something more interesting in.

But apart from those thngs, great work!
6/27/2009 c1 amethyst-dreams27
Wow, I really loved this. I don't think it seemed cheesy at all, the milkshake metaphor was a lovely way to describe Rachel's dilemma. Excellent job!
6/25/2009 c1 4JimandSteve
I think you captured Rachel's confussion really really well! I like the picture you painted, using chocolate and vanilla for Bruce and Harvey *thumbs up*

Keep up the good work!

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