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1/21/2010 c1 KyuuketsukiNekko
I know you have a lot of good reviews and this might seem like a flame in comparison, but I thought that I'd point out a few things: You need help on punctuation; you don't have enough in the right spots. Your spacing needs help, too, you have a space after each comma.

You failed to capitalize some of the names, and a lot of your sentences were incomplete. Fix these up and you'll have a better story.

No offense intended,

~Kyuuketsuki_Nekko
7/23/2009 c1 12gaaralover51141
I really liked it! it was really cute and really sad *sob*

you're a really good writer! keep it up!
7/10/2009 c1 15atlantisXgirl
*embrassed* if i was more in touch with my emotions i might acctualy cry...this was very good.
7/6/2009 c1 2Micca5683
Thats so beautiful, it made me cry. you truly have a gift with love.
7/3/2009 c1 23Rocker-Chick-12345
AW oh my gosh I'm like crying right now, and I never cry. This story was excellent.

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