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32Bamboozlepig
Another fine set of chapters, my dear. I'm enjoying this storyline very much, and I love Haley's character. Don't like Vince at all, tho. What was wrong with your writing style? I have yet to find anything wrong with it...if I didn't like it, I wouldn't be reading. You have a wonderful way of turning a phrase that not a lot of writers can do. Just sayin'. Anyway, I look forward to the next couple of chapters...I'm rationing this story out for maximum enjoyment.
32BamboozlepigAnother fine set of chapters, my dear. I'm enjoying this storyline very much, and I love Haley's character. Don't like Vince at all, tho. What was wrong with your writing style? I have yet to find anything wrong with it...if I didn't like it, I wouldn't be reading. You have a wonderful way of turning a phrase that not a lot of writers can do. Just sayin'. Anyway, I look forward to the next couple of chapters...I'm rationing this story out for maximum enjoyment.
6/27/2010 c3 Bamboozlepig
Oh, Miss Haley is quite a character! You create such wonderful female characters in your stories, I'm always sad to see the story end and the character stop. I'm torn between Haley and Weena for Brass...Like Weena's innocence and other-worldliness (literally), and like Haley's sassiness and take-no-shit attitude. Love the line "Do you realize your initials spell VD?" And Shatner as Denny Crane? Only one of his greatest characters EVER! I'm glad to see Major Tom and Carlos, they were so perfect in the other story. I think you have Brass nailed to a T, and Grissom, too. The vampire author and his mysteriousness intrigues me, I have a feeling that I will be reading more about him in coming chapters. Fantastic chapter, I laughed at the banter from Haley and Vincent, and Haley and Brass. Great job!
Oh, Miss Haley is quite a character! You create such wonderful female characters in your stories, I'm always sad to see the story end and the character stop. I'm torn between Haley and Weena for Brass...Like Weena's innocence and other-worldliness (literally), and like Haley's sassiness and take-no-shit attitude. Love the line "Do you realize your initials spell VD?" And Shatner as Denny Crane? Only one of his greatest characters EVER! I'm glad to see Major Tom and Carlos, they were so perfect in the other story. I think you have Brass nailed to a T, and Grissom, too. The vampire author and his mysteriousness intrigues me, I have a feeling that I will be reading more about him in coming chapters. Fantastic chapter, I laughed at the banter from Haley and Vincent, and Haley and Brass. Great job!
6/24/2010 c2 Bamboozlepig
Ooh, I like Haley's character, she is sassy! Gotta love the banter between Brass and her, it's perfect! And YES! Major Tom and Carlos return, whoo-hoo! Color me happy! This is my summer read, and I'm already enjoying the first two chapters.
Ooh, I like Haley's character, she is sassy! Gotta love the banter between Brass and her, it's perfect! And YES! Major Tom and Carlos return, whoo-hoo! Color me happy! This is my summer read, and I'm already enjoying the first two chapters.
3/26/2010 c25 captainbrass
Poor Brass - enjoying himself and feeling guilty at the same time - he is such a great lover!
Poor Brass - enjoying himself and feeling guilty at the same time - he is such a great lover!
10/22/2009 c33 Will F
What an exceptional ending. I never would have guessed. Murder and Scully? Amazing. I hope you will continue the story on that site? I want the chapter with Brass and Weena, of course. Send it over as soon as you can, please. Wouldn't have missed this read for the world. Entertaining and enlightening as to people's psyches. The humor is your trademark and it is why I always check out one of your tales.
Loved the story!
What an exceptional ending. I never would have guessed. Murder and Scully? Amazing. I hope you will continue the story on that site? I want the chapter with Brass and Weena, of course. Send it over as soon as you can, please. Wouldn't have missed this read for the world. Entertaining and enlightening as to people's psyches. The humor is your trademark and it is why I always check out one of your tales.
Loved the story!
10/22/2009 c32 Will F
As you know, I don't like 'kid' stories or happy endings. LOL But this one was done well with humor (the milk coming down from the cafeteria and don't break it, when Brass was about to burb the baby) and finesses.
I especially liked the head nurse who out 'machoed' Brass. LOL. Weena is precious! I am beginning to appreciate her finer points.
As you know, I don't like 'kid' stories or happy endings. LOL But this one was done well with humor (the milk coming down from the cafeteria and don't break it, when Brass was about to burb the baby) and finesses.
I especially liked the head nurse who out 'machoed' Brass. LOL. Weena is precious! I am beginning to appreciate her finer points.
10/16/2009 c33 1MLMarvin
So, the difference of the 'alien' and his position (his kind also)in society and class privileges allow him to live undetected. Good sub story plot. Being a bit melancholy and indulging in the retrospect of his life as a record.
Leaving some mystery alluding to the 'hunt'. He is different, aging, yet a strength and power dwells within him.
His thoughts begin to dwell on his mate(s). His thoughts of morales and scruples but yet referencing his 13 mates. While seeking within himself the desire for 'her' even as she excites him, she is a dangerous guilty pleasure to hunger for.
Then the 'her' becoming Haley in the story, he contemplated his role as Master to the subservient role of herself, yet he without jealousy or possessiveness. As his blood stirs and rises in a bubbling boil as he recognizes his revered elder position and the compliant worship that befits that position.
His only true indulgence for himself comes as he opens the book and nourishes the thoughts of the exquisite journey he intends to embark upon.
Then, we advance to Skully and Mulder and their love and hate disertation. Suggesting the 'vampire' theme as if othe reader would be a blood sucker, mesmerizing the author into a tryst that has been long in materializing during another exquisit journey.
I would love to see what you have gone for in the Brass/Weena chapter.
M
XOXO
1MLMarvinSo, the difference of the 'alien' and his position (his kind also)in society and class privileges allow him to live undetected. Good sub story plot. Being a bit melancholy and indulging in the retrospect of his life as a record.
Leaving some mystery alluding to the 'hunt'. He is different, aging, yet a strength and power dwells within him.
His thoughts begin to dwell on his mate(s). His thoughts of morales and scruples but yet referencing his 13 mates. While seeking within himself the desire for 'her' even as she excites him, she is a dangerous guilty pleasure to hunger for.
Then the 'her' becoming Haley in the story, he contemplated his role as Master to the subservient role of herself, yet he without jealousy or possessiveness. As his blood stirs and rises in a bubbling boil as he recognizes his revered elder position and the compliant worship that befits that position.
His only true indulgence for himself comes as he opens the book and nourishes the thoughts of the exquisite journey he intends to embark upon.
Then, we advance to Skully and Mulder and their love and hate disertation. Suggesting the 'vampire' theme as if othe reader would be a blood sucker, mesmerizing the author into a tryst that has been long in materializing during another exquisit journey.
I would love to see what you have gone for in the Brass/Weena chapter.
M
XOXO
10/16/2009 c33 spottedhorse
The dots are fine. Leaving "the child" without a name is not, lol.
Loved the twist with bringing Scully and Mulder into it. Didn't see that one coming.
Good story. But I would have liked the "JIm and Weena" come home bit, as you know.
The dots are fine. Leaving "the child" without a name is not, lol.
Loved the twist with bringing Scully and Mulder into it. Didn't see that one coming.
Good story. But I would have liked the "JIm and Weena" come home bit, as you know.
10/16/2009 c32 spottedhorse
LOL. WOnderfully befuddled Brass. I'm so glas he has a little boy. And he's so proud of "his accomplishment"
LOL. WOnderfully befuddled Brass. I'm so glas he has a little boy. And he's so proud of "his accomplishment"
10/16/2009 c31 spottedhorse
Poor Jim. He is so cluelss, isn't he...like most men. On to the next chapter!
Poor Jim. He is so cluelss, isn't he...like most men. On to the next chapter!
10/16/2009 c31 Will F
Young Frankenstein knockers! Brass cracks me up. He is leery about meeting her parents. LOL. We find a little about Weena's life in this one. I like back ground. And the Lady Heather remark, I met her in an official capacity that the story and I'm sticking to it. LOL Brass is back!
Young Frankenstein knockers! Brass cracks me up. He is leery about meeting her parents. LOL. We find a little about Weena's life in this one. I like back ground. And the Lady Heather remark, I met her in an official capacity that the story and I'm sticking to it. LOL Brass is back!
10/16/2009 c30 w
As a guy, I understand what Brass is experiencing. I understand why he is so bent out of shape. He has to step up though. He did the deed, he must face the responsibility. I think he did Weena shitty. I hope he works it all out before Weena decides to take another hike.
As a guy, I understand what Brass is experiencing. I understand why he is so bent out of shape. He has to step up though. He did the deed, he must face the responsibility. I think he did Weena shitty. I hope he works it all out before Weena decides to take another hike.
10/15/2009 c32 MLMarvin
An old Irish lullaby and the angels 'r chasin' the devil away, given the child this one sunny day.
Anyway, good move, got the childbirth action down and out, now, introducing . . . Junior! The plot just keeps on thickening, just like chowda'.
Bringing in the 'alien' aspect of Weena into some perspective for Brass, even though he isn't catching it all. Makes for a guilty pleasure of tension and anxiety of what will happen when he does 'open his eyes' to what is before him and takes it all in in full measure.
Making me seriously high following the story.
Michael
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An old Irish lullaby and the angels 'r chasin' the devil away, given the child this one sunny day.
Anyway, good move, got the childbirth action down and out, now, introducing . . . Junior! The plot just keeps on thickening, just like chowda'.
Bringing in the 'alien' aspect of Weena into some perspective for Brass, even though he isn't catching it all. Makes for a guilty pleasure of tension and anxiety of what will happen when he does 'open his eyes' to what is before him and takes it all in in full measure.
Making me seriously high following the story.
Michael
X