for The Life and Times7/19/2009 c3 
22lyin
Adam! whoa, did not see that one coming. one of the things i like the most about this story so far is that you have an actual, super-intriguing PLOT (which, if i remember, is what i liked about ITISNS when i stumbled upon it a long time back now ;) ).
also, i've got to commend you on your originality: i've never seen Alphard Black used as a teacher at all, or thought of it- but considering the number of DADA who went in and out, totally believable, but he's a fascinating, canon! choice. :D also, i've never seen anyone use a Shacklebolt besides Kingsley before, but it makes Donna seem more of a canon-fit than an OC. loved the Sirius and James interaction (especially the worrisome 75th detention. i'd be curious to know how James ended up with more than his partner in crime ;D)
thx for your review reply, as well~ i noticed the 'cute but dim Hufflepuff!' talking to Mary after reading that ;) the Lily-James collision was definitely another highlight~ especially how he couldn't help himself from saying the worst thing possible and her friends' knowing reaction. ;D thanks again for the read and looking forward to more, keep writing!
22lyinAdam! whoa, did not see that one coming. one of the things i like the most about this story so far is that you have an actual, super-intriguing PLOT (which, if i remember, is what i liked about ITISNS when i stumbled upon it a long time back now ;) ).
also, i've got to commend you on your originality: i've never seen Alphard Black used as a teacher at all, or thought of it- but considering the number of DADA who went in and out, totally believable, but he's a fascinating, canon! choice. :D also, i've never seen anyone use a Shacklebolt besides Kingsley before, but it makes Donna seem more of a canon-fit than an OC. loved the Sirius and James interaction (especially the worrisome 75th detention. i'd be curious to know how James ended up with more than his partner in crime ;D)
thx for your review reply, as well~ i noticed the 'cute but dim Hufflepuff!' talking to Mary after reading that ;) the Lily-James collision was definitely another highlight~ especially how he couldn't help himself from saying the worst thing possible and her friends' knowing reaction. ;D thanks again for the read and looking forward to more, keep writing!
7/18/2009 c3 7Whitelight72
Jeeze everyone is trying to kill themselves. How depressing. Now see, you should have James be the one that saved Adam McKinnon too. If he keeps showing up where people are trying to kill themselves, people will start to think he's cursing the people, which obviously he's not, but it would make a great plot twist. Because let's be honest, no other writer actually suggests that James Potter might be a bad guy, but your story kinda has James is a darker place; like with a screw the world, 'I don't care' attitude. I could see people blaming him for it. Well, wow, this has been a really long review. I just want to throw out there that this is probably one of the best written stories I've seen in any category on this website, and from the looks of the Prelude, very original. I can't wait for more, so please update as soon as you can.
7Whitelight72Jeeze everyone is trying to kill themselves. How depressing. Now see, you should have James be the one that saved Adam McKinnon too. If he keeps showing up where people are trying to kill themselves, people will start to think he's cursing the people, which obviously he's not, but it would make a great plot twist. Because let's be honest, no other writer actually suggests that James Potter might be a bad guy, but your story kinda has James is a darker place; like with a screw the world, 'I don't care' attitude. I could see people blaming him for it. Well, wow, this has been a really long review. I just want to throw out there that this is probably one of the best written stories I've seen in any category on this website, and from the looks of the Prelude, very original. I can't wait for more, so please update as soon as you can.
7/18/2009 c3 Queen Moanna of the Underworld
Well, I am now officially hooked. And it was such a nice long chapter too. I'm loving all the mystery and drama. I can't believe James is such a jerk...I keep hoping Lily will snap and do something to put things back in perspective for him. I hope James gets what's coming to him...but that's just me...Keep up the suspense and please update soon. Thank you for sharing your story.
With gratitude,
Her Royal Highness, Queen Moanna
Well, I am now officially hooked. And it was such a nice long chapter too. I'm loving all the mystery and drama. I can't believe James is such a jerk...I keep hoping Lily will snap and do something to put things back in perspective for him. I hope James gets what's coming to him...but that's just me...Keep up the suspense and please update soon. Thank you for sharing your story.
With gratitude,
Her Royal Highness, Queen Moanna
7/18/2009 c2 22lyin
i love long chapters :D enjoyed the read and the character set-up was nice... Marlene as a future McKinnon instead of her married name is an original take (which if i remember write you used in ITISNS too) and i liked her placement in Lily's year this time, randomly, she's always one of my fave 1st OoTP-gen characters; and the inclusion of Mary Macdonald too- though i will say that Mar and Mare seemed to me almost too similar as nicknames. (my personal take on Mary Macdonald is she becomes Mary Cattermole, who Harry & co. rescue in DH ~ how many Muggle-born Mary's of the right age can there be? ;D) with her too-much make-up and bit of a reputation, i wonder if there's a Mary/Sirius pairing possibly coming up... ;)
loved James' dramatic entrance (though, ergh, smoker.) the banter between James & Lily was fabulous; Sirius' dialogue is just spot-on and terrifically entertaining, and i really liked the Slytherin/Gryffindor confrontation. also... a brown-eyed boyfriend for Lily after James was facing a jealous brown-eyed assailant in the prologue? oh. a very likely suspect, especially since Snape is usually described with black eyes in canon and i can't see him being described as 'handsome' the year before. ;D nice work, keep writing and thanks for the read!
22lyini love long chapters :D enjoyed the read and the character set-up was nice... Marlene as a future McKinnon instead of her married name is an original take (which if i remember write you used in ITISNS too) and i liked her placement in Lily's year this time, randomly, she's always one of my fave 1st OoTP-gen characters; and the inclusion of Mary Macdonald too- though i will say that Mar and Mare seemed to me almost too similar as nicknames. (my personal take on Mary Macdonald is she becomes Mary Cattermole, who Harry & co. rescue in DH ~ how many Muggle-born Mary's of the right age can there be? ;D) with her too-much make-up and bit of a reputation, i wonder if there's a Mary/Sirius pairing possibly coming up... ;)
loved James' dramatic entrance (though, ergh, smoker.) the banter between James & Lily was fabulous; Sirius' dialogue is just spot-on and terrifically entertaining, and i really liked the Slytherin/Gryffindor confrontation. also... a brown-eyed boyfriend for Lily after James was facing a jealous brown-eyed assailant in the prologue? oh. a very likely suspect, especially since Snape is usually described with black eyes in canon and i can't see him being described as 'handsome' the year before. ;D nice work, keep writing and thanks for the read!
7/18/2009 c1 lyin
hey, nice to see you writing again! i read ITISNS ages back and just noticed to the new author's alert in my inbox. i like your choice of leaving the last story as it was, especially since i honestly would have never known and probably not reread it and wouldn't have ended up enjoying all the work you're putting into writing a DH-compliant Lily/James fic (which i love). anyway, very intriguing beginning, looking forward to reading more ;D
hey, nice to see you writing again! i read ITISNS ages back and just noticed to the new author's alert in my inbox. i like your choice of leaving the last story as it was, especially since i honestly would have never known and probably not reread it and wouldn't have ended up enjoying all the work you're putting into writing a DH-compliant Lily/James fic (which i love). anyway, very intriguing beginning, looking forward to reading more ;D
7/18/2009 c3 underbabe
I like the way you write this story. :) keep it up. but i there was more lily and james moments
I like the way you write this story. :) keep it up. but i there was more lily and james moments
7/18/2009 c3 Great
This is a great story! I love it! Please keep writing. It's the best i've read in a long time! Hurry up :D
This is a great story! I love it! Please keep writing. It's the best i've read in a long time! Hurry up :D
7/18/2009 c3 0100111
and yes! another magnificent chapter! you've really got the suspense on and i'm so impatient, but i trust you to get everything done right. i like how you just jump straight into it, no preliminaries. fantastic job.
oh, and let me tell you, those who don't review are obviously lazy, and you don't want those on your hands. well, you do... but really, you don't. at least, that's what i tell myself when i'm less than satisfied - for i, i am a review whore. no better way to say it.
keep writing, it's fantastic ^_^
and yes! another magnificent chapter! you've really got the suspense on and i'm so impatient, but i trust you to get everything done right. i like how you just jump straight into it, no preliminaries. fantastic job.
oh, and let me tell you, those who don't review are obviously lazy, and you don't want those on your hands. well, you do... but really, you don't. at least, that's what i tell myself when i'm less than satisfied - for i, i am a review whore. no better way to say it.
keep writing, it's fantastic ^_^
7/18/2009 c3 gonefishing5ever
Wow. I am so hooked. So suspenseful! I love it! I WANT TO MARRY THIS STORY! lol. But seriously, great job! James is a real jerk, isn't he? He gets better though, right (let's hope!)? Hahaha...I really can't wait for more! Please update soon or I shall go into the darkest depths of despair!
Wow. I am so hooked. So suspenseful! I love it! I WANT TO MARRY THIS STORY! lol. But seriously, great job! James is a real jerk, isn't he? He gets better though, right (let's hope!)? Hahaha...I really can't wait for more! Please update soon or I shall go into the darkest depths of despair!
7/9/2009 c2 0100111
so far, i'm intrigued. you've got a great writing style, and that's something i look for in a fanfic. i know, it's not about the quality, but i simply can't stomach poor writing. so, kudos on a fantastic commencing chapter, and i look forward to seeing a continuation. ^_^
so far, i'm intrigued. you've got a great writing style, and that's something i look for in a fanfic. i know, it's not about the quality, but i simply can't stomach poor writing. so, kudos on a fantastic commencing chapter, and i look forward to seeing a continuation. ^_^
7/8/2009 c2 Queen Moanna of the Underworld
For the record, your prologue and first chapter made more sense than most published stories I have read. The prologue was so beautiful...I was having a really bad day and it really put things in perspective for me. Your first chapter was interesting and funny and full of well-written drama. Please continue writing as I would love to see where you take this story. Again, reading your story made my day. Thank you, Jewels.
with gratitude,
Her Royal Highness, Queen Moanna
For the record, your prologue and first chapter made more sense than most published stories I have read. The prologue was so beautiful...I was having a really bad day and it really put things in perspective for me. Your first chapter was interesting and funny and full of well-written drama. Please continue writing as I would love to see where you take this story. Again, reading your story made my day. Thank you, Jewels.
with gratitude,
Her Royal Highness, Queen Moanna
7/8/2009 c2 gonefishing5ever
No! Not enough air! MUST REVIEW! Hahaha... Wow. Just wow. I'm hooked. The beginning was amazing to read! That cliffhanger was just too much! I want to know what happens now! I really enjoy reading you're style of writing! There's just something about it I really like. I love the characterzation of all the characters! Especially Donna and James! There's something about James's character being a smoker/"bad boy" type that I like. :] Well, here's to hoping you update REALLY soon! Keep writing!
P.S. Loved the length of this chapter!
No! Not enough air! MUST REVIEW! Hahaha... Wow. Just wow. I'm hooked. The beginning was amazing to read! That cliffhanger was just too much! I want to know what happens now! I really enjoy reading you're style of writing! There's just something about it I really like. I love the characterzation of all the characters! Especially Donna and James! There's something about James's character being a smoker/"bad boy" type that I like. :] Well, here's to hoping you update REALLY soon! Keep writing!
P.S. Loved the length of this chapter!
7/8/2009 c2 2Mor'ranrFricai
Wow. That. Was. EPIC! I loved it! WRITE MORE! This is... now my favorite fanfic, it is AMAZING! OMG, the character's personality are so distictive, it makes for an excellent story developement. Thank-you for writing epicness! It made my day a whole lot better! WRITE MORE NOW! BEFORE I HAVE TO THREATEN/BRIBE YOU!
2Mor'ranrFricaiWow. That. Was. EPIC! I loved it! WRITE MORE! This is... now my favorite fanfic, it is AMAZING! OMG, the character's personality are so distictive, it makes for an excellent story developement. Thank-you for writing epicness! It made my day a whole lot better! WRITE MORE NOW! BEFORE I HAVE TO THREATEN/BRIBE YOU!