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8/1/2009 c4 SilverLuna77
Yes Sonic you must get rid of that nasty fleebad that's abusing the poor Shadow pup! :D

Yum...more brotherly love goodness... ^_^
8/1/2009 c3 SilverLuna77
...Shadows blind...thats...interesting...

You really do have to sympathise Shads though.

BTW how big is Shadow pup now?
8/1/2009 c2 SilverLuna77
Aw... I love the Sonic Shadow moments, their so cute! ( In all honesty Sonic seems more like a dad than an older brother...)

Hehehe... Shady ate a birdy. :D
8/1/2009 c1 SilverLuna
I love this chapter! And I don't really mind the child abuse, makes it more interesting (I'm messed up in the head I know :P)

It would also be nice if you discribed the setting and the characters looks... especialy what Shadow pup looks like...

(Just a suggestion to make the story more enjoyable) :D
7/21/2009 c5 2HyperShanic01
lol at teh "thats my job"

this chapter was short, but you knew that already
7/20/2009 c4 HyperShanic01
abuse isnt going THAT over board. too me. but then again. i dont really care much for violence. but others do. bah. less work on the scary scenes. i think everyone would like it. lol
7/20/2009 c4 6Genesis.BlazingShadow
Lol that's one bad father. beating his child like that...

would be nice if in future chapters you could heal Shadow's eyesight... i kinda teared up when I read it in Chapter 3...

Also, a little less biting/stomping would be nice... just a little too grotesque for me, but keep going with the switching, head-smacking/whapping, and spanking abuse.

Sad story, but 'Oni-nii(Sonic) really cheers me up!
7/17/2009 c3 Ra the hedgehog
Your evil you made him blind *comes after you with shotgun* anyway good chap but it made me sad
7/17/2009 c3 2HyperShanic01
x_x

i think you over did it just a tiny bit...

but whatever. good twist my friend
7/15/2009 c2 HyperShanic01
this all sounds so very familiar. lol. especially the feather thing,

LOL at the ending. "they didnt sound bad, they sounded cool"
7/13/2009 c2 Midnight1645
I just love the story so far.You got a good mix.
7/11/2009 c1 HyperShanic01
What you mean by the "alternative wouldnt leave me alone"?

Lol. good warning, Child abuse. Lol.

Yep, just like we did all the abuse and beatings. Lol, medacil.

Okay time for a title. I dont care for the peek, since i helped make this.

Werepups Standing

idk and idrc lol. just trying to help
7/10/2009 c1 Hedgiechama
Hiya! I have a suggestion for the title.

Were-san and Oni-nii

What do you think? PM me back plz.
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