for Mistakes6/29/2021 c4 Guest
So, I’ve read this story years ago and I liked it. I went back into it, and now, I just cringe and realize that it’s not good as I thought it was. If the goal was to have a crossover with seed, then please make this story as a crossover and not in the direct Gundam 00 page. It’s not bad, but it’s not good. There’s so many problems with the characters, and honestly, it started off good but then after chapter 4, I lost interest. The OC is just too much. I will say this, Setsuna for example is a hard character to write in general. He’s emotionless, quiet, and hates all sorts of physical contact. For him to express that he’s into someone out in the open isn’t like him. I would’ve found it more interesting if we got something in his perspective and make him not understand the feelings. I’m not trying to bash on the writing, but this story could be re-written and have a couple things changed.
So, I’ve read this story years ago and I liked it. I went back into it, and now, I just cringe and realize that it’s not good as I thought it was. If the goal was to have a crossover with seed, then please make this story as a crossover and not in the direct Gundam 00 page. It’s not bad, but it’s not good. There’s so many problems with the characters, and honestly, it started off good but then after chapter 4, I lost interest. The OC is just too much. I will say this, Setsuna for example is a hard character to write in general. He’s emotionless, quiet, and hates all sorts of physical contact. For him to express that he’s into someone out in the open isn’t like him. I would’ve found it more interesting if we got something in his perspective and make him not understand the feelings. I’m not trying to bash on the writing, but this story could be re-written and have a couple things changed.
2/6/2020 c2 Dontus -not Donut- Powerus
There's so much wrong in this chapter. One, Rina immediately stopped mourning her comarades, two, how did Celestial Being already know how to produce bits or in seed terms "Dragoons" when they have yet not make a single prototype of a weapon that can be controlled unattatched to anything? Third, Virtue is the most powerful unit that they have in terms of fire power. You should've picked Strike instead. Or the one that's piloted by Nicole.
There's so much wrong in this chapter. One, Rina immediately stopped mourning her comarades, two, how did Celestial Being already know how to produce bits or in seed terms "Dragoons" when they have yet not make a single prototype of a weapon that can be controlled unattatched to anything? Third, Virtue is the most powerful unit that they have in terms of fire power. You should've picked Strike instead. Or the one that's piloted by Nicole.
7/29/2017 c12 
13Remiko Okami
Awwww! I love this moment of Setsuna and Rina, finally remembering her! I love Setsuna, he is another crush of mine.
13Remiko OkamiAwwww! I love this moment of Setsuna and Rina, finally remembering her! I love Setsuna, he is another crush of mine.
8/31/2013 c8 Kiman1917
Well... Where to begin... Well for starters, i am severely disappointed with this story so far because it is just a retelling of 00 gundam so far with a couple of oc's. so far, the best chapter I read out of this fanfic so far was the first one and that is because it had originality in it. It had so much potential to be its own story but you just used gundam 00 as a crutch. You had the foundation for a great story and it has been severely weakened.
Well... Where to begin... Well for starters, i am severely disappointed with this story so far because it is just a retelling of 00 gundam so far with a couple of oc's. so far, the best chapter I read out of this fanfic so far was the first one and that is because it had originality in it. It had so much potential to be its own story but you just used gundam 00 as a crutch. You had the foundation for a great story and it has been severely weakened.
3/19/2013 c24 Guest
it's so sad i cried a lot
it's so sad i cried a lot
10/8/2012 c30 16Monty Mason
Hi Alceme,
I recently finished reading your fanfic and must say, its good but can use some work. I know you're working on a sequel and maybe the tips I give here maybe able to help you. I did like the fact you decided to get Setsuna into a pairing. But the whole thing at the beginning felt very rushed, almost like you wanted to give a quick establishment to the whole story and the feelings between Rina/Yue and Setsuna. So the pacing could've used some work, plus Setsuna definitely did seem out of character when you mentioned the parts he blushed at in the beginning of the story. With a little more character interaction between Rina & Setsuna it would've made sense, but that was a tad bit too quick. I did like how you tried to stick as close to the actual Gundam 00 episodes as possible, but to be honest, sometimes the narrative didn't do it for me, that could be because I recently watched the seasons and the movie, so those factors may have lessened my experience when reading it. There were problems with your spelling, but no one's perfect right?
Anyways, on with the sequel for me, let's see how that one goes for me ). And good luck with your writing for the future.
Monty.
16Monty MasonHi Alceme,
I recently finished reading your fanfic and must say, its good but can use some work. I know you're working on a sequel and maybe the tips I give here maybe able to help you. I did like the fact you decided to get Setsuna into a pairing. But the whole thing at the beginning felt very rushed, almost like you wanted to give a quick establishment to the whole story and the feelings between Rina/Yue and Setsuna. So the pacing could've used some work, plus Setsuna definitely did seem out of character when you mentioned the parts he blushed at in the beginning of the story. With a little more character interaction between Rina & Setsuna it would've made sense, but that was a tad bit too quick. I did like how you tried to stick as close to the actual Gundam 00 episodes as possible, but to be honest, sometimes the narrative didn't do it for me, that could be because I recently watched the seasons and the movie, so those factors may have lessened my experience when reading it. There were problems with your spelling, but no one's perfect right?
Anyways, on with the sequel for me, let's see how that one goes for me ). And good luck with your writing for the future.
Monty.
3/10/2012 c30 4kirbam
Oh my god. This is such a beautiful fic. I totally love it and it is truly brilliant! Best 00 fic I've read.
4kirbamOh my god. This is such a beautiful fic. I totally love it and it is truly brilliant! Best 00 fic I've read.
12/30/2011 c30 2Twilight Dark Angel
I LOVE IT i seen the both seasins i can't wait for the seqele for the story i hope u do one because this the obly gundam serie that like the theris were to long so and read your stories i think u are awnsome and i know how it feel be an your last year of highschool so can't wait ^w^
2Twilight Dark AngelI LOVE IT i seen the both seasins i can't wait for the seqele for the story i hope u do one because this the obly gundam serie that like the theris were to long so and read your stories i think u are awnsome and i know how it feel be an your last year of highschool so can't wait ^w^
12/29/2011 c30 6Amatsu Kurosaki
OMG. Did Setsuna and Rina have a kid? My eyes are as wide as saucers! (Or maybe that's just me.)
I'm so anxious for the sequel. I would ask you to hurry, but author's need time to write for the next book/story in a series, so, take your time, I'll be waiting.
Hats off to you and your perfect mix of a love story in Gundam. (Raises imaginary hat.)
~Amatsu
6Amatsu KurosakiOMG. Did Setsuna and Rina have a kid? My eyes are as wide as saucers! (Or maybe that's just me.)
I'm so anxious for the sequel. I would ask you to hurry, but author's need time to write for the next book/story in a series, so, take your time, I'll be waiting.
Hats off to you and your perfect mix of a love story in Gundam. (Raises imaginary hat.)
~Amatsu
12/29/2011 c30 Magby
OMG ITS OVER!T_T loved it tons. There are not many Gundma 00 stories so it was nice to find this one. Hope to see a sequel soon.
OMG ITS OVER!T_T loved it tons. There are not many Gundma 00 stories so it was nice to find this one. Hope to see a sequel soon.
12/28/2011 c29 1Sidako
okay...I just cried...from the beginning to the end of this I just cried and cried..but i pray and hope you'll make a sequel to this story b/c i can say at least for myself i would be VERY happy :D
1Sidakookay...I just cried...from the beginning to the end of this I just cried and cried..but i pray and hope you'll make a sequel to this story b/c i can say at least for myself i would be VERY happy :D
12/23/2011 c29 6Amatsu Kurosaki
That was heartfelt, especially with the scene between Rina and Setsuna. I was crying when Lockon died. He's so awesome!
6Amatsu KurosakiThat was heartfelt, especially with the scene between Rina and Setsuna. I was crying when Lockon died. He's so awesome!
12/23/2011 c29 April Marciano
sleep early tonight kay! thanks for the awesome Christmas present! happy holidays! with lots of love and fluffiness from April Marciano
sleep early tonight kay! thanks for the awesome Christmas present! happy holidays! with lots of love and fluffiness from April Marciano