for That Road To The Sky2/4/2012 c3 Crazy
Hurry up and finish this!
Hurry up and finish this!
2/14/2010 c3 
18Winterluna
Great inclusion of pregnancy ails in this story. The one that I'm waiting to see is the bi-polar-ness (odd). I did, however, like the banter in the beginning, and how it formed the rest of the chapter and the later banters. Very well done. I would, however, include Luke's sympathy a little bit more (I mean, look at his father!).
Once again, well-written and I didn't find any errors in this chapter.
Sorry for all of the parenthesis. I have a little fun writing comments for you!
-WL
18WinterlunaGreat inclusion of pregnancy ails in this story. The one that I'm waiting to see is the bi-polar-ness (odd). I did, however, like the banter in the beginning, and how it formed the rest of the chapter and the later banters. Very well done. I would, however, include Luke's sympathy a little bit more (I mean, look at his father!).
Once again, well-written and I didn't find any errors in this chapter.
Sorry for all of the parenthesis. I have a little fun writing comments for you!
-WL
2/14/2010 c2 Winterluna
You seem to have deep insight into Mara's head. You also seem to make both of their motives quite reasonable and along their characters. But because Mara isn't able to feel, I feel that it will be a challenge for you to indicate how she loves Luke without really feeling much: A challenge you can achieve with the right kind of wit buried in your over-aged brain.
I did notice one error (Academt instead of Academy), which means that you are definitely improving regarding your beta-ing skills.
Overall, well done on this chapter.
-WL
You seem to have deep insight into Mara's head. You also seem to make both of their motives quite reasonable and along their characters. But because Mara isn't able to feel, I feel that it will be a challenge for you to indicate how she loves Luke without really feeling much: A challenge you can achieve with the right kind of wit buried in your over-aged brain.
I did notice one error (Academt instead of Academy), which means that you are definitely improving regarding your beta-ing skills.
Overall, well done on this chapter.
-WL
2/14/2010 c1 Winterluna
Very good beginning. I'm terribly sorry that I haven't been able to review, but you know how it goes for me.
-WL
Very good beginning. I'm terribly sorry that I haven't been able to review, but you know how it goes for me.
-WL
2/6/2010 c3 T420000
I really love this. There interactions are so fun and cute. Cant wait to read more.
I really love this. There interactions are so fun and cute. Cant wait to read more.
1/25/2010 c3 101Jedi Master Misty Sman-Esay
Apparently drinking plenty of water helps with morning sickness as well as motion, car and air sickness. However since I'm not pregnant I can't test the water thing for myself.
101Jedi Master Misty Sman-EsayApparently drinking plenty of water helps with morning sickness as well as motion, car and air sickness. However since I'm not pregnant I can't test the water thing for myself.
10/5/2009 c2 101Jedi Master Misty Sman-Esay
Very Mara-like.
Luke turning to the Dark Side is like stupid. That's why I plan to rewrite the books.
101Jedi Master Misty Sman-EsayVery Mara-like.
Luke turning to the Dark Side is like stupid. That's why I plan to rewrite the books.
7/17/2009 c1 Gray Dawntreader
O, nice! This'll make an interesting story.
I love stories with Mara in them-she's so...howyousay?...well, just the kind of personality I like best. :)
O, nice! This'll make an interesting story.
I love stories with Mara in them-she's so...howyousay?...well, just the kind of personality I like best. :)
7/14/2009 c1 bkwrm
Yay! Another Luke and Mara story. And a happy one at that. There seems to be so few regular family stories involving them and a dwindling number of L/M stories in general.
I can't wait for more!
Yay! Another Luke and Mara story. And a happy one at that. There seems to be so few regular family stories involving them and a dwindling number of L/M stories in general.
I can't wait for more!
7/14/2009 c1 Jedi Master Misty Sman-Esay
I love Mara Jade! I named my cat in her honor. Check my profile.
I can see Mara saying something like that.
I love Mara Jade! I named my cat in her honor. Check my profile.
I can see Mara saying something like that.