for The Not So Blind Date3/5/2011 c6 Guest
This story definitely does have a lot of potential..there's just a few small things that you can fix to make it really good!:)
1. Just a couple minor grammar/punctuation errors here and there,but otherwise your good in that department
2. A little bit of character confusion but its not too terrible
3. Sorry but this annoyed me a lot: you changed derek's "code name" from "V" to "D" randomly on the last chapter..not sure if you caught that or not
4. Derek and Casey are around each other all the time,
So wouldn't they recognize each others voices? Just a thought.
Please please please don't take this as a flame because really it's not! Im just trying to give constructive criticism:) keep working at it and this could be really good!
This story definitely does have a lot of potential..there's just a few small things that you can fix to make it really good!:)
1. Just a couple minor grammar/punctuation errors here and there,but otherwise your good in that department
2. A little bit of character confusion but its not too terrible
3. Sorry but this annoyed me a lot: you changed derek's "code name" from "V" to "D" randomly on the last chapter..not sure if you caught that or not
4. Derek and Casey are around each other all the time,
So wouldn't they recognize each others voices? Just a thought.
Please please please don't take this as a flame because really it's not! Im just trying to give constructive criticism:) keep working at it and this could be really good!
3/5/2011 c6 
11LittleSuzieQ
This story definitely does have a lot of potential..there's just a few small things that you can fix to make it really good!:)
1. Just a couple minor grammar/punctuation errors here and there,but otherwise your good in that department
2. A little bit of character confusion but its not too terrible
3. Sorry but this annoyed me a lot: you changed derek's "code name" from "V" to "D" randomly on the last chapter..not sure if you caught that or not
4. Derek and Casey are around each other all the time,
So wouldn't they recognize each others voices? Just a thought.
Please please please don't take this as a flame because really it's not! Im just trying to give constructive criticism:) keep working at it and this could be really good!
11LittleSuzieQThis story definitely does have a lot of potential..there's just a few small things that you can fix to make it really good!:)
1. Just a couple minor grammar/punctuation errors here and there,but otherwise your good in that department
2. A little bit of character confusion but its not too terrible
3. Sorry but this annoyed me a lot: you changed derek's "code name" from "V" to "D" randomly on the last chapter..not sure if you caught that or not
4. Derek and Casey are around each other all the time,
So wouldn't they recognize each others voices? Just a thought.
Please please please don't take this as a flame because really it's not! Im just trying to give constructive criticism:) keep working at it and this could be really good!
2/10/2011 c6 11FutureNovelist887
Awww! I love it, the perfect Dasey story. Can't wait to read more! UPDATE PLEASE!
11FutureNovelist887Awww! I love it, the perfect Dasey story. Can't wait to read more! UPDATE PLEASE!
2/1/2011 c6 22Hatake Kai
This is cute lol reminds me of A Cinderella Story (One of my fave movies) and yea cute! I cant wait for them to find out that they are each other :) UPdate soon!
22Hatake KaiThis is cute lol reminds me of A Cinderella Story (One of my fave movies) and yea cute! I cant wait for them to find out that they are each other :) UPdate soon!
1/27/2011 c5 zayasXamong
That was good not tacky or creepy at all good job writing stories like this whithout them being odd and creepy is dificult
Kudos
That was good not tacky or creepy at all good job writing stories like this whithout them being odd and creepy is dificult
Kudos
1/26/2011 c5 kr
Nice story. Will they ever have a chance to finaly 'meet'? Let us know by updating soon.
Nice story. Will they ever have a chance to finaly 'meet'? Let us know by updating soon.
1/26/2011 c5 i hate school 123
nice little story
nice little story
1/26/2011 c5 Stephlorhaze
Ooh!
Dasey Dasey!
Bring it on!
Hugs & kisses,
Steph.
Ooh!
Dasey Dasey!
Bring it on!
Hugs & kisses,
Steph.