for Secret no More7/12/2013 c1 
1BatFink
Please don't stop, I want to know what happens next, maybe they could all find out little by little until they suddenly find out it was Alex, by they mean the public and inhabitants of brookland, by it I mean the subject of news stories, underage worker forced to risk life or something
1BatFinkPlease don't stop, I want to know what happens next, maybe they could all find out little by little until they suddenly find out it was Alex, by they mean the public and inhabitants of brookland, by it I mean the subject of news stories, underage worker forced to risk life or something
1/28/2011 c2 a
please, write more:)
you nhave such an ammazing summary, it makes you want to read more :D
please, write more:)
you nhave such an ammazing summary, it makes you want to read more :D
12/27/2009 c2 6witty kitty01
LET THE DISCOVERY BE MADE! PLEASE! love the idea, but please let it happen next chappie!
Write On x
6witty kitty01LET THE DISCOVERY BE MADE! PLEASE! love the idea, but please let it happen next chappie!
Write On x
12/27/2009 c2 12Aspen Starlight
I really like the idea behind this. That being said if I were you I'd try to make the chapters a little longer. At least 1,0 words. If you have a longer chapter then the readers will be happier :D so don't worry so much about updating quickly as long as you have enough content in the chapter you should be okay. Hope to see more!
12Aspen StarlightI really like the idea behind this. That being said if I were you I'd try to make the chapters a little longer. At least 1,0 words. If you have a longer chapter then the readers will be happier :D so don't worry so much about updating quickly as long as you have enough content in the chapter you should be okay. Hope to see more!
11/29/2009 c1 Aquahina
Okay, first of all, you need to update more often, if you're even continuing this story. It has a good plot line in general; a tiny bit clique, but different none the less. But, really, you need to make sure your grammar is better, and to put new paragraphs for each piece of dialogue and subject. It's really hard to read if you make it like that. All in all, update and keep on writing.
Okay, first of all, you need to update more often, if you're even continuing this story. It has a good plot line in general; a tiny bit clique, but different none the less. But, really, you need to make sure your grammar is better, and to put new paragraphs for each piece of dialogue and subject. It's really hard to read if you make it like that. All in all, update and keep on writing.
10/23/2009 c1 6ScribbleWorld
Hm... an interesting idea. Follow up, and update! Also, stories read a lot smoother when there's an indent following each piece of dialogue. It seems you're a pretty good writer, but it takes a lot away from the story itself if you don't use good capitalization and punctuation.
UPDATE!
-Aquahina
6ScribbleWorldHm... an interesting idea. Follow up, and update! Also, stories read a lot smoother when there's an indent following each piece of dialogue. It seems you're a pretty good writer, but it takes a lot away from the story itself if you don't use good capitalization and punctuation.
UPDATE!
-Aquahina
10/22/2009 c1 You-Don't-Know-Who
Interesting...update.
Interesting...update.
9/29/2009 c1 12Aspen Starlight
Pretty good story actually. The idea is interesting at least. I would like to read more so I hope that you can update soon.
12Aspen StarlightPretty good story actually. The idea is interesting at least. I would like to read more so I hope that you can update soon.