for The Bet7/18/2011 c8 smilegracie
I did not like this story much really. The start was okay but as it progressed I liked it less. Draco and Hermione week too ooc. Their friendship just ends like that because she and Draco get together even thigh at they watt Hermione was all for it and started the bet.
Then honestly the part win Riddle was just weird and unneccessary to me and just too much. Not only that but the whole story was rather rushed. I am sorry and realize this sounds harsh but thought you would like my true opinion and not a sugarcoated one.
I did not like this story much really. The start was okay but as it progressed I liked it less. Draco and Hermione week too ooc. Their friendship just ends like that because she and Draco get together even thigh at they watt Hermione was all for it and started the bet.
Then honestly the part win Riddle was just weird and unneccessary to me and just too much. Not only that but the whole story was rather rushed. I am sorry and realize this sounds harsh but thought you would like my true opinion and not a sugarcoated one.
8/25/2009 c8 
7Luckycookie
Aww. . . No! Why did it end?
I'm just kidding, I'm not angry at all. I didn't see the thing with Riddle coming. Ah well, at least he's dead.
7LuckycookieAww. . . No! Why did it end?
I'm just kidding, I'm not angry at all. I didn't see the thing with Riddle coming. Ah well, at least he's dead.
8/15/2009 c7 Luckycookie
I forgot to review this yesterday so I'm doing it now.
This chapter was great. Finally someone is putting Riddle in the story where he is not voldemort. I hope you get what I'm saying.
I forgot to review this yesterday so I'm doing it now.
This chapter was great. Finally someone is putting Riddle in the story where he is not voldemort. I hope you get what I'm saying.
8/10/2009 c6 Luckycookie
Ha! I can review! YAY!
So, I know I told you my review already but I have something to ask.
Is Riona's dad a muggle?
Ha! I can review! YAY!
So, I know I told you my review already but I have something to ask.
Is Riona's dad a muggle?
8/3/2009 c5 7Luckycookie
This chapter was great!
Poor Riona, she should tell her that to F**k off! Maybe she should even run away or something.
7LuckycookieThis chapter was great!
Poor Riona, she should tell her that to F**k off! Maybe she should even run away or something.
7/31/2009 c4 7Luckycookie
I'll say it again cause this time it's true.
Here it goes:
Draco and Riona sitting in a tree K-i-s-s-i-n-g!
Hope you can update really soon.
7LuckycookieI'll say it again cause this time it's true.
Here it goes:
Draco and Riona sitting in a tree K-i-s-s-i-n-g!
Hope you can update really soon.
7/31/2009 c3 Luckycookie
I know I say this a lot but it's true.
This chapter was absolutely brill! I'm serious and not making it up!
Draco and Riona going to the Yule ball togehter. Sweet!
I know I say this a lot but it's true.
This chapter was absolutely brill! I'm serious and not making it up!
Draco and Riona going to the Yule ball togehter. Sweet!
7/31/2009 c2 Luckycookie
He he he...
Draco and Riona sitting in a tree K-i-s-s-i-n-g!
Sorry, I had to write that.
This chapter is awsome!
Oh, I forgot to add the story to my fav's. I'll do it now.
He he he...
Draco and Riona sitting in a tree K-i-s-s-i-n-g!
Sorry, I had to write that.
This chapter is awsome!
Oh, I forgot to add the story to my fav's. I'll do it now.
7/31/2009 c1 Luckycookie
This story sounds cool.
Draco is such an asshole some times.
Ah well...
Going on to the next chapter.
This story sounds cool.
Draco is such an asshole some times.
Ah well...
Going on to the next chapter.
7/29/2009 c3 ladi criiah
i liked all 3 chapter however, i personally, think all the characters are too OOC. I mean, Herminone is nice and cheery however, she is somewhat monotone and calm.and even though she is good friends with Riona, i think she would be advising her that Draco could not be good for her but still give support. Draco is TOO nice. He is so post to be somewhat meaner then you have him. Draco isn't that nice to any mud bloods in the beginning. it's as if your making the characters too nice too quick. I think if you would have had a slower progress with all the HP crew and not such a good bound going on with your OC and Draco, this story would be better.
Please don't take this badly, i'm just being honest and trying to help you improve your story. i hope to read your next chapter and some improvements
i liked all 3 chapter however, i personally, think all the characters are too OOC. I mean, Herminone is nice and cheery however, she is somewhat monotone and calm.and even though she is good friends with Riona, i think she would be advising her that Draco could not be good for her but still give support. Draco is TOO nice. He is so post to be somewhat meaner then you have him. Draco isn't that nice to any mud bloods in the beginning. it's as if your making the characters too nice too quick. I think if you would have had a slower progress with all the HP crew and not such a good bound going on with your OC and Draco, this story would be better.
Please don't take this badly, i'm just being honest and trying to help you improve your story. i hope to read your next chapter and some improvements