
8/7/2011 c2
1I Couldn't Find My Pen
Heya, hope you feel better soon :)
I really like your story so far, I can't wait to find out what happens next with Jasper and Edward, how yor going to work the story and how Seth will be involved.
Can you just try to put in some more punctuation, I got a little confused as to who was talking normally you start a new paragraph. Sorry to be picky.
Apart from that I thought it was really interesting and great especially for your first FF :)

Heya, hope you feel better soon :)
I really like your story so far, I can't wait to find out what happens next with Jasper and Edward, how yor going to work the story and how Seth will be involved.
Can you just try to put in some more punctuation, I got a little confused as to who was talking normally you start a new paragraph. Sorry to be picky.
Apart from that I thought it was really interesting and great especially for your first FF :)
8/12/2010 c2
2TeamSeth2014
I'm sorry about the breakup... but I really like the story you should continue and SOON!

I'm sorry about the breakup... but I really like the story you should continue and SOON!
7/30/2009 c1 Kathey27
MONROSE IS AWESOME! I love 'what you dont know' : ) I liked the chapter and I can't wait for more.
MONROSE IS AWESOME! I love 'what you dont know' : ) I liked the chapter and I can't wait for more.
7/28/2009 c1 EMILAYYYY
hahaha i almost just peed my pants silently laughing. hahaha "oh shit his voice was amazing" I NEVER FELL FOR JAZZY PANTS!
hahaha i almost just peed my pants silently laughing. hahaha "oh shit his voice was amazing" I NEVER FELL FOR JAZZY PANTS!