11/6/2009 c7 23thisaccountisdeadnomorestories
Okay, I really liked the idea, but the grammar was a little much. I also noticed some repeats of words like:

"After pulling away bones then said. “I love you too” she then hugged him."

You could do:

"She pulled away. "I love you" she said, and hugged him."

Also some people don't like abbreviations like omg, when writing you should spell out the words oh my gosh/god.

Otherwise this is very intresting, you seem to have ideas that make people want to read, unique ideas. =) Much better than mine. I plan on reading 'promotion' next =)

This is not meant to be a flame, just a little constructive critisism. I'm not perfect in my writing either.

8/10/2009 c7 csimesser1
that was good

8/10/2009 c7 sweet psychologist
I really really really did NOT like the beginning but you certainly weaved in a B&B ending. Good job.

8/10/2009 c7 mkpint
Very sweet story but sometimes the grammer was a little distracting. Also a minor point but even when using nicknames the first letter needs to be capitalized.

8/9/2009 c6 14irishleesh93
i wonder what Booth will say?

8/7/2009 c5 Aby
The story is good, but longer chapters would be nicer. I like the story though. Update soon.

8/7/2009 c5 irishleesh93
Wow I wonder what Sweets will say

8/7/2009 c5 csimesser1
that was good loved it