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5/2 c13 TheGoodDoctor13
I don't like how they let orochimaru escape, he has 0 chakra and can't even stand. I understand how Naruto is fighting edo tensei Minato, but every other konoha Shinobi watching the fight just watched him crawl away and hide until Kabuto got him, that's so dumb, even kiba could've killed him in the state he was in. I also don't like how Kurama is sealed away permanently in this story but that's more of a me thing than an issue with the plot
4/24 c19 Cthul
There’s a lot to unpack about this sadly unfinished fic. It’s decently written and the plot is well thought out. However its main issues are the pacing and the unnecessary information crammed in bloating the word count. In reality this story is only around 300K words. The other 200k comes from annotations and notes either in the beginning or the end. There’s a lot of exposition that not really needed either but that’s negligible. There’s typos in all the chapters but that hardly matters since any competent reader will understand what’s being said/written. Since this story is more than likely abandoned, if anyone is going to rewrite or adopt this story, please keep everything I’ve said in mind.
4/24 c15 Cthul
Strike one,
For assassins with bladed weapons and weapons capable of long range fire, everyone seems to be more focused on punching and kicking. I also am not a fan of the fact that despite being clearly stronger than their enemies you’re giving their enemies bullshit amounts of plot armor so that they can escape.
4/23 c3 Cthul
I must admit that I got a sense of nostalgia reading this chapter. Though it’s not a crossover, I never thought I’d see characters from Dynasty Warriors appearing in a fanfic. Hell the DW series itself I had a very niche audience and outside of oldies like me I didn’t think people would know and much less appreciate the characters enough to include them in a Naruto fanfiction of all things. Looking forward to reading the rest of this story for that alone. Don’t disappoint me
4/1 c19 axlmolemans
Een superverhaal tot nu kan niet wachten op het volgende deel
3/25 c3 xer2232
Still nothing on naruto?
2/24 c19 4iacopo.passerini
Molto bella questa storia!
12/5/2023 c19 akirathewolflord
Wish this hadn't been abandoned, it is a compelling story, here's hoping the author miraculously picks it back up
11/16/2023 c9 Lil Dollar King V
why the fuck is an ANBU telling a enemy ninja who infiltrated their village and been spying on them their real name
11/16/2023 c10 Lil Dollar King V
nigga where are you getting your information from Hiruzen was way stronger than Minato could ever dream of in his prime he was stronger than Hashirama and Tobirama combined he was Konoha's strongest kage after Naruto and and second in the whole Naruto verse out of all the kages to Naruto. Prime Hiruzen was a beast don't ever discredit him by comparing his prime self to Minato ever dummy that's not a kekkei genkai it's a kekkei mora
11/16/2023 c12 Lil Dollar King V
you forgot another bloodline Naruto would have because of his storm breaker limit and that would be swift release (wind&lighting) you dumbass Minato didn't create the flying thunder god he improved it Tobirama created it
10/23/2023 c1 guadacanaria
bullshit premise
10/23/2023 c3 Blue-Happens
I cant read this. I'm sorry. what little actually relevant info I got from hundreds and hundreds of words was good. but it desperately needs an editing pass or 5, and I'm not talking about grammar.

there has to be more than info dumping, and not every single paragraph needs to be 10 lines long.

good luck with whatever you're doing today
10/22/2023 c2 Blue-Happens
this is such a massive, unnecessary info dump. why is it kurenai remembering this? the omniscient 3rd person would have fed this to us much faster, if we must read 10 years of detailed activity described to us.

better than a memory sequence where all that shit already happened. I understand the instant time skip, I understand that you want to flesh out how it has changed from cannon, but the way you chose to do it is so boring, and it jumps around erratically making it even harder to read.

I hold out hope that after ranting for an obscene amount of time that you'll be comfortable enough to actually write the story instead of describing it
8/11/2023 c3 rudeii
Shit chapter
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