for Star Fox: Deception8/13/2012 c13 Guest
this is so good why did you stop writing?
this is so good why did you stop writing?
12/3/2010 c14 
43general whitefur
Well I wonder what's going to happen to Amanda? Another near death? Don't worry those are great, I love them. Anyways, I think this is a great story and it was one of the first I ever read, so I hope to see an update soon.
-general whitefur
43general whitefurWell I wonder what's going to happen to Amanda? Another near death? Don't worry those are great, I love them. Anyways, I think this is a great story and it was one of the first I ever read, so I hope to see an update soon.
-general whitefur
4/27/2010 c13 18Hopeless-Tyronos
This may sound repetitive...
But I 3 this story thus far.
And I want moar!
18Hopeless-TyronosThis may sound repetitive...
But I 3 this story thus far.
And I want moar!
2/12/2010 c6 Anonymous
jesus how many times are you gunna kill krystal.
good story though (:
jesus how many times are you gunna kill krystal.
good story though (:
11/21/2009 c9 6Odyssey's Burner
Hello my friend. Good to see a new chapter controlled by Baeowulf, good job
6Odyssey's BurnerHello my friend. Good to see a new chapter controlled by Baeowulf, good job
10/6/2009 c7 11thenextboop
Another action filled, plot twisting, Fox-killing chapter! LOVE IT!
KEEP IT UP!
11thenextboopAnother action filled, plot twisting, Fox-killing chapter! LOVE IT!
KEEP IT UP!
8/29/2009 c6 thenextboop
You've NEARLY killed everyone so far; how much longer can you keep it up? lol
ANYWAY, getting better and better, really tight storyline and very very in character. KEEP IT UP!
You've NEARLY killed everyone so far; how much longer can you keep it up? lol
ANYWAY, getting better and better, really tight storyline and very very in character. KEEP IT UP!
8/28/2009 c6 6Of Naught
This was an intense chapter, as well as a mysterious chapter. Keep up the good work!
~ Of Naught
6Of NaughtThis was an intense chapter, as well as a mysterious chapter. Keep up the good work!
~ Of Naught
8/26/2009 c5 1Assassin-clt
Another amazing chapter. Yay!
This is very good for your first story. You have enough description so that you can imagine the scenes and you have enough action so that you don't get bored! Nice combo.
You still haven't fixed the scene switch things. But... yeah. Everything else is fine.
Best of luck, Assassin-clt and...
"May you live every day of your life."- Jonathan Swift
1Assassin-cltAnother amazing chapter. Yay!
This is very good for your first story. You have enough description so that you can imagine the scenes and you have enough action so that you don't get bored! Nice combo.
You still haven't fixed the scene switch things. But... yeah. Everything else is fine.
Best of luck, Assassin-clt and...
"May you live every day of your life."- Jonathan Swift
8/26/2009 c5 6Of Naught
Ooh, very very good with lots of action and suspense. I suggest that you use line breaks to seperate the story sides of different characters. I can't wait for the next chapter!
~ Of Naught
6Of NaughtOoh, very very good with lots of action and suspense. I suggest that you use line breaks to seperate the story sides of different characters. I can't wait for the next chapter!
~ Of Naught
8/26/2009 c4 1Assassin-clt
Whoa. Nice story!
Lot's of death in this chapter. These 'Dopplegangers' (seriously?) are a pretty advanced race. With the shapeshifting, you have made this much more interesting. Congrats!
Your scene switches should have something inbetween them to make it a little less confusing, but that's about all.
Best of luck, Assassin-clt and...
"May you live every day of your life."- Jonathan Swift
1Assassin-cltWhoa. Nice story!
Lot's of death in this chapter. These 'Dopplegangers' (seriously?) are a pretty advanced race. With the shapeshifting, you have made this much more interesting. Congrats!
Your scene switches should have something inbetween them to make it a little less confusing, but that's about all.
Best of luck, Assassin-clt and...
"May you live every day of your life."- Jonathan Swift