for Melissa's Hatred of Star Fleet10/31/2009 c4 miller330
Loved this chapter! Im glad were finally finding out more about her and seeing exactly what has led her here. Now that McCoy has found her, will she have even more extensive issues with her abdomen? Will Kirk pull out more info on her? Or will kirk start to take care of her in a feeling of being in debt? Cant wait for the next chapter!
Best wishes,
~kay Bee
Loved this chapter! Im glad were finally finding out more about her and seeing exactly what has led her here. Now that McCoy has found her, will she have even more extensive issues with her abdomen? Will Kirk pull out more info on her? Or will kirk start to take care of her in a feeling of being in debt? Cant wait for the next chapter!
Best wishes,
~kay Bee
10/31/2009 c4 
11SOUND-Art
This is wonderful! You've really portrayed the characters in a great way, I can see it, although I don't know any of the storyline of the movie or ANY of the characters. You've made me want to watch the movie, so write more!
11SOUND-ArtThis is wonderful! You've really portrayed the characters in a great way, I can see it, although I don't know any of the storyline of the movie or ANY of the characters. You've made me want to watch the movie, so write more!
10/28/2009 c3 2Iratus
Oh dear Lissa is in trouble. Will Kirk live up to his reputation and help her? Will Starfleet want to punish her or use her to catch the rebels? Definitely interested in seeing where this story goes. :)
2IratusOh dear Lissa is in trouble. Will Kirk live up to his reputation and help her? Will Starfleet want to punish her or use her to catch the rebels? Definitely interested in seeing where this story goes. :)
10/27/2009 c3 ChamberlinofMusic
I am very intrigued as to what will happen next! It will be interesting to see Lissa and Kurt's interaction on Starfleet.
I am very intrigued as to what will happen next! It will be interesting to see Lissa and Kurt's interaction on Starfleet.
10/19/2009 c3 9thebloodrose
*grin* loved this. its so well written and you've portrayed the characters excellently. I cant wait to read more.
9thebloodrose*grin* loved this. its so well written and you've portrayed the characters excellently. I cant wait to read more.
10/18/2009 c2 thebloodrose
Wow. Loved it. Great writing and I cant wait to see you continue the cliffie in the next chapter. Please update soon!
Wow. Loved it. Great writing and I cant wait to see you continue the cliffie in the next chapter. Please update soon!
10/18/2009 c2 Repent and no to Hell
Wow, can't wait for another chapter.
You great, hope you update soon.
Wow, can't wait for another chapter.
You great, hope you update soon.
9/28/2009 c1 thebloodrose
A good beginning, and different storyline. Cant wait to read more and to find out why Melissa hates Star Fleet so much. Please update soon.
A good beginning, and different storyline. Cant wait to read more and to find out why Melissa hates Star Fleet so much. Please update soon.
9/16/2009 c1 Llama-In-A-Box
Wow!
Amazing. Great descriptive words, I was really impressed by how smoothly it flowed as well. Don't hesitate when it comes to descriptions, I see you've given the characters "the bones," or personality, but perhaps start to build on that a bit more?
Other than that, a wonderful, perfect reflection of your talent. =D
Wow!
Amazing. Great descriptive words, I was really impressed by how smoothly it flowed as well. Don't hesitate when it comes to descriptions, I see you've given the characters "the bones," or personality, but perhaps start to build on that a bit more?
Other than that, a wonderful, perfect reflection of your talent. =D
8/30/2009 c1 2Iratus
Hi, I always like to check out the writing of those who submit reviews of my work and I have to say that the plot-line looks interesting so I definitely want to see more.
You may wish to consider using a beta reader to help with some of the grammar errors though as there were some issues with verb tense and a couple of words incorrectly used, eg rocus atmosphere and nothing could implement her if she was detained
2IratusHi, I always like to check out the writing of those who submit reviews of my work and I have to say that the plot-line looks interesting so I definitely want to see more.
You may wish to consider using a beta reader to help with some of the grammar errors though as there were some issues with verb tense and a couple of words incorrectly used, eg rocus atmosphere and nothing could implement her if she was detained