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8/18/2010 c9 3Rosejoanna
Cool
8/15/2010 c8 Rosejoanna
Okay
8/8/2010 c7 Rosejoanna
Nice
8/5/2010 c6 Rosejoanna
Cool
7/23/2010 c5 4MarveyTibbsMcGarrettWilliams
i luv it! and i luv the use of a few of my fav shows. las vegas and ncis.
6/13/2010 c4 mandy
plz update soon :)
6/9/2010 c4 tinkerbear10
i love it i hope theres more its awersome please please tell me theres more!
3/13/2010 c1 devoted2know
The summary is excellent and your plot seems pretty good, but it feels like you are trying to stuff too much information into the first chapter and trying to do too many crossovers at once. If you space out the first few paragraphs like the subsequent dialogue is spaced out, it will read much better. Character identification in dialogue is another thing you can work on; you have conversations written out where it is easy for your readers to lose track of who is saying which part. Your punctuation is not too bad, but could be better. I hope you take what I've written here as the constructive criticism it is intended to be, and continue writing, because I think this story has great potential!
1/15/2010 c2 3Rosejoanna
WOW I LIKE IT
10/25/2009 c2 7lovexisxamazing86
pretty good. need to work on puntuation, though. update soon

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