
8/24/2010 c2
53Precious Pup
Well I for one am STOAKED that you are continuing such a great set up. And I couldn't tell there was a year in between chapters. It was great. A lot of emotion and just that sense of silence behind the words that you could feel the awkwardness and Tims despair that his entire life including his career has just been ripped away from him. Wonderful.
Don't worry about us or what we say just write it for yourself...and we can come along for the ride. :)

Well I for one am STOAKED that you are continuing such a great set up. And I couldn't tell there was a year in between chapters. It was great. A lot of emotion and just that sense of silence behind the words that you could feel the awkwardness and Tims despair that his entire life including his career has just been ripped away from him. Wonderful.
Don't worry about us or what we say just write it for yourself...and we can come along for the ride. :)
8/24/2010 c2
3alix33
"Gibbs frowned and dropped to a crouch in front of the bed. He tapped McGee's knee with his knuckle. "Hey. McGee." McGee looked then, tilting his head up only enough to catch Gibbs' eyes. Gibbs didn't beat on witnesses when they were distraught – he was only a hardass with the guilty. He met McGee's dazed, horrified gaze and he searched him the same way he would have any other time he came across one of his guys bloody and scared. "You okay? You get hurt?" McGee hesitated. He looked down at himself, fisting his fingers and wincing at the pull of the dried blood on his skin. It was strange, and painful, seeing that wordy, innocent kid lost for response." - I agree with Gibbs: It IS painful and strange to see Tim not reacting or responding: Even when he was the baby agent on Team Gibbs at least he stammered and tried to get words out when Gibbs asked him something!
"Boss..." He stopped in the doorway, looked back. Tim stood there, his hands tense at his sides, green eyes stark and too-bright on Gibbs. "React." Gibbs frowned. "What?" Tim gestured, sharp and uneven. A vague gesture at the room around him, the apartment, maybe. "Just...react. I have to know...where I stand." He swallowed, pale, the dark smears of brick red on his shirt and up his arms standing out all the more. "Please. I can't deal with..." Gibbs knew that lost look in McGee's eyes, and it ached somewhere deep down. He'd seen in in mirrors for years after putting Shannon and Kelly in their graves. But Gibbs wasn't there to sympathize or share anyone's pain. He was there to do a job, and there to be a leader for one of his people. "You fill out the right forms at the Yard when you moved in here from your old place?" he asked. "All that change of address protocol?" McGee frowned but nodded. Still braced where he stood, like there was a blow aimed for his spine that he knew he wouldn't see coming. "Guess you didn't break any rules, then." Gibbs shrugged. "We don't have all day, Tim. Get dressed and get out of here." He met McGee's eyes, deliberate in his words. "Vance isn't gonna let you near this case no matter how loud I yell, but we can see to it that the rest of your team stays in the middle." McGee understood, of course. Caught the 'your team', the present tense. Caught that he wasn't going anywhere, and that his team wasn't leaving him behind. Just in case those were the reactions he was worrying about. "Okay." McGee nodded to himself, letting out a shaky breath, and looked around him as if trying to place his bearings. "Okay." It was practically visible watching the guy's brain firing into gear. It was only temporary, Gibbs had no doubt, but one less dread seemed to be enough to allow McGee to function long enough to obey Gibbs' orders. It was a start, though. Not much of one, and the start of what Gibbs wasn't sure and didn't really want to think about. But it was start." - Well done, Gibbs!
IMO, you wrote Gibbs totally awesomely in this chapter. AND Tim.

"Gibbs frowned and dropped to a crouch in front of the bed. He tapped McGee's knee with his knuckle. "Hey. McGee." McGee looked then, tilting his head up only enough to catch Gibbs' eyes. Gibbs didn't beat on witnesses when they were distraught – he was only a hardass with the guilty. He met McGee's dazed, horrified gaze and he searched him the same way he would have any other time he came across one of his guys bloody and scared. "You okay? You get hurt?" McGee hesitated. He looked down at himself, fisting his fingers and wincing at the pull of the dried blood on his skin. It was strange, and painful, seeing that wordy, innocent kid lost for response." - I agree with Gibbs: It IS painful and strange to see Tim not reacting or responding: Even when he was the baby agent on Team Gibbs at least he stammered and tried to get words out when Gibbs asked him something!
"Boss..." He stopped in the doorway, looked back. Tim stood there, his hands tense at his sides, green eyes stark and too-bright on Gibbs. "React." Gibbs frowned. "What?" Tim gestured, sharp and uneven. A vague gesture at the room around him, the apartment, maybe. "Just...react. I have to know...where I stand." He swallowed, pale, the dark smears of brick red on his shirt and up his arms standing out all the more. "Please. I can't deal with..." Gibbs knew that lost look in McGee's eyes, and it ached somewhere deep down. He'd seen in in mirrors for years after putting Shannon and Kelly in their graves. But Gibbs wasn't there to sympathize or share anyone's pain. He was there to do a job, and there to be a leader for one of his people. "You fill out the right forms at the Yard when you moved in here from your old place?" he asked. "All that change of address protocol?" McGee frowned but nodded. Still braced where he stood, like there was a blow aimed for his spine that he knew he wouldn't see coming. "Guess you didn't break any rules, then." Gibbs shrugged. "We don't have all day, Tim. Get dressed and get out of here." He met McGee's eyes, deliberate in his words. "Vance isn't gonna let you near this case no matter how loud I yell, but we can see to it that the rest of your team stays in the middle." McGee understood, of course. Caught the 'your team', the present tense. Caught that he wasn't going anywhere, and that his team wasn't leaving him behind. Just in case those were the reactions he was worrying about. "Okay." McGee nodded to himself, letting out a shaky breath, and looked around him as if trying to place his bearings. "Okay." It was practically visible watching the guy's brain firing into gear. It was only temporary, Gibbs had no doubt, but one less dread seemed to be enough to allow McGee to function long enough to obey Gibbs' orders. It was a start, though. Not much of one, and the start of what Gibbs wasn't sure and didn't really want to think about. But it was start." - Well done, Gibbs!
IMO, you wrote Gibbs totally awesomely in this chapter. AND Tim.
8/24/2010 c2
2fullmoonmidget
Can I say you made my day? or...er... night. I've read the first chapter maybe 3 times since I first stumbled upon it, probably not long after you wrote it. It has great potential and some pretty amazing characterization already. It's a little morbid, I think, that this chapter made my day because it really was a little depressing. I love Gibbs reaction. Or, nonreaction as the case may be. And I think I kind of get Tony's reaction, although I'm not going to hazard a guess because I'm probably completely off base. Thank you for not being one of those people who starts a story that looks like its going to be amazing and then abandon it(this is me looking guilty.)

Can I say you made my day? or...er... night. I've read the first chapter maybe 3 times since I first stumbled upon it, probably not long after you wrote it. It has great potential and some pretty amazing characterization already. It's a little morbid, I think, that this chapter made my day because it really was a little depressing. I love Gibbs reaction. Or, nonreaction as the case may be. And I think I kind of get Tony's reaction, although I'm not going to hazard a guess because I'm probably completely off base. Thank you for not being one of those people who starts a story that looks like its going to be amazing and then abandon it(this is me looking guilty.)
8/12/2010 c1
32Wingstar102
Fabulous start! Where the fuck is the rest of it? I'm so not kidding. Please write this. Pretty please? I will beg, grovel and kiss your feet for more. Will worship too! Oh, please write this!
Love and cherries,
Wingstar

Fabulous start! Where the fuck is the rest of it? I'm so not kidding. Please write this. Pretty please? I will beg, grovel and kiss your feet for more. Will worship too! Oh, please write this!
Love and cherries,
Wingstar
8/11/2010 c1 tinypapergrave
Firstly, this fic is all sorts of amazing. It's in-character in every way and I would have no problem imagining this as a canon episode.
I love it. Lots. 3
Firstly, this fic is all sorts of amazing. It's in-character in every way and I would have no problem imagining this as a canon episode.
I love it. Lots. 3
7/29/2010 c1
8Alluring Alliteration
Holy SHIT. Just when I thought this couldn't get more intense... Poor McGee, though. The last person I would want to see at the scene of my lover's death is my boss-especially if my boss was Agent Gibbs.

Holy SHIT. Just when I thought this couldn't get more intense... Poor McGee, though. The last person I would want to see at the scene of my lover's death is my boss-especially if my boss was Agent Gibbs.
7/24/2010 c1 lstladylake
YOU HAVE GOT TO UPDATE! I love this story. Please don't leave me hanging here. The characters are true to form. Continue to update.
YOU HAVE GOT TO UPDATE! I love this story. Please don't leave me hanging here. The characters are true to form. Continue to update.
7/24/2010 c1
1Nekojin7209
please update this again soon! it's amazingly well written and i've only read a preview for it. are you going to continue this story? I hope you will, it's wonderful already.

please update this again soon! it's amazingly well written and i've only read a preview for it. are you going to continue this story? I hope you will, it's wonderful already.
7/23/2010 c1 blacksista4eva
i would like you to continue this story please this seems like a really good one. thank you
i would like you to continue this story please this seems like a really good one. thank you
7/23/2010 c1 tsuchi
eeee! I hope you're still working on this one. I adored 'Have to Drive' - even though I'm not really a Tony/McGee fan - and this one is looking like it's going to have the same quality. I can't wait for the next chapter!
eeee! I hope you're still working on this one. I adored 'Have to Drive' - even though I'm not really a Tony/McGee fan - and this one is looking like it's going to have the same quality. I can't wait for the next chapter!
7/10/2010 c1 redroseprincess678
Hey! I just wanted 2 inform u of a plagarizer in the HP forum. I noticed after reading their fanfiction that their chapter was almost exactly like yours. Please don't let this discourage you in writing-I hope you finish your fanfics! I love them, esp the star trek ones! =D I'm going to report the fanfiction after I submit this review. Here's the link for your own investigation: http:/www.fanfiction.net/s/6110840/1/War_Heroes
Hey! I just wanted 2 inform u of a plagarizer in the HP forum. I noticed after reading their fanfiction that their chapter was almost exactly like yours. Please don't let this discourage you in writing-I hope you finish your fanfics! I love them, esp the star trek ones! =D I'm going to report the fanfiction after I submit this review. Here's the link for your own investigation: http:/www.fanfiction.net/s/6110840/1/War_Heroes
6/22/2010 c1
1acornawolfmoon
WOW. I could actually see the black and white freeze frame shot of McGee at the end there. now the opening credits are rolling...waiting for the ads to get over now...

WOW. I could actually see the black and white freeze frame shot of McGee at the end there. now the opening credits are rolling...waiting for the ads to get over now...
6/10/2010 c1
8MissFee
Wow! Please continue, this is a brilliant start! Love it when Gibbs gets his back up lol! Looking forward to hearing more from you!
Cheers,
Fee

Wow! Please continue, this is a brilliant start! Love it when Gibbs gets his back up lol! Looking forward to hearing more from you!
Cheers,
Fee
5/24/2010 c1
7TakeAWhackAtIt
Oh, please tell me there's more to this story. You've started this off with such a kick- poor McGee!- and I desperately want to see where it goes. I just finished your other NCIS story and loved it- I really hope to see more of this story.

Oh, please tell me there's more to this story. You've started this off with such a kick- poor McGee!- and I desperately want to see where it goes. I just finished your other NCIS story and loved it- I really hope to see more of this story.