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1/12/2019 c58 Demonica-Death
More please
5/9/2018 c43 NOXEOS
you used the songkapag Ang ulan ay malapot na sorbetes! witty
5/8/2018 c32 NOXEOS
I read "blue bloods", took me a second to realize you mean "dugong bughaw"
4/3/2018 c1 larsdewit
i like the idea of this story i really do, but i see it like the Dr. Strange movie, very interesting but it also gives me a headache
9/4/2017 c57 k
I love it when next
9/3/2017 c1 AntitheticalElysium
BORING!
11/7/2016 c57 hatguy
This story lacks a premise, and the first five or so chapters could be construed as one giant info dump. The character, Har, lacks internal conflict and it is thus more difficult for the reader to be drawn into the story, as well as the fact that it's hard to relate to a god. The character does not fit into any archetype. Of the thousands and thousands of stories I've read, I've commented on but a few. I comment here today because you show great skill for someone who speaks english as a second language. Your english is very good, and that is a credit to your country, the Philippines if I am not mistaken. But, you lack the fundamental knowledge of story creation. If you wish to improve as a writer, then you should study the three act structure as well as read "How to write a damn good novel" numbers one and two. As well as "Heroes and Heroines Sixteen Master Archetypes". If you do read those books, don't stop there though, and implement what you learn then you have the potential to be a best selling author. And I don't say that lightly. Your creativity is something to be admired.
2/28/2016 c41 Last few
Last few chapters felt like crap. You should have just skip the year entirely then go with this attempt at humor.
2/28/2016 c12 Guest
Had to post this but rome wasnt 2 centuries before Harrys time so he couldnt have taught remus and Romulus at the time. Maybe 3 thousand years to the creation of rome.
2/26/2016 c57 ollie.cooke.doa
No centaurs at all in the story?
12/19/2015 c2 Just
I imagined that it would be like the Greeks naming there God 'we have ZEUS POSIEDION HERA and Harry
10/18/2015 c57 Mari Wollsch
great, will you ever continua? xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
9/22/2015 c57 11reinforced hell
Are you going to continue? Personally, I would love to see the continuation of this story.
9/15/2015 c27 Foreman88
Ok, yeah. You need to work on your story a lot. My last comment was compounded in this chapter. Harry allows Lockehart to do these things...why? It makes less sense than thr sum total of the story.
9/15/2015 c25 Foreman88
Ha. I don't mind crackfics, but Harry makes no sense. He takes Hermione's magic just for a verbal insult, but Lockehart tries to obliviate him and humiliate him and he does very little?
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