for Your Eyes9/5/2010 c1 
6YumeKioko
Very sweet, and the whole part of when you wrote " Instead of fear, I saw acknowledgment in your eyes
Instead of anger, I saw kindness in your eyes
But most of all instead of hate, I saw love in your eyes"
Is just beutiful. But there was just one verse I thought you should have used less words to express you feelings."What had attracted me to you was your eyes
Your eyes held something that no one else did."
But it's still very good and If your happy with it then I suggest you stick with it. Other then that I was very riveted and moved by your poem. Keep on writing.
6YumeKiokoVery sweet, and the whole part of when you wrote " Instead of fear, I saw acknowledgment in your eyes
Instead of anger, I saw kindness in your eyes
But most of all instead of hate, I saw love in your eyes"
Is just beutiful. But there was just one verse I thought you should have used less words to express you feelings."What had attracted me to you was your eyes
Your eyes held something that no one else did."
But it's still very good and If your happy with it then I suggest you stick with it. Other then that I was very riveted and moved by your poem. Keep on writing.