for Hyo no Kage10/7/2009 c1 
24Ruki44
pretty good. i would suggest you choose either third person or first person and stick with it otherwise it will start to get confusing. also in the next chaped you might want to explain whats going on with Organization XI guy otherwise people will be lost.
i think you have a really good idea going though and keep up the good work :D
24Ruki44pretty good. i would suggest you choose either third person or first person and stick with it otherwise it will start to get confusing. also in the next chaped you might want to explain whats going on with Organization XI guy otherwise people will be lost.
i think you have a really good idea going though and keep up the good work :D