11/10/2009 c1 Sandstripe
I have one problem with your story: you menchon potions and the fact that Kairi can't do magic but, and here's the problem, Sora CAN and if he had seen her like that he would have killed the heartless then used Cureaga on her, if he hadn't done it when he first saw her.
I have one problem with your story: you menchon potions and the fact that Kairi can't do magic but, and here's the problem, Sora CAN and if he had seen her like that he would have killed the heartless then used Cureaga on her, if he hadn't done it when he first saw her.
9/26/2009 c1 3Lunar'sWolf
Aw, this was really good! I love it. Especially the title and how it ties into the story. GOOD JOB.
Aw, this was really good! I love it. Especially the title and how it ties into the story. GOOD JOB.
9/26/2009 c1 4archerrylime
hi there. :)
i don't know much about your stories, but i like your writing... and i don't want any of fanfiction's member quit.
especially the one with possible talent. :)
your writing is good, just need some great ideas that attract people... (not that this fanfic is bad...)
please write more! :D
and as for ideas, i dont know what kind of story do you like to write, so... how about try watching TV/dramas/shows and spread your imagination!
imagine your character do this, do that, what will they do if they in this situation, that situation...
and that's all i want to say.
keep writing!
cherrylime. :D
hi there. :)
i don't know much about your stories, but i like your writing... and i don't want any of fanfiction's member quit.
especially the one with possible talent. :)
your writing is good, just need some great ideas that attract people... (not that this fanfic is bad...)
please write more! :D
and as for ideas, i dont know what kind of story do you like to write, so... how about try watching TV/dramas/shows and spread your imagination!
imagine your character do this, do that, what will they do if they in this situation, that situation...
and that's all i want to say.
keep writing!
cherrylime. :D
9/26/2009 c1 9CHIBI LOLLIPOP
...I REVIEW!
Ok I just checked my Email and read your reply, then this popped up and so I thought 'Oh Sora Kairi...EW.' Then i saw it was you who wrote it (I have you on alert) i was like... 'What the Hell. i read it since i liked your ed/Winry.'
Now I like the whole backtracking thing you did, and I found most of it adorable, sept for the death...
You really captured kairi from the game.
Now once again i have no ideas. I have no idea of what you would like to write, and even if you did most of it would involve Yaoi.
I can understand if you don't wanna write for lack of reviews and i guess i can accept that.
Now heres a few ideas.
I've wanted for a while now to see a story thats written good, where Sora has some mental problem. Not like Retarded mental, but more along the lines of Ocd, MPD, or schitzo. Kairi could come along from some trauatic incident and become his savior...
Yeah thats all i got and if you no like, then oh well. Don't write it.
Ok I still love your writing and I do hope to see more from you.
...I REVIEW!
Ok I just checked my Email and read your reply, then this popped up and so I thought 'Oh Sora Kairi...EW.' Then i saw it was you who wrote it (I have you on alert) i was like... 'What the Hell. i read it since i liked your ed/Winry.'
Now I like the whole backtracking thing you did, and I found most of it adorable, sept for the death...
You really captured kairi from the game.
Now once again i have no ideas. I have no idea of what you would like to write, and even if you did most of it would involve Yaoi.
I can understand if you don't wanna write for lack of reviews and i guess i can accept that.
Now heres a few ideas.
I've wanted for a while now to see a story thats written good, where Sora has some mental problem. Not like Retarded mental, but more along the lines of Ocd, MPD, or schitzo. Kairi could come along from some trauatic incident and become his savior...
Yeah thats all i got and if you no like, then oh well. Don't write it.
Ok I still love your writing and I do hope to see more from you.