for Something is going on behind the walls5/19/2015 c1 Guest
I personally think it is easier to get a shirt off going up then down
I personally think it is easier to get a shirt off going up then down
10/17/2010 c1 rockhorsegeek
Great story, and apart from a spelling mistake and only about 2 grammatical errors, your English was flawless! If you hadn't said english wasn't your first language, i seriously wouldn't have know ! Good job!
Great story, and apart from a spelling mistake and only about 2 grammatical errors, your English was flawless! If you hadn't said english wasn't your first language, i seriously wouldn't have know ! Good job!
9/1/2010 c1 KnowSaneThoughtInSight
English may not be your first language but you write it better then some of the people I know who were born to it. I only caught two major errors:
1)I have to do the mayor effort anyway- mayor needs to be major
and
2) Then don't behave like a missish virgin- I have know idea what missish is supposed to mean
Other then that you have a nice little one-shot
English may not be your first language but you write it better then some of the people I know who were born to it. I only caught two major errors:
1)I have to do the mayor effort anyway- mayor needs to be major
and
2) Then don't behave like a missish virgin- I have know idea what missish is supposed to mean
Other then that you have a nice little one-shot
10/19/2009 c1 
38Yaoi flame
HAHAHA! I can just assume what the dirty minds thought while eavesdropping! I wonder, where they a bit disappointed when they saw that nothing was going on (I presume that aside of Yoruichi, others bumped in the laboratory as well)?
I like this dialog-based story; it is easy to follow, is interesting, has some elements of surprise!
I'm encouraging you to write some more of the fics. I would love to see the development of your work as a ff writer!
:D
38Yaoi flameHAHAHA! I can just assume what the dirty minds thought while eavesdropping! I wonder, where they a bit disappointed when they saw that nothing was going on (I presume that aside of Yoruichi, others bumped in the laboratory as well)?
I like this dialog-based story; it is easy to follow, is interesting, has some elements of surprise!
I'm encouraging you to write some more of the fics. I would love to see the development of your work as a ff writer!
:D
10/3/2009 c1 1StrayDogAndTheMoon
Oh that was funny. I read you're profile and I see you're a big UraIchi fan. An then I read this. I also love Renji,Jinta, and Yoruichi and it's funny to see them trying to easvesdrop on them.
FYI, I was surprised of your OTP. I one of those dorks who read the reviews besides the stories I've read and alway seem to see you also reading ByaRen fics also.
1StrayDogAndTheMoonOh that was funny. I read you're profile and I see you're a big UraIchi fan. An then I read this. I also love Renji,Jinta, and Yoruichi and it's funny to see them trying to easvesdrop on them.
FYI, I was surprised of your OTP. I one of those dorks who read the reviews besides the stories I've read and alway seem to see you also reading ByaRen fics also.
9/30/2009 c1 2KyuuKyuuMoo
It's so funny! Though i had a dirty picture for a minute there-blush- And Yoruichi just, so...wow. Nice story!
2KyuuKyuuMooIt's so funny! Though i had a dirty picture for a minute there-blush- And Yoruichi just, so...wow. Nice story!