for The Key to My Heart4/6/2010 c1 SwordFeather
Ah, people probably told you this already, but when you write "your" it should be "you're" which means "you are". Yup, Hibari's a bit OOC but I think it's ok :D cause Hibari finally opened his heart. Pretty interesting!
Ah, people probably told you this already, but when you write "your" it should be "you're" which means "you are". Yup, Hibari's a bit OOC but I think it's ok :D cause Hibari finally opened his heart. Pretty interesting!
1/2/2010 c4 
10SheDreamsFiction
I really like you story! Do you plan on updating the story any time soong?
10SheDreamsFictionI really like you story! Do you plan on updating the story any time soong?
1/2/2010 c1 chinchilla donut
Hmm, it just seems odd to me that Nozomi seems to just . . . fit in with the group, as if she was there all along. But they just met. And knowing Gokudera, he'd probably call her names and doubt her completely. And you might want to edit these chapters, there's grammatical and spelling errors here and there.
This is criticism, not flame.
-Lulu
Hmm, it just seems odd to me that Nozomi seems to just . . . fit in with the group, as if she was there all along. But they just met. And knowing Gokudera, he'd probably call her names and doubt her completely. And you might want to edit these chapters, there's grammatical and spelling errors here and there.
This is criticism, not flame.
-Lulu
10/30/2009 c4 2fox-white-moon
Wow it very long time since your last updated
hm... relationship between Hibari and Nozomi is not yo be good. It seem that Nozomi still believe that Hibari from the future will love her not Hibari in present time
please! please! please make a romantic scene between HibarixNozomi
please updated more chapter and quick
2fox-white-moonWow it very long time since your last updated
hm... relationship between Hibari and Nozomi is not yo be good. It seem that Nozomi still believe that Hibari from the future will love her not Hibari in present time
please! please! please make a romantic scene between HibarixNozomi
please updated more chapter and quick
10/24/2009 c4 4Ginga no Yousei
*smiles and giggles* I loved what Ryohei-kun said about the smile it was really sweet.
4Ginga no Yousei*smiles and giggles* I loved what Ryohei-kun said about the smile it was really sweet.
10/2/2009 c3 2fox-white-moon
Wow finally you have updated your story!
well Hibari seem starting developed his feeling to Nozomi.
I want to know if this story starting before or after fight with Bakuran in 10 years future?
well please create more romantic scene between Hibari and Nozomi (^-^)
please updated more chapter
I cannot wait to know what happen next
2fox-white-moonWow finally you have updated your story!
well Hibari seem starting developed his feeling to Nozomi.
I want to know if this story starting before or after fight with Bakuran in 10 years future?
well please create more romantic scene between Hibari and Nozomi (^-^)
please updated more chapter
I cannot wait to know what happen next
10/1/2009 c2 2fox-white-moon
Wow your story is really interesting (^-^),
hmm... is this will be HibarixOC because I seem their relationship between future Hibari and Nozomi is more than friend? (after all Hibari did give her necklace)
I love this pairing (HibarixNozomi/OC)
please updated more chapter next
I want to know what happen next please (0_^)
2fox-white-moonWow your story is really interesting (^-^),
hmm... is this will be HibarixOC because I seem their relationship between future Hibari and Nozomi is more than friend? (after all Hibari did give her necklace)
I love this pairing (HibarixNozomi/OC)
please updated more chapter next
I want to know what happen next please (0_^)