for Harmony10/11/2010 c2 RionaEire
You accidentally called her Susan at the start of the chapter, was that intentional? I do want to see what happens next, was Sarah's husband a badguy? Was he abusive to her? Was he blackmailing her so she had to do away with him? How will she meet our BDHs? If you keep writing I'll keep reading.
Riona
You accidentally called her Susan at the start of the chapter, was that intentional? I do want to see what happens next, was Sarah's husband a badguy? Was he abusive to her? Was he blackmailing her so she had to do away with him? How will she meet our BDHs? If you keep writing I'll keep reading.
Riona
10/9/2010 c2 bladefax
not a bad premise for a new character...give it a couple more chapters and see how it develops...good work!
not a bad premise for a new character...give it a couple more chapters and see how it develops...good work!
5/22/2010 c1 
2Confident is my Middle Name
Heh, you write real good, not that i thought you'd such er anything, okay maybe i did a little. This is the first of yer stuff i read, but i'd like ta see you continue it. You've got me hooked, on yer stuff and on this particular story. Keep writing
2Confident is my Middle NameHeh, you write real good, not that i thought you'd such er anything, okay maybe i did a little. This is the first of yer stuff i read, but i'd like ta see you continue it. You've got me hooked, on yer stuff and on this particular story. Keep writing
10/20/2009 c1 RionaEire
You've got me really curious and wanting more. Why is she leaving? Why did the house blow up, is that her doing? Why is her husband's body in there? Very interesting beginning. Really enjoyed your use of new technologies, like the shower scent machine, I'd love one of those. Very creative and on Serenity one doesn't have a chance to make up those things since it is a ship, not a fancy state of the art core mansion. I hope she will run into our BDHs and get aboard the ship. Looking forward to more.
Riona
You've got me really curious and wanting more. Why is she leaving? Why did the house blow up, is that her doing? Why is her husband's body in there? Very interesting beginning. Really enjoyed your use of new technologies, like the shower scent machine, I'd love one of those. Very creative and on Serenity one doesn't have a chance to make up those things since it is a ship, not a fancy state of the art core mansion. I hope she will run into our BDHs and get aboard the ship. Looking forward to more.
Riona
10/18/2009 c1 16Brandywine00
Okay, you've got my attention and definite interest. Who is this woman? Why is she running? Why is her husband dead, and why is the medical cadaver there (assume it's meant to 'be' her?) Where is she going? Inquiring minds want to know... More please!
16Brandywine00Okay, you've got my attention and definite interest. Who is this woman? Why is she running? Why is her husband dead, and why is the medical cadaver there (assume it's meant to 'be' her?) Where is she going? Inquiring minds want to know... More please!