for The Wrath of a Woman Scorned4/16 c18 Jostanos
Poor fool is about to get his butt whooped for his remarks and it won't be pretty.
Hmm... I wonder if that poison may also have a laxative effect as well as any other effect that it has/had originally?
Poor fool is about to get his butt whooped for his remarks and it won't be pretty.
Hmm... I wonder if that poison may also have a laxative effect as well as any other effect that it has/had originally?
4/16 c17 Jostanos
Princess Bride references, I love it! *eye smiles*
Princess Bride references, I love it! *eye smiles*
11/23/2024 c10 Evelinhaimo1
This is excellent storytelling. Enjoyable story with interesting characters, You have a talent and you're using it right. I liked the character of Gaara As an artist, I can create the character art of Gaara in a good price. If you're interested feel free to reach me on my social accounts which is in my bio
This is excellent storytelling. Enjoyable story with interesting characters, You have a talent and you're using it right. I liked the character of Gaara As an artist, I can create the character art of Gaara in a good price. If you're interested feel free to reach me on my social accounts which is in my bio
11/16/2024 c18 death390
Ok i almost didn't put this on follow considering it will be sometime in 3rd/4th quarter next year when you update again from the looks of things, but that part bit sold me for the moment. Still needs the other issues fixed as stated in previous review before I would consider rereading which limits this to a 5 currently, I do see potential for a 7 or even 8 though.
Ok i almost didn't put this on follow considering it will be sometime in 3rd/4th quarter next year when you update again from the looks of things, but that part bit sold me for the moment. Still needs the other issues fixed as stated in previous review before I would consider rereading which limits this to a 5 currently, I do see potential for a 7 or even 8 though.
11/16/2024 c10 death390
Ch7 definitely needs those 2 scenes fleshed out and put in their right order. The order makes a major difference in how Inari would take the advice, naruto then Kakashi tempers the advice and potential fear of her; Kakashi then naruto gives Inari find to put the advice in as it's given possibly enhancing the fear.
Also in this chapter sakura mentions naruto as the nuclear deterrent but that means she must have been told their status but it hasn't been mentioned yet in story. There is a lot of smiling around and it makes for hard reading particularly with no transition paragraph. Like what else happened on the bridge, was the Gato lake cannon or did he show up. Did they leave after Gao died or stay to complete the bridge, etc..
There are also some wrong word errors like using err instead of air in chapter one. Still interested but could use a cleanup pass
Ch7 definitely needs those 2 scenes fleshed out and put in their right order. The order makes a major difference in how Inari would take the advice, naruto then Kakashi tempers the advice and potential fear of her; Kakashi then naruto gives Inari find to put the advice in as it's given possibly enhancing the fear.
Also in this chapter sakura mentions naruto as the nuclear deterrent but that means she must have been told their status but it hasn't been mentioned yet in story. There is a lot of smiling around and it makes for hard reading particularly with no transition paragraph. Like what else happened on the bridge, was the Gato lake cannon or did he show up. Did they leave after Gao died or stay to complete the bridge, etc..
There are also some wrong word errors like using err instead of air in chapter one. Still interested but could use a cleanup pass
8/31/2024 c3 Nyctophilicme
Oh oh oh, this fic is so interesting. The beginning part was so much like a horror movie.
Oh oh oh, this fic is so interesting. The beginning part was so much like a horror movie.
8/10/2024 c18 
15Leaf Ranger
Heh heh heh, that dude is effed. Very, very effed. Tenten ain't playing around.
Nice to see ehr and Termari being chummy here. Nice indeed.
15Leaf RangerHeh heh heh, that dude is effed. Very, very effed. Tenten ain't playing around.
Nice to see ehr and Termari being chummy here. Nice indeed.
7/17/2024 c18 Kaia
well worth the wait! I HOPE WRITE OUT THE ENTIRE MATCH FOR TENTEN vs SHIGERI! that would be incredibly entertaining!
well worth the wait! I HOPE WRITE OUT THE ENTIRE MATCH FOR TENTEN vs SHIGERI! that would be incredibly entertaining!