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10/31/2009 c2 Templar of Honor
Hm, interesting conflict you have here. If pulled off well, you can never go wrong with Slade being the bad guy. Although Slade does seem to be out of character a little, moreso in the first chapter. Just the way you put things didn't feel right. Also the whole bank robbing thing isn't Slade at all. Even if he just wanted to fight the Titans, a bank is not the right setting. Also Slade wouldn't do it himself. He would get someone like Cynderblock or the sladebots to cause a scene and then show up. It just felt awkward when reading it.

I know where you are coming from with Raven opening up now that Trigon is defeated, just don't try to move too fast. It'll be awkward for this sudden change in a character that we are familiar with. These sort of things happen over time, not over night. Also, I know this is a Rob/Rae fic, but the other titans are important to. The add character to the story. Giving them a bunch of one liners isn't all that interesting. Unless people are specifically looking for a Rob/Rae,just focusing on one or two characters kinda gets boring if you don't pull it off well. That's just my opinion. Im interested in where you'll take this so update.
10/31/2009 c2 2bluewasabi24
OMG! WHAT THE HECK! THAT WAS A SHORT CHAPTER! um... sorry for going crazy back there but i was a really short chapter. :) saw no flaws. it was a perfectly written chapter but i was so short. that is all...
10/30/2009 c1 bluewasabi24
um... raven isn't really like that. hm... well nice on the descriptions and setting. the plot... im still not sure where you're going here. though i bet the next chapter will explain. so please update soon. preetty plese. hehe...
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