for Jennie Lucas Strikes Again12/28/2010 c2 
13Nileywriter101
Ok I think I followed you up to this line then you kind of lost me.
" Joe looked at Jen feeling his regrets of hurting her "Guys I think we shouldn't have hurt her just for the death of our parents" he looked at Kevin and Nick who also thought of the same thing but isn't sure what they could do."
Am I right in saying that Jennie is the boys sister who is forgotten a lot and she decides to Ignore them to let them know how she feels.
It sounds really good and it has a lot of potential. I would love to help you write this if you want a co-writer. I love helping new writers.
13Nileywriter101Ok I think I followed you up to this line then you kind of lost me.
" Joe looked at Jen feeling his regrets of hurting her "Guys I think we shouldn't have hurt her just for the death of our parents" he looked at Kevin and Nick who also thought of the same thing but isn't sure what they could do."
Am I right in saying that Jennie is the boys sister who is forgotten a lot and she decides to Ignore them to let them know how she feels.
It sounds really good and it has a lot of potential. I would love to help you write this if you want a co-writer. I love helping new writers.
12/27/2010 c1 Nileywriter101
I would love to help give you some sugestions and maybe help co-write it with you. I can't really give out many suggestion until you elaborate a bit like who is Jennie and stuff. I'm always willing to help people write stiff and give them ideas.
I would love to help give you some sugestions and maybe help co-write it with you. I can't really give out many suggestion until you elaborate a bit like who is Jennie and stuff. I'm always willing to help people write stiff and give them ideas.
10/16/2010 c1 214special agent Ali
hey there, well since you were so kind to review me I'll be glad to give you some pointers.
First off, who is Jennie? Is she Nick, Kevin or Joe's daughter? Is she the boys sister like my Francesca?
and it says she strikes again which doesn't make much sense. It'd make a great sequel if you had a story I mean.
This writing business to me isn't that hard. I just think of a character I want to write about. Whether it be new or old and then plan the story around him or her.
Take Francesca's world, I even made a community for her because she is a never ending adventure. Most of them though she gets hurt sometimes physical and other times just mental feelings.
Jennie seems to be like Francesca to me with the title. Francesca is a very stubborn, feisty child. Jennie seems to be feisty just from title. If your striking again to me it seems like doing revenge on someone.
Anyway this is just my two cents. In all i say just go for it sometimes all you need is to know one person will review and that person will be me :)
214special agent Alihey there, well since you were so kind to review me I'll be glad to give you some pointers.
First off, who is Jennie? Is she Nick, Kevin or Joe's daughter? Is she the boys sister like my Francesca?
and it says she strikes again which doesn't make much sense. It'd make a great sequel if you had a story I mean.
This writing business to me isn't that hard. I just think of a character I want to write about. Whether it be new or old and then plan the story around him or her.
Take Francesca's world, I even made a community for her because she is a never ending adventure. Most of them though she gets hurt sometimes physical and other times just mental feelings.
Jennie seems to be like Francesca to me with the title. Francesca is a very stubborn, feisty child. Jennie seems to be feisty just from title. If your striking again to me it seems like doing revenge on someone.
Anyway this is just my two cents. In all i say just go for it sometimes all you need is to know one person will review and that person will be me :)