for The Hope of the Senju Clan2/27/2020 c5 Luthanora
Liking it so far, but it’s very stilted sentences and conversations are a bit hard to read. I wish it was smoother to read, would be a lot more enjoyable!
Liking it so far, but it’s very stilted sentences and conversations are a bit hard to read. I wish it was smoother to read, would be a lot more enjoyable!
2/25/2020 c7 RitzyKitsune
I just get such a kick out of there being three Jinchurinki in the forest practicing together an no one knowing, not even themselves!
I just get such a kick out of there being three Jinchurinki in the forest practicing together an no one knowing, not even themselves!
2/8/2020 c5 
1marco.enkel
Well... The grammar for this chapter was horrible... But the chapter not so bad
1marco.enkelWell... The grammar for this chapter was horrible... But the chapter not so bad
2/3/2020 c8 This-Mickey-Seems-Iffy
This chapter is beyond stupid. Daimyo in naruto world are nothing more than figureheads they just rule peasants and commoners without any chakra. They only have influence because ninjas allow it, so how you made Tsunade all submissive like that is bullshit if she wanted she could have slaughtered all of them without any problems. Serious are you retarded? It's like a goddess submitting to a dirty beggar.
This chapter is beyond stupid. Daimyo in naruto world are nothing more than figureheads they just rule peasants and commoners without any chakra. They only have influence because ninjas allow it, so how you made Tsunade all submissive like that is bullshit if she wanted she could have slaughtered all of them without any problems. Serious are you retarded? It's like a goddess submitting to a dirty beggar.
1/23/2020 c6 jackmylad 2
Can you check your spelling coz sometimes it changes the spelling without you knowing
Can you check your spelling coz sometimes it changes the spelling without you knowing
1/23/2020 c41 Derry
When are you gonna continue the story?
When are you gonna continue the story?
1/21/2020 c3 Cortax
Kinda hoped naruto wouldn’t hold Kurama it doesn’t really make sense this time seeing as he isn’t an Uzumaki
Kinda hoped naruto wouldn’t hold Kurama it doesn’t really make sense this time seeing as he isn’t an Uzumaki
1/21/2020 c19 SLay KinG
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
1/21/2020 c14 SLay KinG
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
1/20/2020 c8 2Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Let me know if and when you get a beta to fix this. It's not something I want to read while the grammar is this bad
2Kitsune Obsessed FreakLet me know if and when you get a beta to fix this. It's not something I want to read while the grammar is this bad
1/20/2020 c19 SLay KinG
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
1/20/2020 c14 SLay KinG
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
1/19/2020 c7 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Please get a beta to go Through the rest of this story. I'm having trouble wanting to read it even though it's got a decent plot and great idea behind it.
Please get a beta to go Through the rest of this story. I'm having trouble wanting to read it even though it's got a decent plot and great idea behind it.